Name: THE iDOLM@STER Cinderella Girls
Gender: Male
Appearance:
CG is a young lad with a clean haircut. His wear is a fusion of a business suit and a fancy tuxedo, as a reference to his Cinderella motif.
Personality:
Also known as Cinderella Girls or CG for short, he has gotten pretty hyperactive since the recent release of his anime. He constantly argues with his big brother iDOLM@STER and his little brother Million Live about who is better, which implies a mildly aggresive attitude. He often boasts of variety and songs, and it is said that his arrogance is second only to his big brother. One thing for sure is that he will always do his best, even if it breaks him.
Despite such a nature, he has a soft spot for girls, mainly due to his worry about his big sister, Dearly Stars, and how he worries about her fading away due to lack of popularity.
Abilities and Equipment:
CG holds the power of 183 idols. These 183 idols have numerous talents, from a variety of music genres, to cooking, to inventing, chemistry and a good deal of mundane stuff. As an extension to this capability, he can mimic the effects of CGI and special effects as depicted in various parts of the series, sometimes to the extent of turning such things real. Is there anything he can't do? Yes, actually.
Home:
Lives alongside his brothers, iDOLM@STER, Million Live, and sisters SideM and Dearly Stars. Also known as the Producers or THE iDOLM@STER Series, these five Producer siblings live in a very large building. The first two floors resemble the interior of 765 Pro, the next floor resembles 876 Pro and the next 30 floors are a hybrid of 346 Pro and various locations present in the series, such as stages.
Quirks:
???
Other:
He has a crush on Love Live!, something that his big brother forbids him from doing. He has previously attempted to convince iDOLM@STER to accept Love Live!, but just can't.
You can often see him taking walks with his big sister Dearly Stars.
Yeah, as I said before, the "appearance" field doesn't have much under it. If you're going to use a verbal description, you're going to have to flesh it out a bit more. If it helps, it would be perfectly alright for you to link to images of several characters and things from the series and use those as a visual reference for your description. For example, saying something like, "he mostly looks like *link* except that X part of him looks more like *link*..." etc. Lots of CS's here have that sort of thing, and it works just fine. The description of his clothing, especially, I think could benefit from this, if there was something specific you were trying to reference with that description.
Additionally, I'm a bit confused about the "idols" mentioned in the abilities/equipment section. Is that just a fancy way of saying that he has all those powers? For some reason, the wording makes it come across like it's some sort of summoning thing, but I don't think that's what you were going for.
The description of his home would also benefit from having some linked images, I think. It's hard to really picture what it's supposed to look like without reference images for things like "the interior of 765 pro". Does that make sense? Let me know if I'm being unclear.
As for the "quirk" section... were you just not sure what that meant? You just put question marks there on both your CS's. Essentially, the "quirk" section is just a little section to jot down some interesting details about bizarre mannerisms and things relevant to your fandom. It's just fun to flesh them out that way. If you want to see some examples, you can look at some other CS's here. Feel free to fill it with fandom in-jokes, too -- the quirk section is pretty much the only place where you
don't need to make any effort to explain aspects of your fandom to people unfamiliar with it.
The last thing I'm concerned about is that there's a lot of reference to CG's relationships with other fandoms. This isn't a
bad thing, necessarily, I'm just concerned about the possibility of you roleplaying with yourself by focusing too much on these relationships -- which is not only problematic
in general in a forum RP, but it's even worse when these other characters don't even have CS's. I'm not trying to accuse you of something you haven't actually done, but, it's a bit of a warning sign for me -- so, I just want to be clear that I don't want to see much of any self-interaction in the IC.
I know this seems like a lot of commentary, but most of it just has to do with adding images. I don't think it should be too difficult to fix.
Name:
Kamen Rider
Gender:
Male
Appearance:
Kamen Rider wears a black overcoat over a green shirt, while wearing khaki shorts. He also dons a read scarf around his neck.
Personality:
Kamen Rider is one to strongly believe in justice, and he opposes all that he deems wrong. He will not stand for the slightest sign of evil. Sometimes, he himself is conflicted with his ways as he does not always know what is right from wrong.
Abilities and Equipment:
He has a variety of equipment, and a good deal of transformation trinkets and related weaponry. His 'Omni Driver' as he calls it allows him to access the abilities of any Kamen Rider in existence, albeit one at a time. His belt also stores a variety of weapons and gadgets within some form of pocket dimension for offense and spying.
Home:
His humble abode resembles the Shocker Base on the inside. On the outside, it resembles the upper half of Kamen Rider Ichigo's head.
Quirks:
???
Other:
He is good friends with Super Sentai.
This CS suffers from a lot of the same problems. The appearance field could use some fleshing out, and the home field should definitely have some reference images for specific things like the "Shocker Base", etc. Also, for the abilities/equipment field -- are there any noteworthy "weapons and gadgets" stored in his belt that could be elaborated on? I'm not quite sure what weapons/gadgets to expect.
Other than those things, though, this looks alright.
Since I can (and will) post for now, here's the first of two CSes (the one Gwazi totally called when I made FE.)
Name: Type-Moon
Gender: Female
Appearance:
Personality: Type-Moon can get really nervous about small things, such as new things, but also about translations to older things. She likes both boys, and hot girls that do awesome things, which I guess would make her bi. She likes the Fate series, but feels like it's a bit overdone. Same with the use of Saber. Gets angry over people not making up their minds because of the amounts of retcons Nasu makes.
Abilities and Equipment: Excalibur, Archer's Coat, the Holy Grail, a shitload of random historical artifacts. Various Noble Phantasms. Various Magic abilities.
Home:
Type-Moon is a... Strange fandom. Her house is a Catholic Church, and she lives with the priest there. Like, actually in the church. Inside of her quarters, though, there's a bunch of stuff. First off, she collects historical artifacts, so those are scattered everywhere. Her room looks like a museum that had a tornado go through it. She also has various vestments everywhere, which wouldn't be so strange, as she lives in a church, except for the fact that most of them are bloodstained. On her walls as well are various whiteboards and papers with notes on what the hell happened, and how that connects to this, and a bunch of confusing shit that makes sense only to her.
Also, the priest knows magic, and is a bit... Creepy. Don't go to any of his services. There's a nice Methodist Church down the street if you want a church.
Quirks: Tends to overcomplicate things, just a tad.
Denies the existence of a Tsukihime Anime
Is huge into debating power levels
Has a dislike for chairs.
Other:
It was late, and I had just finished a huge-ass Science Project. That's why I made this.
Don't judge me, I was tired!
Um... I do normally advise against rushing through CS's and/or posting them when tired, so I do recommend that you look back at this when your brain's running on a good night's sleep and make sure there isn't anything you want to change/add/etc.
For now, though, I'll try to look at this objectively.
I feel like the personality could use a bit more elaboration on her... actual personality, and not just her opinions on things in her series. I feel like I didn't actually learn much about her from reading this. A few sentences on that would probably be enough to fix this issue, though. I don't normally ask for people to go
too in-depth with the personality fields, but... yeah.
The abilities/equipment field could definitely use a bit of elaboration on what exactly each of these things do. I don't know what "noble phantasm" means at all, and, "various magic abilities" should probably be elaborated on at least enough to have a general idea of what sorts of magic abilities she has.
Type-Moon is a... Strange fandom. Her house is a Catholic Church,
Oh hey, I feel like I should associate Trigun with this church. ...But I'll come back to that later.
and she lives with the priest there.
This is the part that concerns me a little. I've always been a bit wary about actual, human (or at least human-
esque) characters living with the fandoms, because it just... doesn't make a ton of sense to me. It's sort of tricky to figure out where exactly to draw the line, because, I mean, Doctor Who has the TARDIS, which is sentient, but like... not in a very obvious way. And then I've been debating giving Steven Universe Lion, which is... a lion, and, yes, it is implied that that lion knows some shit and it is probably much more intelligent than an actual lion, but, it still acts much more like a cat than a human, soo... yeah.
I guess the basic way of putting it is that pets and not-super-human-like-machines are ok but
people, not quite as much. Mostly because of that whole Toy Story analogy that I already explained to Gwazi but I really should make an official announcement about since I feel like a lot of people are confused on this,
especially since I've been really lenient with @Utsuho about this lately and I really should clarify some things...
But yeah, bottom line is, not sure if I'm really cool with a human(oid) priest just kind of hanging out there.
And... I think that's about it for this CS. Oh! And there seems to be some weird formatting, too -- I'm assuming you didn't intend for entire fields to be bolded like that? I'm assuming this is the sort of thing that could be fixed with a readthrough when you're not super-tired.
