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ThatDamnedSuccubus

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My work schedule is scattered. I work weekends along with weekdays - 5 AM to usually 1PM EST. Even when I'm not working, don't expect me to be online or to reply right away. I value my off time and do other things with it!
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Preferred Character Gender
  1. Female
Genres
Fantasy of all kinds. modern stuff, too. slice-of-life stuff is really comforting and fun for me.
Feeling brave! 🙌

I just want to thank anyone who gazes upon my little drabbles from the bottom of my heart. Writing sparks such joy in me, even if the results aren't the best of the best. I'm happy I can share this joy with other writers. 💗

Every Monday-ish! I've decided!

This will be a little collection of various, short, stories, mostly fanfics! A lot of it will be silly, wish-fulfillment, bullcrap starring my character Sunsetter in her many iterations across universes and all of the fun, stupid, kinky, adventures she gets into with the canon characters in them. I love writing. I love taking fictional charries and creating AUs for them to live in and making them kiss other fictional charries and such and such! And, then having other people read it all in it's glory! 8D

Feel free to post comments in here, or send me PMs about thoughts and feelings you wanna share. I will read and respond as I am able to! You don't have to critique, at all. I'm super self-aware of the quality of my many writings and I'm just sharing for fun's sake and also to share kink content for people who are also into the same, weird, crap I'm into! Kink solidarity!

I'll put up a big, danged, warning, now: Most of these writings will be NSFW. Some of them will contain grosser kinks! I will tag everything appropriately so you can pick and choose what you feel like you can handle reading/what you feel like reading, at all. I will also put those writings under the spoiler fuzz so no one will catch anything squicky on accident!

Okay. I'll probably come back and update this intro post every now and then when I remember stuff, so keep an eye out for new info, if that's what you feel like doing!
 
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First story to break the thread in! My friends and I do writing prompts of differing kinds, sometimes, and a lot of the stories I'm going to post are a result of those shenanigans! This is one of them!

Tighnari from Genshin Impact is missing his lovers and is taking care of the situation in a rather unconventional manner!


-Moss Surrounds-


[Tighnari/Sunsetter/Albedo]


NSFW Content warnings!: Dendrophilia! Knotting! Mention of blood!


Loneliness wasn't usually something Tighnari let get a hold of him. He had no issues filling his alone time with various activities, and treasured those moments when he had few interruptions to his work and studies. For reasons that were of little wonder, this had proven to ring less and less true, recently.
Those reasons had names.
And, those names had faces that he was dearly missing.
Fingers loosely intertwining in the tender, tendril-like, branches of the large willow tree he had set up camp under, he forcibly brought his original purpose for this trip into the forefront of his mind.
There was a dark, rosey, blush to the soft, plump, leaves of the tree that he had never before seen in that, particular, species. It grew in scarlet intensity as it lit up in the dying sunlight, and from where he was sitting, the canopy of delicately draped foliage reminded him of locks of hair.
Long, red, hair.
"Oh, I suppose I could say the golden aura of the setting sun looks like her eyes, too. Gods, I have things to do." He muttered, immediately annoyed with himself and his sickeningly poetic longings. The hardcover notebook propped open upon his lap was shuffled through with a distracted restlessness. Not one word, not one illustration, left any sort of impression.
Eyebrows narrowing almost comically, he stared at the freshly written passages of the day to a point where the questions he posed all blurred together in a confusing, unimportant, scramble of ink.
...What would Albedo think of this? What sort of unique, eye-opening, questions would he casually throw into the hypothetical conversations about his current research, here?
Tighnari could hear him talk, inside his head, then. His softly mumbling voice answering. Commenting. Chuckling.
Smiling that signature, mysterious, Albedo smile with those impossibly supple lips, of his.
Lips he could almost feel smoothing over his own.
Smacking his forehead, he let himself fall onto his back, the impact giving his exasperated sigh a bit of oomph.
The front of his pants were becoming awfully tight.
He was quickly becoming a nuisance to himself.
"Let's deal with this, then, I suppose. I'll be able to actually focus, after, anyway." Hands moving with a careful, purposeful, hurry, they hovered over the tented crotch of his pants for a split second [just enough time to question himself and then immediately say 'drat it'], hooked the waist of his pants and unders with his thumbs, and tugged them down his hips.
Both hands secured his manhood in their warm confines, one gently squeezing his testicles, the other grasping his cock at the base.
A few, slow, half-hearted, pumps left him taking uncertain pause.
There was a piece of this lascivious puzzle that was missing and Tighnari's lame attempt at using his own, manual, means, just wasn't cutting it. Frustration translated into whole-body shivers, nails clawing into bark and moss, and shallow, fitful, whines.
He needed to bury himself into something. His hips needed to be in frenzied motion. Pumping.
Feeling almost feverish, Tighnari's eyes took in everything they could see from where he was, his mind weighing pros of cons and potential satisfaction value in anything that even seemed remotely useable.
And, that's when the fox noticed a small, elongated, hollow in the thick base of a branch of the willow tree.
Moss, curly and brilliantly vermillion, bushed around it, creating an almost uncannily familiar picture. He wasn't sure whether to be annoyed or aroused, but his pure, yearning, instinct swiftly made that decision for him.
Up on wobbly legs, Tighnari drifted closer to the arboreal object of his desire.
A hand boldly reached out as soon as he was within distance, fingers running through and ruffling the mane of curly, red, foliage with a distinct fondness.
He felt unhinged.
What was he doing?!
A groan skipped and shuddered from a deep place in his throat as his waist pressed into the tree, near where the inviting hole was. It was done slowly and sensually, as if this was a perfectly normal ritual. The plethora of sensations that followed left him near breathless. Barely hanging onto any sanity or sense, Tighnari acted.
Giving his cock a few, good, pumps with his hand - a small bit of encouragement, in case it was just as confused by his peculiar urges as his poor brain was, he lined himself up with the hollow. The length of him rested upon the moss. It was cool, full of dew, and gave him a refreshing sort of tingle. Inside, it slid.
His pulsing, aching, erection was met with the most wonderful reception. The muscles in his thighs and buttocks twitched and jolted in little shocks of pleasure as he was completely sheathed in the hollow's warm, velvety, depths.
Laying his cheek against the moss, he panted, eyes bleary and unfocused. His mouth hung open to inaudibly garble Sunsetter's name [he could swear he heard her moan his in response] before pulling his hips back and slamming them in, once again.
It was as if his very soul shook.
The noises that came from his mouth were distinctly inhuman.
Hands grasped to hold steady when legs threatened to fail him.
There was no resistance from the depths of the tree to his reckless penetration.
That sealed it.
Tighnari took only a brief moment to gather himself, organize and shelf thoughts and feelings, before simply letting go.
With tightly gritted teeth, an arched tail, and nothing but the drive to breed, he braced against the tree and began roughly, greedily, riding the almost violent, instinctual, fit, out.
Thrust after thrust, the desperation compounded. Each, hard, sharp, meeting of flesh and bark solicited grunts, moans, and cries that bordered on animalistic and rode the fine line between pleasured and pained.
Jaw opening wide, his fangs sunk into moss and gripped. A spray of citrus-esque essence flooded his olfactory senses, causing him to wrench away, grimacing and drooling.
He attempted to pull away from the tree, completely, but it very suddenly dawned on him that that wasn't happening any time soon.
The base of his cock had been swelling without his notice and he had knotted the stupid, miserable, hollow.
In a bit of a defeat, Tighnari leaned his weight against the branch, eyes drooping. Catching his breath. Down below, he felt the rhythm of his ejaculating in strong pulses, dutifully filling his arboreal mate with his seed in a bid to impregnate that was grievously in vein.
It wasn't long before the fox's mind returned to him and his situation came into clearer focus. He smelled blood. Not much, but he was bleeding somewhere. The tiny sounds of scurrying insects inside the tree gave him a momentary hit of horror until he realized that he had just given them more reason to be uncomfortable than they were giving him. That strange, citrus, taste and scent the moss had assaulted him with had an even worse after taste. Very pitchy. Not recommended. He hoped it wasn't poisonous, but compared to the embarrassment he'd have to bare if someone somehow found out about this whole 'experience', another bite would gladly be taken.
Tighnari was left cold, hungry, scratched and nicked up and feeling so, so, empty by the time the knot eased enough to free him.
He opted to lose his pants, completely, and his shirt followed. A dip in the river was in order. The shame would never wash away, but he could at least rid himself of the sweat, blood, and semen he was painted in.
Painted.
There was Al's voice, again.
And, Sunni's endearingly explosive laughter in response.
Barefoot and naked, the fox picked his shaky way down the tree and hit the ground in a crouch.
The rain forest was his home. He had grown up, there. Made his life, there. Suddenly, even being surrounded by such familiar flora and fauna, knowing his ways between the trees and being comfortable within even the deepest of the forest's depths weren't enough to fill the hollow inside of himself.
Sometimes, 'home' could be names.
And, those names had faces he was dearly missing.

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So, first off I love your writing style. It's direct and focused, without being clinical. With that being said, there is only one word that feel out if place. So, let me be clear the style, the feel, and the scope of what you are writing ar 100 out of 100. You word choice is 99 out of 100.

Your use of the word ejaculating, is a little clinical. You have this visceral style, and that word sounds scientific or cold, where as everything you've written set the senses ablaze. If you made that one change IMHO this would be perfect.
 
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Tighnari's a pretty clinical dude, sometimes. :3
Looking at sexual functions in a clinical manner turns me on, sometimes. [medical fetish intensifies]~
It stays, dammit! x'D

Thank you for the feedback, though, my guy! I'm honestly super pumped about it! Defs continuing posting my crap, here. 💗
 
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You are pretty banging as well
 
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I think one story every Monday should do it for now? I'm cleaning them up a little bit, because they ARE just rough, quick, prompt stories, mostly. :'3

Ai from Utapri is a robot in his canon universe, and in the world this story was written for, he is, as well. Except, in this universe, he and Sunsetter had to flee from his place of origin, making him unable to access his maintenance team.
And, unable to for a long, long, while.



-Falling [Apart] For You-

[Sunsetter/Ai]

This is SFW!


"Are you alright?"
Her voice registered as her own. The emotional mapping of her face reported concern. Sadness. Tone processing came back with much the same.
All seemingly correct, so far.
When her inquiry was input, however, the results were questionable. Nonsense. Slow to form.
Keeping quiet, he dropped his gaze, focusing with determination. Frustration.
It had been becoming harder and harder.
"Yes." He lied, quietly, appraising her once again. His hand made a short adjustment, resting on her lower back. Pulling her into him, "Now. May I have this dance?"
Eyebrow arched, she was obviously dubious.
"Of course. If you're still up for it?"
Leaning in, he gave her forehead a reassuring kiss before the two began their gentle, rocking, dance. The cozy quiet of their tiny, well-kempt, kitchen serving as a prompt backdrop to their private waltz, the couple did small, simple, circles across the worn linoleum.
Inside, he felt metal grind upon metal.
Silicone joints shifted and crackled.
There was a distinct stiffness in his movements he tried to play off as proper, dancing, posture.
All of his worry over the compounding system errors, missing files, and increasing forgetfulness were masked behind his loving gaze. He caressed her with fingers that had lost their ability to feel years ago.
He heard the telltale, muted, pop of her failing hip and he instinctively braced himself to bear her weight. They came to a natural rest as she pitched into him, clinging. Sighing in defeat. Laying her head against his shoulder.
"Sorry." She muttered, the chuckle she let out sounding hollow and tired.
"There is no reason to be." He responded, "Do you need to sit?"
She let a pause go on for a curious amount of time and he wondered if he should ask, again. When she peered up, at him, it was with an air of sheepishness.
"I know you're falling apart as much as I am, angel, but do you think you could get me up on the counter?" A shaky smile pulled on her lips as she continued in a whisper, "Like old times?"
There wasn't even a moment's hesitation.
No time to give even the shortest of verbal confirmations.
None to afford towards minding the groans of his metallic bones and the heavy strain alarm his brain practically blared.
Not a second for her to express much more surprise other than the sharp squeak she gave as she was swiftly and carefully hoisted and placed atop the kitchen counter, him taking his place between her legs.
She gave a laugh that awoke in him such a rush of love and realization.
Sunlight piercing through the window highlighted the locks of dark grey weaved through her once brilliantly red hair. Cast subtle shadows in the deepening wrinkles of her face. Made her golden eyes sparkle as they once did when they first met.
She was as radiant as ever.
The love of his life.
"You are worth falling apart for."
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Another, shorter, prompt, today. Yet more shameless Suns-shipping, heh. I promise this isn't the only thing I do...- The title is the exact prompt that was given!

Sunsetter and Wanderer, from Genshin Impact. From a modern AU.


-'take a load off and stay a while'-

[Wanderer/Suns]

Potential NSFW content warnings: No actual, sexual, content, but mentions of certain kink dynamics!



He already knew he'd end up staying the night. Even as he clothed himself once again. Even as he hiked his backpack up and headed towards the door. Even as he mumbled 'welp, same time next week. Night.'.
It was the look on her face.
The tone of her voice as she responded.
The tired, shaky, smile.
Wavering on his feet, his gaze fell to the tops of his shoes. The moment dragged on, bordering on awkward, as his gears turned.
He entered this place for one purpose.
He was her kitten.
Her good boy.
Mommy's pretty, little, dolly.
And, when the illusion lifted and the scene was over, he left.
That was that.
On to the rest of his life.
One of his feet turned involuntarily back, towards the couch she was practically melting into. After a long sigh, he fished his phone out of the pocket of his hooded jacket.
His bag hit the floor as he let himself fall back into the couch's awaiting cushions.
"Chinese or pizza?" He muttered, giving her a brief, sidelong, glance.
What was he doing?
What was he feeling?
"You don't have to-." She started, hushed. Taken aback.
"Not what I asked. I'm starving. It's late. You don't mind me taking a load off and staying, do you?" Eyebrow raised, smirk on his lips, he appeared far more bratty than he was feeling, at the moment.
It was met with her breaking into a smile that lifted his heart on gentle breezes, though he would die before he let on.
Before he knew it, she was tucked into him, arms surrounding. He reciprocated with a one-armed hold and some stiff pats on her shoulder.
What was he doing?
Letting himself love someone back.
What was he feeling?
Fuzzy. Warm. Love? Still hungry.
"Alright, alright. So, what are we eating, lady?"


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