Ekphrastic Poem

[Tegan]

I'm reading this at a gallery on Saturday, and I'm not really sure if it's ready. Any suggestions or comments would be greatly appreciated. *Bites nails.*


meph·i·stoph·e·les mi·fep·ri·stone


bone bleached
by the sun

bone smooth
by water

I gaze
into the abyss
sliced open
--stitched almost shut

Nothing gazes
into me

I am an unmarked grave

a white-washed house
with a body
in the basement

only dry
dead blood
--the sun-warmed
earth

 

[Asmodeus]

Last stanza is meh.

Penultimate stanza is yay!

Third stanza is goooode goooooode.

Opening is uuuuuuuuugh... muuurrrrgh....bleeh...




ASMO'S POETRY REJUMBLE!

I gaze
into the abyss
sliced open
--stitched almost shut

Nothing gazes
into me

a white-washed house
with a body
in the basement

[insert more good stuff here]



*has never said this much about a poem before*