@Holmishire
Marbles / Holmishire
Motivation? Good enough! Enjoy being a... super hero? It's like being a soldier only your body is the weapon and even more people hate you than normal.
Honestly read your name as Okra. So you're okra to me now.
Appearance is lacking but that's fine for now I guess.
Oh of COURSE, Canadian, gosh, you lil patriot. Nice backstory otherwise, looking good.
Powers sound cool. Apt for many 'lost marbles' jokes though.
Accepting pending appearance.
@LVL1337N00B
Noobikins
YOU ARE BAD AT ALIASES but that's a fine motivation
She looks sad :c awww
Yay almost perfect backstory!
And you already know I like your manifestations~!
Accepted.
@Dusk
Dusk. Didn't you use to have a longer name? Er, anyway. Marionette is fine.
Looking good motivationally speaking.
Woo text appearances! Oh wow, CD players / walkmans? Retro. I mean, technically he could have a setting equivalent of an 'ipod' if he wanted to due to the advanced technological growth but whatevers.
Awwww, Pat and Eli <3
Hmmm... I like the destroyer manifestation, but I'll have to be a bit careful with the infiltrator when selecting powers (if I actually do that) Otherwise looks good!
Retro Acceptance.
@Stopwatched
New guy, let's test your chop chops. Shrike... wait Oh okay that's a type of bird, gotcha.
Your character is far better this time. Like it.
Corruption, dishonesty, bribes are way better than assassinations, and the smaller scale is appreciated.
I think I can work with a perma bird within limitations.
Hrm, bit of a pickel. Primacy was overtly (I think) granted to the other players from first run, but the limit was more in mind when I was maybe doing more than one RP. But now I'm only doing one. So, I think I can do seven and it work. A tenative accepted.
@Valhalla
>death of some of her closest friends
oh boy
Heyo Valhalla, I'd like it if you could change assured to assumed death, but I can run with it otherwise.
Also
"can harm her harm significantly, as well"
Otherwise looks good.
Most likely accepted.
@Sir Pinkleton
Aliases are hard.
Ooooh, now this could be fun, motivationally speaking.
I unironically love your use of the word boring over and over.
Hrm... hrm, okay I think maybe instead of Warrior / Hunter, this character is more Hunter / Tanker. Endurance focus as the important bit of increased human skill? Also you did mention his Hunter manifestation first AND that plays more into his freerunning, so it feels to me that that is the more important Archetype as well.
Some work may need be done.
@Zombehs
From what I know you didn't have anything on this until today; and for that time you cranked out something nice. Although I'm not quite sure what Supp is short for. It's not Super, because number of 'p's... hrm...
Yay cooking in Blue Moon!
Hrm, now I can run with full summoning, but I'd prefer an alternative if you'd be fine with that. Instead of summoning, you're able to cobble them together from the environment? Similar to the golemancy that was done in the original Paragons, but with an easier transition into longevity AND ther are others with that power (multiple!) so I feel putting you in that school with them would be fun.
Or if you wanna keep it summoning, that's cool too but that'll weaken them a bit due to having to somehow create them from scratch.
Maybe you can later empower to from scratch?
Er, anyway, I've spent more on this than anyone else. So last note, your lil field manipulation thing; would like it if you started off with one or the other and later got to do both instead of both to start, especially because it's a secondary but even then if it were a primary.
Some work need be done.
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