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Hellis
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My posts fluctuate in size and content depending on what I feel is needed. Collaborations especially, I trim a lot of fat. Of course it wouldn't function as a series of posts. That's exactly why it's a collab. A collaboration is not a series of posts; it's one post.Kestrel; I am generally ok with smaller posts aslong as I am not fed with 3 lines of text and a bit of dialogue. And as I said, i don't expect every post to be a entire page out of a book. Sometimes a paragraph is all it takes. You might not have a lot of freedom in a situation or alot to go on. That is fine. But looking at how quickly you guys throw your posts up, I honestly feel like you could sit down and take some more time to work on your posts. I don't want to make it less fun on you, and I have no doubt you can write awesomely. I was hoping I could perhaps spark something more productive rather then to come off as a attack. I've seen your posts in your own RP's, I know they fluctuate in size and you write some good stuff. Sometimes more elaborate then others. That's fine. It was more that I was worried you guys hurried to get your posts out more then anything. That and that you would keep that level of commitment towards the writing as your standard. In which case, I would say No thanks.
Simone is very careful about pronunciation. This is because of her history as a mage. You've described magic as very dangerous and requiring focus. One of Simone's attributes is focus. This extends to the way she speaks and carries herself, with control and clarity.Simone replied, each tone of her words carefully articulated, as if teaching the English language to the man in front of her
She interacts physically with a stranger she first met. This is a crude hint at how Simone is a rather hands-on woman, also showing a certain disregard for personal space.She put her fingers on Alfonso his arm, gently pushing it down.
Oh and also she is careful and suspicious, which is why she lies about her phobia. However, this was a small showcase of her magic, moving her eyes too quickly to follow for just a second, to see if Alfonso could pick up on her being a mage. Simone doesn't like to lie.For a second, her eyes seemed to flicker into a blur
*the zookeeper having collapsed under the strain of my weight, I roll back into centre stage.*Eh, bygones be bygones.
[BCOLOR=#0b0b0b]U wot m8? u havin' a giggle? I'll 'ave you: swear on me mum.[/BCOLOR]Hellis said:[BCOLOR=#0b0b0b]Also: Panda is a big fluffy ball of wisdom. But he is unfair, he called out one of MY players in MY other RP :P. Granted, in that case, the post in question was only like, two lines. So you guys are safe in that regard.[/BCOLOR]
r00dGood thing I don't pride myself in being a nice person.
I invite you to critique. It inspires improvementI can look over your post if you want later, and probably feel like a huge hypocrite if I find things to bitch about.
Let me just brush some of this judgment off a chair and take a seat. I think I'm good with letting you write the way you want and I'll write the way I want. If I needed consistent style I would just read singular narrative. We've only seen a singular post. I will judge, but I will hold off for now. I feel I should defend my "fluff". I introduce characters with a background setting so you can draw from the environment to get into what I'm imagining. Set a base point for our world view prior to the interaction because it seems opportune. I enjoy getting into other's view as well.
To reiterate, I'm cool with it; the story, the characters, the muns. We all good.
Limey; so many shout outs! one day we should make a fluff baby. Hellis can GM, errr, videotape, errrr, domin...
'Merica. Now, the day after we be all grateful and shit let's go and essentially redo the London riots to get cheaper shit. ;PSo, I've been drinking. We get a day off work to watch football, drink, and eat. America.