EXERCISE Challenge #19: The Dark

Discussion in 'REFINING WRITING' started by Fluffy, May 17, 2015.

  1. The Dark

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    This is a theme that can go in a number of ways. I'm more referring to being in darkness itself, though. Like a room with the lights out, or a cloudy evening that makes it difficult to see the moon and stars. Spend a few minutes thinking on how you feel about the dark. Does it scare you? Inspire you? Do you think it's beautiful, or dull? Or perhaps it's like home to you? Maybe you're indifferent?

    I am also going to suggest a specific form for us to practice with. It's called a Tyburn. This is a 6 lined poem with quite the syllable pattern: 2, 2, 2, 2, 9, 9. According to my source, the first four lines are meant to be descriptions that lead up to the last two lines, which must rhyme. I will provide some examples that can illustrate better than I can explain:

    Example #1 (open)

    Death, by Mike McCann

    Blackest
    Darkest
    Coldest
    Oldest
    Burning in the Blackest, Darkest night
    There in lives the Coldest, Oldest fright


    Example #2 (open)

    Diana, by Diana Dalton

    Willful
    wistful
    playful
    peaceful
    she can have a willful wistful day
    yet she has a peaceful playful way
     
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  2. Obscurity

    Unsure
    Obscure
    Allure
    Impure
    Feeling unsure; the dark is obscure
    The spell of allure seems so impure
     
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  3. Hair

    sprawling
    crawling
    falling
    calling
    so it goes, your precious crown of cloud,
    flock of ravens, wild and ever proud
     
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  4. Pwubs gonna stalk these challenges
     
  5. I'm happy you enjoy them. <3 Your poetry is wonderful.
     
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  6. The Usurper

    Steel,
    Ordeal,
    Zeal,
    Kneel
    The ring of steel, exciting ordeal,
    a sudden zeal, the end, all must kneel.

    I don't think this is very good, but hey, I gave it a shot.
     
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  7. Fear

    Pitch black,
    terror,
    fleeing,
    hiding,
    Around every corner and each bend,
    Your worst nightmare is hiding again.

    Eh. That'll do.
     
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