Amusing, but not so much when we read the OC's.
First of all, as mentioned there is a very specific level of power we're looking for in characters to accept. Your first was certainly not it and this second one, while more easier and shows effort to follow the rules? It looks like exactly like your statement- That you did it when drunk and with the addition of dictating to an ape. The backstory gives me physical pain, the characterization jumps around and god knows that's not the worse bits of it. Its a god-awful mess and unless you're looking to be ostracized by the players IC, put some actual effort into it, jesus fucking christ.
This reads like an edgy teenie-bopper Zack Snyder who has no idea how to write Grimdark backstory in any coherent fashion and literally just picks up whatever sounds best and throws it in at random.
And that's not taking into account the first entry.
So fire power and bats, right? Simple enough, good enough. Just do it in a way that shows you actually put thought into it and didn't just regurgitate all over the CS.
If you need help or assistance, feel free to PM any of the named co-GM's. We'd be happy to assist more in-depth.
@ShiroKiyoshi
