This is better than the plot of 50% of all Iwaku's roleplays.

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Paorou-sama

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It has character development, the hero calling archetype, action, adventure, an accurate depiction of the pain of loss, and I hear there might be romance on the horizon.

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/6987090/1/

And it's just a fanfic.

You guys are small time.
 
I could not get past the first line of the story to even finish reading it. x___x COULD NOT REED GUDZ
 
My Immortal was a better story. :|
 
Either I don't know the first half of the words in the English language, or someone needs to run a spell check. I managed to make it past the first few lines though.
 
tikva realized that he had no weapons and ambushers had firey arms.

OH GAWD, NOT THE FIREY ARMS.
 
He ate our food and stole unicorn and shot our house!

Even Asmodeus isn't this evil.
 
No other hero is capable of thinking like quick.
 
I liked it. :D
 
Wow. WE SHOULD REPLACE USE THIS INSTEAD OF THE NEW WONDER WOMAN TV SHOW PLOT. SO EPIC.
 
Asmo took my favorite line so I had to pick another:


because federration soldiers didnt want to have enemies, zeons became secret group to rebel against them and called the,mselves "ZEON RREBELSA".






Big Boss would be proud of such stealth.
 
When will Author-san write another? :(

tikva set off to join ZEON REBELS on the dame say.


Who is this mysterious dame?
 
Tikva's Firsk Bottle
Always remember your Firsk Bottle

otherstudent john
This character intrigues me. He could go far.

he caould tastes it in his heart
I think that's a serious medical anomaly.

I can't wait to join you guys in bottle in space
Everyone has to have a dream.

tikva became so en ragged that he crushed fist with clench
Running 500 laps a day gives you powerful buttocks.

stabbed them in guts (both robot and humouse)
That's a terrible way to behave in a Tapas bar.

sidestepped from shots and lasers like an alien basketballerina
His poetry moves me. T__T

He shot them back with his moussiles and ladles
This.

"OH NO!COMMEANDER NAKED!"
Yeah, I've been there.

with my newtypo power
Such irony...
 
i lyked all of dat. i menea it was beutifule. << JUST KIDDING.
 
"stop tikvs your father was terrorist and he was shot by unicorns AND buirned inearth atmosphere"

HE WAS BURIED, IN THE SKY.
 
"suddenly teacher slapped student in face with imopenity."

Imopenity



Imopenity


It's a perfectly cromulent word. :D