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Gateman
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Actually, it's fine. Just looked like bigger than it actually is on my phone. He's accepted. Might wanna go back and edit though, the old name is still there in a few places. Not a pressing thing, just thought you might wanna know.Sorry, but more concise how? If you could sort of narrow it down it will help a lot, There is a lot of stuff, and while I could go with the more simplistic style and do a bunch of editing to make it so, it would be a lot easier if I head a few areas to target.
On top of that, I edited the bits you asked me about, and generally went through and tried to clear up any wording that may have been confusing.
Quite a few things to answer.I may have missed this but what do the shards look like? Do we just find them on the streets? Could a person have gotten a shard, say maybe it landed on their hair, got stuck to their shoe or something? I am assuming that the humans don't know what the shards are. Do we start with a power and the shards simply make it stronger or does it depend on the shard we find? Are the shard drawn to each other? Do can we feel if someone else has a shard?
1. I'm using fire quartz as a reference for how they look. Each shard varies in size (though not in power) to a degree, from 1-3 inches in size. I suppose you could get them stuck on you without knowing, but you'd have to be amazingly oblivious.
2. They didn't fall to earth from the heavens, per se, it's more like they suddenly manifested from nothing. The people who are able to find them are connected in some way, but I haven't decided how just yet.
3. Indeed, humans don't know what they are, only that certain individuals are drawn to them, while others avoid them like they're made of compressed radioactive plague particles.
4. The awakened only develop powers after being exposed to the shards. The shards themselves act as catalysts, modifying your genes to allow your body to handle the power contained within. The powers manifested are things that are hidden away in your genetics, and more a side affect than a direct result.
5. The shards are semi-sentient, and want to come together and be whole once more. Because of this, Awakened are drawn to the energy other awakened put out, and as they gain more shards and become stronger, they will eventually be taken over by the will of the shards, and be consumed with the desire to get more at any cost.
6. Not really something you asked, but something you might wanna know. The Shards, once touched, disappear inside you, leaving a mark behind, like Jotham's hands. This mark varies from person to person.
Any other questions dear?