Added the history. I seem to have gotten carried away with that as well x.x It's just. The setting , the plot, psychology is so interesting.
*claps* i love it, she;s accepted. just one minor edit i'd like you to make though. A major reason that the broken mirrrors haven't been shut down yet is that they're really damn good at making sure no one knows they're even a thing (remember, subjects get rewarded for turning in fellow subjects who;ve done wrong, so most of the kids in brew wouldn';t bat an eye before ratting the group out to the admins), so rather than hear rumors about the group, yoru girl woudl have to be directly approached by one of its members (most likely Jason). besides that she's fine though, adding her to the roster now.
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RogueSteeler
*sighs* i usually hate to do this but, no. I'm sorry but i'm gonna have to just flat out reject your character. I've never read insignia, but it's pretty evident that you were trying to port over too many ideas from that book into your character, and ended up largely ignoring the already established setting. Quick tip, if you plan on submitting a character that introduces new technology to a GM's universe (like your character;s robotic brain, for example) it's better to first PM the GM to ask if that kind of technology would be allowed first. It will save you the trouble of having to write up a full CS just to have it shot down for that reason later.
Also, Insanity is a state, not a condition. When i asked for the psychosis, I was asking what 'made' him insane specifically (examples would be horrible hallucinations, delusional praranoia, etc).
anyways, you're more than welcome to write up a new CS if you want, but this specific character will have to be a solid no from me, sorry.
@ImmortalSin
hey, glad to finally see you ut up your CS. So, first things first, and this is really just a personal and completely irrational pet peeve of mine (yes, i fully admit that it;s an irrational thing) but i, just, really hate centered CSes. No idea why, they just annoy the living bejesus out of me. so please fix that is ya can. thanks.
now, onto actually talking about your characters. For skylar, the innitial thing to consider is, of course, his powers since they are so great. Now, since we've discussed them already i won;t waste too much time on them, but i'd just like to pint out a few things. Firstly, i'd like you to mention exactly how long it takes for his 'crush' ability to acivate in full, lethal effect (it shoudl be no less than a 5 second warning time). As for the demi, you mentioned that while the ability activates instantaneously, gravitational polarities are reversed around him before the demi actually ocurrs. I assume that y this you mean that he partially negates the earth's gravitational field around him, making everything lighter? If so, I'd like you to mention eactly how long this 'reversal' lasts before the demi ocurrs (should be no less than 3 seconds). Also, if you want to keep the demi's great range of 25ft, then I'll have to impose the limitation that he can only use it once a day, and can't use it at all if hes already used the 'crush' ability twice. I'll let you use his crush aility a maximum of 3 times a day (but only once if he's already used demi). beyond that though his powers are fine.
for his history *sighs* I have to admit that i messed up in replying to your PM, I should have caught on to the fact that you mentioned him using his powers before oming to brew. Sadly, i can't allow that. The way this rp is set up is that the fac that our charcters' psychological ilnesses are directly caused by their inability to tap into their powers. That's why their afflictions become more manageable after they take kaleidoscope. The drug has no effects other than granting our characters the ability to tap into and control their powers, so the drug itse'f has no direct effect on their psychoses. It's the fact that we can now control our powers that makes the psychoses easier to manage. Also, I already rejected a chaarcter sheet before because the player had his character use his powers before coming to brew. so I'm sure you can understand that i can't very well give you a free pass and not do it for anyone else.
I would say that nothing else is wrong with the history section (which, honestly. nothing else is), but i can see that you having to remove that part of the history will force you to rewrite nearly everything that came afterwards, so again i apologize for not catching that detail back in the PMs.
As for his guardian Lelou, most things with him are ok, but you shoudl probably throw in an addendu in his appaearance description that his irises don't actually 'swirl' but rather that the swirling effect is an optical illusion that is teh result of the heavy elecromagnetic charges that he seems to sub-consciously keep in his eyes (which would also explain the 'glowing').
That being said, i'll have to ask you to knock him down to an A rank. S rankers are important to the seting of the rp, but none of us will be directly controlling one and they will make very little (if any) appearance in the rp itself (think of them like living plot devices that I as the gm had to implement in order for the world of BM to make sense... because that's essentially what the are lol).
Also, no one, no matter how strong they are, can have more than one power, so i'll need to have you remove the aerokinesis and quantumkinesis you listed in his sheet.
besides that though, he's fine. (i'm assuming you purposefully left his sheet incomplete because you want him to be more of an NPC than anything else?)
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Kanon
I like the character, Metallokinetics have always been a personal favorite of mine.
Anyways, by the description of his powers, yoru character seems to be a C ranker, since he can't surpass the mental barrier of his powers allowing him to do things beyond his physical capabilities. So with that in mind, you can feel free to change his psychic type to natural, so that he won;t have to deal with the kaleidoscope dependency of artificials. (one thing to note though, his powers, regardless of rank, shoudl allow him to bend a penny because copper is actually a really soft metal by comparison. It's more its small shape that makes it hard for us to grip them between our fingers that make them so difficult to manually bend, his psychic powers would not have that limitation)
hmm, it seems i once again failed to properly explain something in the opening post though (a nasty side effect of not trying to spoil your own story you've got planned for your rp). It seems that a lot of players are making the assumption that a dose of kaleidoscope works like a usual anti-psychotic drug and directly affects their character's psychosis. Like i told Immortal Sin though, kaleidoscope has no effect on the characters' mental illnesses, not directly anyways. What kaleidoscope does, the only thing it's designed to do, is make it possible/easier for the subject to tap into/control their powers, that's it. the reason our characters have psychoses to begin with is because their powers were dormant and inaccessible all their lives, causing a psychic imbalance in the brain that resulted in the development of psychological disorders. so kaleidoscope doesn't fix the disorders, it fixes what causes the disorders (i.e. our characters' inability to tap into and contol their powers). so your guy wouldn't have to continuously take kaleidoscope in order to put himself to sleep, rather it's his fear of sleep that would gradually intensify back to its original state 9and eventally worse than) as the kaleidoscope was worked out of his system. that is why the Naturals don;t relapse into deep psychosis, because even though they're no longer on kaleidoscope, they still have control of their abilities, so they have control of their psychoses.
anyways, with that little rant/explanation out of the way, i would like to mention that i very much enjoy the amount of detail you put in his personality ^_^ *thumbs up*
now, onto his history. Again, there actually isn't anything majorly wrong with him, and there's actually nohing you need to correct. there's just one little teensy passage i'd like to adress.
"Except he never returned."
now, again, this is one of those scenarios where i am trying to balance the scales between giving you guys ennough information to properly do your characters, but witholding ennough that the plot twists and revelations i have in store are still at least somewhat surprising. So i won't say anything specific, but let's just say there IS an actual reason why there aren't angry mobs of families and friends who are demanding to know where the hell all he kids sent to Brewster are gone. just wanted to mention that.
anyways, gonna give you time to edit-in your character's Rank and decide whether to keep him as an atificial (granting him the possibility of becoming more powerful and rising in rank as the rp progresses) or to turn him into a natural (ridding him of his kaleidoscope dependance).
That being said, you can consider him as good as accepted once those minor edits are done ^_^.
