Cohesiveness: The entry successfully maintained a light-hearted and humorous tone throughout, while presenting a solid start, middle, and finish to its narrative joke. There was still room for some extraneous details not tied to the plot—such as her mother's sickness or the justification behind the manga—and narrative qualifiers—
in her opinion—to be cut, as they were ultimately distractors.
The short back-and-forth dialogue paired with short actions as Radha was about to reach Skellington in the closet in particular did well to match the style of the narration with the tension of the narrative.
Engagement: The second-hand embarrassment from reading Nisha and her mother's awkward banter did well to keep the judges entertained, and the twist was an effective punchline fitting nicely with the tone of the piece and tying the theme of this month's challenge in as a bonus. It was a fun read.
The characters were fairly bare-bones, which while not crucial to this type of story still would have helped create more lasting engagement beyond the narrative punchline. Also note that some judges
*cough* @Holmishire* *cough* felt Nisha's attempts at defending Skellington's presence did too well to "explain away" the joke, thereby diminishing its effectiveness.
Originality: Certainly this entry took a unique approach to an otherwise grim theme, standing out with its uniquely light-hearted tone. Despite their supernatural peculiarities, the characters were relatable, and the piece took full advantage of its metatextual context in its humour.
Some judges
*cough* @Turtle Knight *cough* even went so far as to call it "adorable".
Polish: A few minor mistakes, be they doubled words or comma misplacements, were spread across the piece, but none so great as to significantly impact flow or comprehension.