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Before you read: This is a Alternate History Story. I wrote this story when I was 6 for a story contest. I also had to draw pictures for the story at that age so I also didn't add detail because I was young and not good at writing, I just want to get that out there now. I will also add Like Side Stories to this if anyone clearly wished to read them. Any critiques/feedbacks will be taken into account and I will think upon any I receive. Thank you for this eye opener.
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COLORS!
Here is the Colors for Everything if you get confused:
The Story - Grey/Gray
Ahmose - Orange
Harua - Green
The Sorcerer - Blood Red
Professer Alphonse - Violet/Dark Purple
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Long ago, in the year 200 AD, Ancient Egypt, Two brothers were born on a the night of a full moon. Ahmose and Harua, Both were raised to become king, though only one could have the throne. As time passed, Ahmose became their parent's shining star while Harua grew jealous of his brother's actions and attention the people and his parents gave him. Years had flew by and Harua's Envious and jealous feelings had grown so much that he had went and hired a Sorcerer to curse his brother, At night the Sorcerer had snuck into the brother's room and covered his mouth and had tied him down.
Ahmose was awoken from the sound of chanting and the painful feeling of his bones aching, What he was seeing was the Socercer reading from a book as he poured a vial of green liquid onto Ahmose. Ahmose tried to yell for help but no one heard his pleas, Ahmose yelled in pain as his body became detorted enough to where he transformed into a cat. The Sorcerer laughed as he had grabbed Ahmose by the scruff of his neck now and forced down a purple liquid down Ahmose's Throat. "Finally, Your curse is now complete. You have been cursed to live as a cat AND you live as an immortal." Ahmose, when told of this curse he spoke out of anger, "WHO HAD HIRED YOU TO DO THIS?! WHO WOULD DO THIS TO ME?!"
Soon, Harua walked into the room as he had given the Sorcerer the promised gold as Ahmose looked at his brother with pure horror. "Harua, brother. Why have you come to this? What have I done for you to have me cursed in a cruel way?" Harua looked at his brother with cold, cruel, and heartless eyes. "Mother and Father saw you fit to rule after father had passed, I was just as fit as you, they did not see me no, they only saw you." Ahmose was saddened by this fact that his brother was so consumed by jealousy and envy that he would curse his own brother.
When his brother told his parents about his brother who was killed, They hugged Harua and said that he is the only one they have. Ahmose tried to leave his room but was grabbed and stuffed into a bag, the men who stuffed him into a bag walked to the market and gave him to a man who owned most of the market. Centuries had passed, Ahmose had watched as times had changed as an English man by the name of Professor Alphonse Robertson, had taken Ahmose to England and cleaned him up, took care of him, fed him, and then introduced him to his daughter. Little Eliza was her name, curly brown hair, cute little freckles, green peircing eyes. Her giggles were full of innocence, her smile could brighten anyone's day.
Eliza was one day caring for Ahmose when a knock at the door happened, Mr Alphonse answered it with a concerned look on his face. a Sophisticated Egyptian looked a bit nervous as he looked around, "Excuse me, Professer was it? I had heard you found a cat from Egypt on your way back home two years ago." Alphonse looked at him and nodded, "I did indeed, you must be?" The Man looked nervous and sighed as he looked at the cat, "My name is Harua, I am an Egyptotologist. I...also am a re-incarnation of King Harua." Alphonse looked shocked and looked at the cat, wondering what the connection between them.
Alphones let Harua in as he told Eliza to go play outside, observing the man and the cat. "Ahmose, is that...really you?" Ahmose, after so long finally spoke using words instead of meows."Harua...Why have you come here? Have you come to say you have a wonderful time ruining my life? That what you did was the best decision you have ever made?!" Harua shook his head as he looked away, a tear slightly escaped from his eye down his cheek, "I came to ask for forgiveness brother. I was blinded by jealousy, envy, hatred that I ruined everything for mother, father, our people. I ruined many lives for power I could not handle and I did not deserve it. I beg of you to forgive my horrendous act that I had done to you many centuries ago."
Ahmose thought for a bit as he sighed softly, "I had centuries to think about it, That you were consumed, I had no idea that mother and father having me on a pedastol made you feel like you were in my shadow, Harua." Harua looked at Ahmose smiling and more tears formed, holding the paws of his brother, "So you forgive me, Ahmose?" He nods as the sun was setting, A full moon was rising, shining brightly upon Ahmose. Ahmose's body was glowing as he began to be lifted from the couch, Harua and Alphonse both wondering what was happening, they saw the Miracle Harua was begging to happen. Ahmose had finally turned back to his human self, he was the same form as he was when he was turned into a cat. Harua hugged his brother, shivering with happiness and excitement.
"Brother! The Gods have answered me, they have lifted the curse that I had casted upon you centuries ago!" Ahmose smiled and laughed as he hugged his brother back. "I had missed hugging another person, after all this time." Harua laughed and smiled, waving goodbye to Alphonse. Before they left, Ahmose left a note for Eliza stating, 'Thank you, for loving and caring for me, Eliza. I will always be here when you need me. ~Ahmose.'
~The End~
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Note: if you leave Feedback, please also tell me if the story was interesting, would you want more, who was the character you latched onto, who do you want to know more about? All this feedback and Critiques will be amazing!
New Posts will be added when a story/side story that is apart of this is created.
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COLORS!
Here is the Colors for Everything if you get confused:
The Story - Grey/Gray
Ahmose - Orange
Harua - Green
The Sorcerer - Blood Red
Professer Alphonse - Violet/Dark Purple
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Long ago, in the year 200 AD, Ancient Egypt, Two brothers were born on a the night of a full moon. Ahmose and Harua, Both were raised to become king, though only one could have the throne. As time passed, Ahmose became their parent's shining star while Harua grew jealous of his brother's actions and attention the people and his parents gave him. Years had flew by and Harua's Envious and jealous feelings had grown so much that he had went and hired a Sorcerer to curse his brother, At night the Sorcerer had snuck into the brother's room and covered his mouth and had tied him down.
Ahmose was awoken from the sound of chanting and the painful feeling of his bones aching, What he was seeing was the Socercer reading from a book as he poured a vial of green liquid onto Ahmose. Ahmose tried to yell for help but no one heard his pleas, Ahmose yelled in pain as his body became detorted enough to where he transformed into a cat. The Sorcerer laughed as he had grabbed Ahmose by the scruff of his neck now and forced down a purple liquid down Ahmose's Throat. "Finally, Your curse is now complete. You have been cursed to live as a cat AND you live as an immortal." Ahmose, when told of this curse he spoke out of anger, "WHO HAD HIRED YOU TO DO THIS?! WHO WOULD DO THIS TO ME?!"
Soon, Harua walked into the room as he had given the Sorcerer the promised gold as Ahmose looked at his brother with pure horror. "Harua, brother. Why have you come to this? What have I done for you to have me cursed in a cruel way?" Harua looked at his brother with cold, cruel, and heartless eyes. "Mother and Father saw you fit to rule after father had passed, I was just as fit as you, they did not see me no, they only saw you." Ahmose was saddened by this fact that his brother was so consumed by jealousy and envy that he would curse his own brother.
When his brother told his parents about his brother who was killed, They hugged Harua and said that he is the only one they have. Ahmose tried to leave his room but was grabbed and stuffed into a bag, the men who stuffed him into a bag walked to the market and gave him to a man who owned most of the market. Centuries had passed, Ahmose had watched as times had changed as an English man by the name of Professor Alphonse Robertson, had taken Ahmose to England and cleaned him up, took care of him, fed him, and then introduced him to his daughter. Little Eliza was her name, curly brown hair, cute little freckles, green peircing eyes. Her giggles were full of innocence, her smile could brighten anyone's day.
Eliza was one day caring for Ahmose when a knock at the door happened, Mr Alphonse answered it with a concerned look on his face. a Sophisticated Egyptian looked a bit nervous as he looked around, "Excuse me, Professer was it? I had heard you found a cat from Egypt on your way back home two years ago." Alphonse looked at him and nodded, "I did indeed, you must be?" The Man looked nervous and sighed as he looked at the cat, "My name is Harua, I am an Egyptotologist. I...also am a re-incarnation of King Harua." Alphonse looked shocked and looked at the cat, wondering what the connection between them.
Alphones let Harua in as he told Eliza to go play outside, observing the man and the cat. "Ahmose, is that...really you?" Ahmose, after so long finally spoke using words instead of meows."Harua...Why have you come here? Have you come to say you have a wonderful time ruining my life? That what you did was the best decision you have ever made?!" Harua shook his head as he looked away, a tear slightly escaped from his eye down his cheek, "I came to ask for forgiveness brother. I was blinded by jealousy, envy, hatred that I ruined everything for mother, father, our people. I ruined many lives for power I could not handle and I did not deserve it. I beg of you to forgive my horrendous act that I had done to you many centuries ago."
Ahmose thought for a bit as he sighed softly, "I had centuries to think about it, That you were consumed, I had no idea that mother and father having me on a pedastol made you feel like you were in my shadow, Harua." Harua looked at Ahmose smiling and more tears formed, holding the paws of his brother, "So you forgive me, Ahmose?" He nods as the sun was setting, A full moon was rising, shining brightly upon Ahmose. Ahmose's body was glowing as he began to be lifted from the couch, Harua and Alphonse both wondering what was happening, they saw the Miracle Harua was begging to happen. Ahmose had finally turned back to his human self, he was the same form as he was when he was turned into a cat. Harua hugged his brother, shivering with happiness and excitement.
"Brother! The Gods have answered me, they have lifted the curse that I had casted upon you centuries ago!" Ahmose smiled and laughed as he hugged his brother back. "I had missed hugging another person, after all this time." Harua laughed and smiled, waving goodbye to Alphonse. Before they left, Ahmose left a note for Eliza stating, 'Thank you, for loving and caring for me, Eliza. I will always be here when you need me. ~Ahmose.'
~The End~
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Note: if you leave Feedback, please also tell me if the story was interesting, would you want more, who was the character you latched onto, who do you want to know more about? All this feedback and Critiques will be amazing!
New Posts will be added when a story/side story that is apart of this is created.
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