EXERCISE Weekly Challenge #4: What was that sound?

Discussion in 'REFINING WRITING' started by Fluffy, Jan 18, 2015.

  1. What was that sound?

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    For this week's challenge, the theme is sound and the style is pretty much free-form, but with a refrain. A refrain is a verse or phrase that is repeated at intervals throughout a song or poem, usually after the chorus or stanza. Along with this definition, I will provide a poetry example, just in case. Make it rhyme, or don't. It's not a requirement for this one.

    As for the topic, I ask for you to choose a sound of any kind that you can make a poem about. Bird tweets, alarm clocks, baby cries, an instrument, someone's voice, the sound of pots and pans being drummed on... Just to name a few random ideas. Can be a noise at irritates you, induces sadness, or makes you happy. The mood is of your choosing as well, y'all.

    Example of a poem using a refrain (open)

    The cat so silent
    Lay curled up on the rug
    The fire a blaze
    The room so snug.

    Purring, purring
    Quiet and still
    Purring, purring
    Content from his fill.

    Tatters the cat
    Big, fat cat.

    He had just eaten
    A dinner of fish
    What a treat to have
    Filling up his dish.

    Purring, purring
    Quiet and still
    Purring, purring
    Content from his fill.

    Tatters the cat
    Big, fat cat.

    No more cold for the day
    He was in for the night
    Fun he had had
    When the day was light.

    Purring, purring
    Quiet and still
    Purring, purring
    Content from his fill.

    Tatters the cat
    Big, fat cat.
     
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  2. Inspired by my tinnitus. LOL I was sitting here thinking about how pissed off I am that this condition of mine is nudging me closer to deafness. Words came to me.

    Ring, Ring, Ring...

    You damnable thumping,
    so deep within my ears
    Then my heart gets pumping
    This hurts me like a pierce

    Ring, ring, ring
    A most unpleasant song
    that's gone horribly wrong

    'Tis a most dreadful curse
    No escape, and no peace
    Father Time makes it worse;
    makes the symptoms increase

    Ring, ring, ring
    A most unpleasant song
    that's gone horribly wrong

    The jaws of silence clamp
    down upon my ear drums
    Feels as bad as a cramp
    that I wish I could numb

    Ring, ring, ring
    A most unpleasant song
    that's gone horribly wrong

    The humming of a fan,
    it soothes me into sleep
    So I'll avoid the plan
    Tinnitus wants to keep

    Ring, ring, ring
    A most unpleasant song
    that's gone horribly wrong
     
    #2 Fluffy, Jan 18, 2015
    Last edited: Jan 19, 2015
  3. I awoke with a start to find the the most ominous of sounds,
    it seethed and scratched and called out in whispers.
    From the walls and the floor it did slide
    to the windows it did shake, beneath my bed it did would perch.

    Mock mock mock.
    Oh does it mock me?
    My sudden gasps of fear,
    Mock mock mock.
    I would hear my voice behind the wall.

    Scrambling from my dreams I jumped from my bed,
    the cold wood floor a reminder of a fear
    waiting to reveal itself as it slid along.
    I dared not make a peep, eyes wide and hair on end.

    Mock mock mock.
    Why does it mock me?
    My sudden gasps of fear?
    Mock mock mock.
    I know I hear my voice beneath the floor.

    I ran through my home,
    through the darkness night lay upon me,
    my skin crawled as it did too.
    It follows with a wretched sound,
    the sound too familiar.

    Mock mock mock.
    Do not mock me!
    My sudden gasps of fear!
    Mock mock mock.
    I know I mock myself from behind my eyes.​
     
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