Naruto - A New Legend - Squad Thirteen's Journey

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I've been waiting for people to say "I am done"

Looking at your CS
What do you mean by?
-Chakra Absorption Techniques.
-Chakra Flow


Also you need links to your actual jutsu. Or put them under custom ninjutsu with a description etc.
 
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This week is finals week. I'm behind all CS's and i've only joined 3 or so group rps. I did notify you ahead of time that only my CS's will be behind for now.

I'm technically done with the main stuff, i just need the justus.
 
Jutsu are still a big part of a character in this sort of roleplay so that's why I still need to wait for you to complete the sheet and yes I understand that you would be late since you have finals.
 
Done. Do I need to explain the AS and genin jutsu?
And how much ninjutsu should I add?

Anything else?
 
You misunderstood what I meant by list the jutsu. I didn't mean put an explanation underneath them I meant do something like this. Also I know I forgot to mention this: Please remove chakra absorption I don't believe there's a reason for your character to have it.​
Jutsu:
Wood Release - Wood Clone - Mitsuhide is is an extremely talented user of Ninjutsu but even he is unable to make a clone without a sturggle. At his young inexperienced age he is only capable of making a single clone at a time and has a limit of three without using any other jutsu or chakra. However it is still rather crude in terms of form. - http://naruto.wikia.com/wiki/Wood_Clone_Technique
Wood Release: Cutting Sabers of Wood - http://naruto.wikia.com/wiki/Wood_Release:_Cutting_Technique
Mitsuhide uses this technique as a way to make swords without carrying them around. He doesn't tend to use these as a way of defending and purely uses them for the aforementioned.
Wood Release: Threefolded Wood Shield - A smaller version of the shield used by Yamato in the anime - http://naruto.wikia.com/wiki/Wood_Release:_Threefolded_Wood_Shield​
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Or in the case there is no canon variant that is available for Genin then you need to do something like this:

Custom Jutsu:
Name of Technique: Wind Release: Wind Bullet
Type of Jutsu:Nin
Rank:. C
Range: Mid to Long
Nature Type: Wind

Description: Galan inhales deeply and then blows a circular sphere of air at the enemy impacting with strong force capable of breaking bones with large amounts of chakra.

Weakness: Can't be used in close range of the user because it does not have enough time to consolidate itself properly. It can't hit through solid objects such as walls but can destroy them. Weaker verisons of it are less effective making it more of a concussive shock rather then pure force
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Why? Uzumaki have no chakra absorption techniques nor are there any medical ninjutsu technqiues a genin should have. Nor does your character have any reason for it. She's not a member of Jugo's clan (Which only absorbs nature based chakra passively), she's not a part of some medical group that performed experiments (ANBU, Orochimaru's Team, etc and both of those have the problems of why they'd be in a public academy in the first case and the former not existing), and she already has great chakra control for a genin to the point where can use it pin point accuracy (Name one genin fresh out of the academy who can do that besides maybe Itachi who is a genius).

The Uzumaki clan already have great endurance, chakra levels, Fūinjutsu, and the ability to heal naturally. Not to mention you're a female so you get some boosts from that.

Mitsuhide has no genjutsu talent but makes up for it by having a clan naturally gifted in the same things as yours to a lesser extent and the First's KG which he has worked extensively with his family to learn how to use it since he figured out he had it.

Shadow's Hyuga has a few main clan techniques but I haven't bothered him over it because he said he'd fix it or add reasons for it.

And N/A has a talented young lady who belongs to the Hatake clan with the only real special thing about her being that she's got a tailed beast inside of her.
 
As it stands N/A I believe your character is good enough for acception if your done with it.

@Shadowy Are you still in this roleplay?
 
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Since Shadow hasn't replied I'll assume he has left and give his spot to Avalon Knight.
 
The chakra absorption could come from her mother's side.
And I feel like without it her ''specialities'' are just for medical-nin. Not very exciting. ):

I wrote all of her jutsu (The ones I explained) are in genin range.
Will add the rest of the jutsu's today.

Did anyone else finish up their character?
 
To answer the question of finished characters: No Avalon has his idea ready and I'm assuming Shadow is out as he/she has not posted in awhile. I even directly asked if he/she was here with no reply.
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This is the extent of your actual bio. As far as I'm concerned your bio has nothing explaining it at all other than her family life is great and she excelled in chakra control.

Misaki, Daughter of Boruto and Assa Uzumaki. Has an older brother named Ryuu. Her family is loving and Misaki didn't miss a thing growing up. During her times at the academy, Misaki was good in one particular field. Chakra control. That ability bonds with her Kekkei Genkai. She used that small knowledge to chose the path of a healer. Along this short journey Misaki took an interest in liquids, creams and others, and not just those used for healing.
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She has the power to heal people and she has the power to use chains to bind people along side the large chakra pool and endurance granted by her genes as an Uzumaki. Nowhere does it explain why she has it simply that she does have it. Uzumaki Clan on the wiki has no sign that they have this ability. There nearest thing you get is Karin who:

As seen with Karin, she can further enhance her healing powers, by biting herself[6]​ and consuming some of her own chakra she can heal most injuries, and can heal others by letting another person bite her.
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The main Uzumaki with known abilities are:
Karin - Medical Ninja: Heals people with her chakra and doesn't take it from anyone.

Nagato: Rinnegan abilities. He doesn't have the natural ability to absorb chakra and the ability to do so is granted to one of the paths. http://naruto.wikia.com/wiki/Blocking_Technique_Absorption_Seal

Naruto: Rasengan and shadow clones with the nine tails.

Kushina: Has no known techniques outside of funjutsu and her chains

The wiki lists no chakra absorption techniques either under Uzumaki clan members.

http://naruto.wikia.com/wiki/Chakra_Absorption_Techniques

As it stands it is an ability I will not allow for any character as it is too strong and as the above link states while Mitsuhide has the ability to suppress it in the future with wood style it won't come into play unless it's directly linked to N/A's beast.

Also as it stands you have yet to make the CS's jutsu section the way I asked in anyway shape or form even after directly saying how it should look. and again I'll show you it this time the way N/A did it is the way it should be.

Canon Jutsu
Paper clone Technique: Sayuri is skilled at making paper clones of herself, and prefers this version of the clone jutsu because she finds it more effective, as she is also able to tag the clones with hidden paper bombs as well. But she can also create multiples of these clones. When hit they disperse into various things in paper. Scattered flowers or bats to blind/confuse the victim, birds in order to claw the victim, etc.
Fire release: Ash Pile Burning: A skill used adeptly by the Sarutobi clan, Sayuri has no problem using this jutsu. But of course it takes up a lot of Chakra -keep in mind, she's still a genin-. So she can probably use it about once or twice as of right now -with long breaks in between-.
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The only absorbtion technique I'll consider is one that siphons a person's physical energy and not chakra. The ability to take a person's energy is one thing the ability to take one's chakra allows a person to basically nullify any chance of fighting with chakra based jutsu. At the very least skilled taijutsu specialists can easily break the holds.
 
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For a sec i thought i got in trouble cause you wanted more justus when i saw you quote me XD
 
No you're fine as I've already said. The only things I'd say are a bit out of place is that your parents have no names but that is a minor detail that can be thrown in when needed so isn't really important.
 
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Avalon said:

Just here to let you know I'll finish tonight or tomorrow, barring any unforseen circumstances.
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So one way or another once I have two CS's complete I will make an IC and those with accepted characters (Being N/A and either Avalon or Anowell) will be allowed to post.
 
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Just to clear up any misunderstandings I will allow the other one in if they can get in before we announce teams.
 
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Uchiha Atsuki
The Prodigal Son of the Uchiha

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Vital Statistics Personality History Combat Information


  • Nicknames/Aliases: The Prodigal Son of the Uchiha

    Gender: Male

    Age: 13

    Birthplace: Konohagakure

    Clan/Bloodline: Uchiha

    Rank: Genin

    Chakra Nature: Fire



  • Atsuki looks to be the kind of person who could easily succumb to the Curse of Hatred; someone capable of ruthlessly prioritizing a goal to the detriment of anything unrelated. He's primarily motivated by two things: the first is finding a place to belong and crushing anyone who threatens it, and the second is absolute confidence in his own abilities. Only the latter is something he's ready to admit to himself and other, and that, combined with his status, his 'air of self-importance', and his desire to keep his own problems in-house, makes him seem like an arrogant narcissist in a lot of peoples' eyes.

    As an Uchiha, Atsuki is in the very odd position of simultaneously occupying the spot for the single least and single most "Uchiha" Uchiha in his generation. Though he acts with the best interests of the clan in mind and displays the genius typical of an Uchiha, there is a peculiar dichotomy between his actions and his feelings. In truth, he has a distinct lack of personal loyalty towards the clan as a whole, and would much rather distance himself from it than anything else. Alas, as the heir, he and his clan are intrinsically tied to each other, and any attempts to spite them through weakness would only be a detriment to himself.

    That aside, Atsuki is definitely embraces the image of the 'proud Uchiha heir' that many think he is, or at the very least doesn't do anything to dissuade that opinion. He treats everything he does with an air of gravity, and maintains a composed, elegant bearing in his dealings to the point where some might consider him far too controlled, which isn't exactly a wrong assumption. He speaks with a polite, formal tone of voice and rarely seems to express any emotion when he's not speaking from a state of superiority or control. When he does express them, he practically flaunts his positive emotions while restraining his negative ones. At most, you'd probably get him to turn his mouth into a hard line in place of a frown. There is one exception to this rule though: he has a peculiarly strong dislike for uncleanliness in any form, and will express his distaste when directly exposed to filth.

    Surprisingly, it could even be said that Atsuki is more reserved among his friends than strangers. Among people he's familiar with, his emotional expression is unexpectedly limited only to very subtle expressions. Small smiles, rolled eyes, and the like; only uncommonly will one find him really expressing his feelings with something as blatant as a wide grin or rolling tears. In spite of multiple layers, he is actually a very sincere, easily moved person when spoken to, but at the same time ultimately a 'selfish person' as well. Though he isn't very good at establishing firm relationships due to his inexperience, he can easily become overzealously clingy and protective over the first people to honestly accept him. He has a hard time seeing friendships as a relationship of mutual giving, and fears being left behind or replaced. In that respect, he's like a small child desperately clinging to the first people that treat him nicely.

    At any rate, Atsuki couldn't be called a 'good person'. He can make astoundingly callous comments - especially when he relaxes his internal censors - and has a terribly myopic sense of morality. Simply enough, his treatment by his "father" has taught him to value power; regardless of good or evil, the strong simply devour the weak like animals in a food chain. Predictably, he lacks a concept of 'going easy' on an enemy, but it's probably for the best; he's easily his most honest when he's fighting. As it's his only real chance to unrestrain his typical restraint, fighting and training have become his ways of venting his negativity.



  • Atsuki is the heir-apparent to the Uchiha Clan, born to Uchiha Arata, the clan head and all around exemplar of what it means to be an Uchiha, and his wife, Minami. That much is a matter of public record. Among the greater population of the Uchiha, his birth was a met with celebratory fanfare. He was born a symbol of a coming age, meant to serve as both the chance and means by which the estranged clan could truly reconnect with the village. However, among the Uchiha inner circle, his birth was a very troublesome occurence to say the least. After all, Atsuki isn't really the son of the Uchiha Arata and Uchiha Minami. No, Atsuki is the illegitimate son sired between Minami and Isamu, Arata's younger brother. Although Atsuki himself was not made privvy to this information at first, it would naturally serve as the major guiding force in shaping his rocky relationship with his family.

    As Atsuki got older, the oppressive expectations of what it meant to be the Uchiha heir began to rear its ugly head, and he began getting tugged in two directions by his parents. In one direction lay his mother, urging him to follow his heart and become whatever person he wanted to be, while in the other lay his "father" and the clan elders, expecting nothing other than a "genius" who could achieve success in any field, just like the clan head. Desperate for the approval of his father figure, Atsuki took the latter route, much to the detriment of his maternal relation. For a time, he worked as hard as he possibly could, driven by the hope that he'd finally be acknowledged by Arata. Though he planned to devote a vast majority of his time to practice, he was allowed to personal freedom to go out and play alongside other Uchiha children. This ended up distracting him from training as much as he would have liked, and he only really managed to learn one nonstandard jutsu at the time, that being the Uchiha's usual Grand Fireball Technique.

    Of course, this phase in his left ended when he learned of his real parentage by eavesdropping on a particularly heated conversation between the three parties involved while they thought he was fast asleep. By the time he made his lucidity known, it was too late to convince him otherwise. Needless to say, such a fact changed everything about his family dynamic and his personal loyalty to his clan. Perhaps if he'd had a better relationship with his family, he would've awakened his Sharingan out of a sense of betrayal, but as he hadn't really taken the time to nuture any real relationship with them other than that of filial piety, it was made moot point. Once happy and hard working, Atsuki then isolated himself from the rest of his family and began acting out, doing all sorts of frivolous things, and just lazing about in general. The unfortunate thing was that nobody even cared to do anything about it. They just let him be and went about life as usual.

    As it seemed that Atsuki was content to be a disgrace to the clan, a younger half sibling was born to take his place. Whether it was of a brotherly protectiveness, a feeling of indignance, or some combination of both, he cleaned up his act and returned to the clan to prevent his half-sibling to take up the mantle of Uchiha scion. Now actually determined to prove a point, he abandoned all of his old friends in order to devote himself to tireless training. In the short span of three years, he had learned three ninjutsu mostly on his own through the use of scrolls and the ocassional input from an observing elder. No genjutsu were learned, as those typically require someone to fall under it and Atsuki lacked any partners to train on. However, trying to fit the part of the Uchiha heir took a toll on his personality, and his old friends who could only watch from afar were left wondering what happened to the bright and cheery individual they once knew. Fortunately it was not all a waste. Atsuki's plan to take the heat off his sister worked. He was becoming everything Arata wanted in a successor, except for his child.

    Not long after, Arata was driven by the rest of the clan to reaccept Atsuki as the heir-apparent. It even made for a good story: The clan heir is led astray, but ultimately returns and becomes greater than he was before. However, it wouldn't be made easy for Atsuki. He was barred from interacting with his half-sister or seeking out his real father, his success became expected not rewarded and any failure was to be punished severely, and he was forced to continue pretending to be a happy family in order to maintain the clan's solidarity and save face. He graduated as Rookie of the Year, as expected, but his Sharingan still remains unawakened.

    He also has no friends, which is sad but not entirely unexpected.


  • Weapons/Items
    Standard Ninja Tools
    Low-Yield Explosive Tags
    Wire Strings

    Kekkei Genkai
    Name of Kekkei Genkai: Sharingan, Unawakened
    Clan: Uchiha
    Description

    Canon Jutsu
    Body Flicker Technique
    Atsuki is capable of using the standard Body Flicker as is. It's a simple enough jutsu when all is said and done.
    Manipulated Shuriken Technique
    A very uncomplicated jutsu that costs no chakra whatsoever, but requires a brief preparation period to attach the shuriken to wire. Atsuki's reliable limit is four at once. Currently, he cannot make handsigns without stopping any wires manipulated by his hands.
    Temporary Paralysis Technique
    Despite not necessarily being his strongest technique, it's the one Atsuki is the most proud of learning. It's only active for a short amount of time, however. He can affect up to two targets, but in that case his time is both halved and split evenly between them to reflect the greater strain. He hasn't the control for immediate casting through eyesight, but he's working towards that.
    Fire Release: Great Fireball Technique
    An Uchiha rite of passage and Atsuki's first 'real' jutsu. For a genin it's very taxing on chakra reserves, but Atsuki has practiced this enough times to the point it could be called his best jutsu. Even so, he's incapable of using it in quick succession

    Custom Jutsu


Hopefully I didn't make him too strong or an incomprehensible mess.
 
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Besides the fact that he looks like a girl (which isn't a problem just thought I'd say so) I'll accept it.

Edit: I didn't see the sharingan part initially.
 
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