The Mirror (just interested in some feedback..)

Discussion in 'THREAD ARCHIVES' started by Maskannai, Oct 14, 2010.

  1. She looks into the dusty mirror,
    her dark eyes so full of hate
    it would suck her up
    through that whirpool
    that is her soul.
    A thin smile creeps across
    her smudged complexion,
    her eyes seeming to contemplate
    something unreadable
    in everything but that smile.
    Her eyes focus on a particularily
    dark smear of dirt and grime
    on the tip of her chin,
    and she frowns, displeasure
    marring her pale features.
    The mirror begins to whisper to her,
    sweet nothings and everythings
    for her ears alone.
    Her smile returns, both vile and sweet,
    and she hums to herself
    in tune with the mirrors whisperings.
    A slight chuckle escapes her parted lips,
    and the men around her
    jump unexpectedly.
    They shift from one foot to the other
    trying to dispel the cold
    that has leaked through their metal armor,
    it's deathly grip telling of ghosts
    haunting the night.
    She grunts at the men
    and they remove the mirror
    from the mount it has hung from
    for a thousand years,
    her still humming to a tune
    they cannot hear.
     
  2. GAH! That is heavy! I like it. A bit dark, but good. Well done.