- Posting Speed
- Multiple posts per week
- Writing Levels
- Intermediate
- Preferred Character Gender
- No Preferences
- Genres
- Fantasy, Sci-Fi
Just a guy interjecting with my random thoughts where they probably aren't wanted or needed.
Also as a side note, there are a few grammatical and spelling errors on your sheet. Not that I can talk considering I practically failed high school engilsh and have only by some unholy force managed to fumble my way through all my Uni reports up until now, but might I suggest trying a service like Grammerly to give your posts the once over? Since people can actually read my posts – or at least I think they can – I can attest to its efficacy.
Feel free not to ignore all this, again this is just the unfiltered (spellchecked) stream of consciousness of a guy who doesn't know what he's talking about..
Have you considered rather than being indifferent to death, going with something more along the lines of, still bothered by it but rationalising it as "necessary" as a sort of coping mechanism for dealing with loss? Both characterisations are ultimately fine, but that one might speak more to a troubled past and provide more room for growth.1.He used to loved ones dying as part he also knows he'll die one day so he doesn't bother to think about it.
I'm not sure I understand the rationale here? Did you perhaps miss the section on Auric Colours in the opening post – it's hidden in a dropdown so I can see how you might have. Orange is the colour associated with positivity, whereas brown is the nagative one, so using it seems odd in this context. Unless of course, you're going with the trope of someone that maintains a positive outlook no matter the circumstances.what if his aura is black and orange because he's endured so much pain over his life time open to ideas on this.
Might I ask what exactly shamanic magic is to him and more importantly what that darker side entails? Is it a practice that involves communing with the spirits of nature? Performing rituals? Perhaps it requires sacrifice? In essence, how do you envision it looking and working? (Note that I know nothing about real-world Shamanism and am basing everything I said off tropes and stereotypes, hopefully, none of that was too offensive).3. he could teach the kids that there's a darker side to earth and shamanic magic and the pros and cons of using it
Also as a side note, there are a few grammatical and spelling errors on your sheet. Not that I can talk considering I practically failed high school engilsh and have only by some unholy force managed to fumble my way through all my Uni reports up until now, but might I suggest trying a service like Grammerly to give your posts the once over? Since people can actually read my posts – or at least I think they can – I can attest to its efficacy.
Feel free not to ignore all this, again this is just the unfiltered (spellchecked) stream of consciousness of a guy who doesn't know what he's talking about..