Well, I mean, you can't say that dragons and humans were
never on earth at the same time -- or else, how would you have dragons in this RP...? :P
But yeah, if the dragons were supposed to exist during, like,
dinosaur time, then that definitely changes things. The whole bit about humans having an instinct to submit to them made it sound like dragons would've existed when humans were evolving, or perhaps when they'd already 'finished' evolving but hadn't really formed societies or anything yet. And if
that's when the dragons were supposed to have thrived, then, well, you can see how that's an issue. XD
If the time gap is that big, then that actually solves most of the other issues I had with this. That being said, you should really edit your race sheet to make it clear when exactly the Draconian Empire was a thing. Like I said, the only thing I recall seeing in there that painted any picture of what time frame this was supposed to be, was the misleading bit about humans evolving with an instinct to obey dragons. o_o"
Ehhhh... I guess....? I dunno, man, I guess I'll think on it until you can re-write your race sheet and all that.
Yeah, and some of the descriptions for individual types of dragons aren't
that bad, but then the general description for dragons as a whole is like,
There's a lot to talk about here, so I'll use bullet points:
- You literally declared that their physical strength, speed, durability, and regenerative capabilities go far beyond any life native to earth. That's a whole lot of qualities to make them definitively outranked in. Like, ok, you want to make dragons super strong? That's cool. But definitively saying that nothing on earth is better than them in all of the listed categories? I don't know if I like that -- especially since dragons aren't the only magical creatures native to earth, and it seems a bit unfair that the dragons can claim dibs at being "literally the best at almost everything"
- "There is no color of light they cannot see" -- I'll admit, the first time I read this, I thought you meant wavelengths of light -- which definitely made this part sound pretty ridiculous, as I can only imagine what an acid trip it would be for every wavelength on the EM spectrum to appear as visible light. :P But then I realized you technically didn't say anything about wavelengths, only colors. But that begs the question... what would it be like to see every color of light? We humans can only even conceptualize the limited range of colors that we can see -- and that limit comes from both the number of color-receptors in our eyes, and the range of EM wavelengths that are visible to us. A mantis shrimp, for example, has far more color receptors than we do. We cannot even imagine what colors a mantis shrimp sees. But if we assume that more color receptors means being able to see more colors, then that implies a theoretically infinite number of colors. How would we ever be able to say that any creature can see "every" color? I'm going off on a bit of a tangent here, but, the point remains, this is just one example of how everything's worded to put dragons at peak perfection... even when it doesn't make a whole lot of sense.
- "no frequency of sound they cannot hear" -- I don't know quite enough about the science of sound to evaluate whether or not that statement makes any sense, but, my point remains -- there's a whole lot of "the X ability of a dragon is 100% perfect and cannot be bested by anything" in this description...
- The whole thing about dragons only growing more powerful as they age is... meh. When you think about it, it really does allow for the possibility of a dragon's power really spiraling out of control and reaching precisely the ridiculous levels detailed here, but, eh... so long as they aren't generally described as being so perfect, I might let it slide.
And the worst part is, being
supreme magical and physical beings doesn't even seem that central to the concept of a dragon... Like, yeah, dragons are definitely supposed to be strong and incredibly magical, according to most lore. But a lot of this description makes them sound like
gods more than anything else.
And, the reason why I don't want to put any hard limits on what sort of power levels things can have is
precisely because I wouldn't be surprised if we have characters later on who are
literal gods. In which case, them having a ridiculous amount of power is considerably more excusable, because, well... having limitless power is sort of central to the concept of a god.
And even then, the way I judge godmoddy potential has more to do with the way that something is written than anything else... It's possible to write a race sheet for gods without harping on every little thing that's so perfect about them. You can say that a being is incredibly powerful without making it sound like you're trying to cover up every possible chink in the armor. But
this race sheet is written such that it sets off those red flags of trying to make this creature sound like it is the literal best at absolutely everything, and listing all the ways that it is completely un-matched. And unlike literal gods, the dragons don't even have that good of an excuse, imo.
You can make them strong. That's fine. Just not...
absurdly perfect, you know?
The part about them having a super-strong sense of smell is fine, though. I didn't see anything wrong with that statement.
