Position: Mercenary/Thief for hire
This is not a position available on the ship, pirates would be very unlikely to want to pay someone to do something most would do for free, especially when payment enough is protection from the crew. If you mean you'd do this
for the crew, this means you would offer no services at sea which is unacceptable on any crew; every hand pulls its weight. Open positions are; Helmsman, Carpenter, and Gunner.
Your wish: To disappear without leaving any memory of her existence.
Edgy as fuck
Mentions of family will usually make her very uncomfortable she may start tapping her fingers restlessly and have the itching to grab one of her daggers. Of course this is a side of her that she does not like to show and will usually break out in violence if brought up.
This seems very contradictory to me. She tries to hide that she wants to grab one of her daggers by breaking out into violence? Surely if she were trying to hide it she'd consciously suppress this desire.
2 dual daggers one has a dark black handle with an opal in the middle of it. The second has a white handle with an onyx gem in it.
How long are the blades? Straight blade or curved? Single or double edged? Hard or soft blade?
She will almost always have throwing daggers on her as well as needles.
How many throwing daggers of what size/weight? How many needles of what length? Needles don't need an exact measurement, but is this a pouch, pocket, pack, or just a few pinned in her clothing to act as a secret hide-able weapon?
SHE WILL NEVER MAKE A POISON WITHOUT A CURE.
For me...Please remove the capslock. Also, in terms of poisons, the word you're looking for is Antidote. Don't mean to nitpick, but nitpicking anyway.
Being a thief she may quickly graze by you and poke you with a poison coated needle, it can range anywhere from a drug for sleep or a fatal dosage of poison.
Just remember, a mere poke with a needle on a Dragoon? Not gonna break their tough scales. On a berserker? They're Berserkers, it takes a bit more than a bit of poison to take out their intense durability, especially with their natural resistance. Poisons and toxins don't work on Espers. This makes this particular bit useful on less than 50% of the worlds population. This is fine especially considering her home origins, just making sure you're informed.
Seeing Eyes
Due to her interest in poisons and medicines she ended up with a power that determines effects of plants and what would work best on an illness. This also has the ability to show poisonous plants and the suitable uses for them.
Passive or active?
Aggravation
She tends to be able to hit the spots you don't want people to hit usually making people really angry at her.
Deduction
She is very capable to notice when a situation turns and how to get out of the situation in front of her. She also tends to map out where she is to memorize a good escape route.
You could condense this down to "Observational"
This is the part I hate criticizing. The writing in this section is lacking a lot of punctuation and a lot of grammatical errors can be found throughout the story. Some sentences have very awkward phrasings and choices of words. With no spacing between paragraphs and no indentations, it can be really hard to see where 1 paragraph ends and the other begins. Overall it looks like a massive wall of text. It's an easy fix, and I'm willing to work with you on this but I do need to point it out. This thread is tagged as "Posting Expectations: Adept" which is one step above intermediate. Intermediate reads as follows;
INTERMEDIATE
At this level, you should exhibit a distinct writing voice and style. All players must be familiar with common grammar and punctuation and write clearly legible posts with varied sentence structure. You will be expected to have more fleshed-out characters and adhere to the setting.
The character clearly has some thought, but as we are one step above intermediate this means I'm going to demand better use of your punctuation and word placements. As I said, I'm not immediately hanging you up and I am willing to work with you, but I do need you to be aware that right now the level of writing I desire is not yet met. You're new to the site so I desperately don't want to leave you under the impression that this is what the community here is like, but I still do need to make a stand here.
