Still a bit of an issue with the personality, but the backstory is fine.
Best described as two-faced and at times manipulative to those she's dealt with, Hitomi can be as gentle and loving as a baby Wall Penguin one moment and then ferocious and violent like a Troll Kong the next.
Starts off well enough, as I think it's always interesting to have some kind of asshole on the team. However...
While genuinely kind-hearted, she's far from innocent and what side that you'll see all depends on how you treat the woman and what may be going on around them.
Then this shows up and slightly contradicts itself AND the section quoted above, as being manipulative often involves being kind when it suits you and is advantageous. Someone who does that is rarely regarded as genuinely kindhearted, you know?
While her violent side is seen less than her gentler personality, she shows no shame in being tomboyish and rather unladylike. In fact, if she sees an opportunity to bend things more in her favor, Hitomi will not hesitate to be a bit more manipulative to get her way, however that may be achieved.
Being tomboyish and 'unladylike' doesn't always mean violent.
All in all, I think you're still trying to have the best of both worlds with her personality. Kind sometimes AND a raging cunt when she just decides to be one. Maybe replace her kindheartedness with simply 'socially acceptable' or 'She can be a decent person'. Or, on the flip side, you could just say something like "She's very kind when there's nothing on the line or no one is in the way of her goals. But should Hitomi set her mind on something, that thing is put before all else.'
Note, these are simply suggestions.
Just saw episode 33.. And Toriko has attacks with his legs... Shit..
Is it still ok with my char? :x
Yeah, you're fine dude. I figured there'd be at least a BIT of overlap as far as techniques. Heck, my character is all about knocking. Sound familiar?
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@Angel Evans
Sorry to be so blunt, but last chance, dude. You said you were interested, then said it again when I asked, and now haven't said a thing since then. Either you're interested or you're not.
As the old saying goes...