Ekphrastic Poem

Tegan

Hopeful Monster
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I'm reading this at a gallery on Saturday, and I'm not really sure if it's ready. Any suggestions or comments would be greatly appreciated. *Bites nails.*


meph·i·stoph·e·les mi·fep·ri·stone


bone bleached
by the sun

bone smooth
by water

I gaze
into the abyss
sliced open
--stitched almost shut

Nothing gazes
into me

I am an unmarked grave

a white-washed house
with a body
in the basement

only dry
dead blood
--the sun-warmed
earth
 

Asmodeus

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Posting Speed
  1. Speed of Light
Writing Levels
  1. Douche
Preferred Character Gender
  1. No Preferences
Last stanza is meh.

Penultimate stanza is yay!

Third stanza is goooode goooooode.

Opening is uuuuuuuuugh... muuurrrrgh....bleeh...




ASMO'S POETRY REJUMBLE!

I gaze
into the abyss
sliced open
--stitched almost shut

Nothing gazes
into me

a white-washed house
with a body
in the basement

[insert more good stuff here]



*has never said this much about a poem before*