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Ike Sapphire
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So it hit me on Saturday that I wanted to write a small story or maybe even a book of this. Just as a small side project for me, to expand my imagination and possibly help me with grammar and punctuation as well (even though I've been taught this in school I do make mistakes). Anyway I was thinking about it and I decided to show you a portion of what I have written and maybe you can give me a little critique as well?
Well without further delay here it is
It is dark, it is never light out, the trees are dying slowly, and the grass has turned to dirt. Animals have been slowly dying off, we are unable to eat; this all began since those people came. Who are they? Well a simple answer is that they are death, nothing good came from them. They call them selves the Dark Council; they consist of twenty-seven members. These members rule over thirteen districts, two to each of them, except for the lord. The lord of the Council runs all of the districts, his name… I wish not to speak of it but his name is Ike. Ike is a tall man, with thick short brown hair. He has a beard that covers most of his face and a loud voice.
It is in the Dark Councils headquarters, where they are going convict a man of no crime. This is where our story begins… It was late at, well no one really knows it was morning, or mid afternoon or even night. It was at the headquarters of the Dark Council that Ike summoned all of them for the hearing of a 'felon'. Ike approached the podium and with his naturally amplified voice said, "The hearing is now in session! Everyone… Be seated please." He stepped down and let his trusting judge behind him take over. She was a younger woman, at least one year younger than Ike was. She wore glasses and had a black robe on, on it had the judicial seal.
The woman's name was Kate, she was, well, a little bit insane. If someone would be convicted and sentenced to death, she would come up with the most sick, twisted, and vile way to kill a man or woman. A man by the name of John came up and handed her some papers and she studied the pages carefully. Finally, when she set the papers down the silence that settled in the court room was broken "So Mr. Krevan, you have been charged by the following. You have failed to listen to local guards, you have defiled statue of your two leading Council members, even the great lords' no less and you have been trying to create a rebellious group against our Council. What have you to say for yourself?"
The man was shivering uncontrollably, he gripped his left sleeve of his tattered shirt and merely said "Y-you don't scare us; we will rise and destroy your group, if you would even call it that. Well you can't stop us now, we will take you down." He began to laugh unsettlingly as he knew his fate. "That is all, guards, take our subordinate to the cellars. We will discuss his penalty". A smirk ran across her face and said nothing more than that. The guards, who were fully armed, took him back to his holding cell. As soon as they left, Ike took the podium again and scanned the room of all the twenty-six members. They all gave him full attention as he began to speak "You have heard it yourself, this man has been disobeying the law. Do we not have enough evidence to convict him?" Everyone raised their hand, said aye, and lowered them again.
Well without further delay here it is
It is dark, it is never light out, the trees are dying slowly, and the grass has turned to dirt. Animals have been slowly dying off, we are unable to eat; this all began since those people came. Who are they? Well a simple answer is that they are death, nothing good came from them. They call them selves the Dark Council; they consist of twenty-seven members. These members rule over thirteen districts, two to each of them, except for the lord. The lord of the Council runs all of the districts, his name… I wish not to speak of it but his name is Ike. Ike is a tall man, with thick short brown hair. He has a beard that covers most of his face and a loud voice.
It is in the Dark Councils headquarters, where they are going convict a man of no crime. This is where our story begins… It was late at, well no one really knows it was morning, or mid afternoon or even night. It was at the headquarters of the Dark Council that Ike summoned all of them for the hearing of a 'felon'. Ike approached the podium and with his naturally amplified voice said, "The hearing is now in session! Everyone… Be seated please." He stepped down and let his trusting judge behind him take over. She was a younger woman, at least one year younger than Ike was. She wore glasses and had a black robe on, on it had the judicial seal.
The woman's name was Kate, she was, well, a little bit insane. If someone would be convicted and sentenced to death, she would come up with the most sick, twisted, and vile way to kill a man or woman. A man by the name of John came up and handed her some papers and she studied the pages carefully. Finally, when she set the papers down the silence that settled in the court room was broken "So Mr. Krevan, you have been charged by the following. You have failed to listen to local guards, you have defiled statue of your two leading Council members, even the great lords' no less and you have been trying to create a rebellious group against our Council. What have you to say for yourself?"
The man was shivering uncontrollably, he gripped his left sleeve of his tattered shirt and merely said "Y-you don't scare us; we will rise and destroy your group, if you would even call it that. Well you can't stop us now, we will take you down." He began to laugh unsettlingly as he knew his fate. "That is all, guards, take our subordinate to the cellars. We will discuss his penalty". A smirk ran across her face and said nothing more than that. The guards, who were fully armed, took him back to his holding cell. As soon as they left, Ike took the podium again and scanned the room of all the twenty-six members. They all gave him full attention as he began to speak "You have heard it yourself, this man has been disobeying the law. Do we not have enough evidence to convict him?" Everyone raised their hand, said aye, and lowered them again.