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"I have bled and fought for this country. If need be I intend to die for it too."

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Name: Gedric Palston Hon
Nickname: Ged
Gender: Male
Age and date of birth: 32, February 19th
Age Appearance: 32
Sexuality: Straight
Grandparents: Deceased
Parents: Deceased
Siblings: None
Height and build: Athletic, six foot.
Weight: 200 pounds

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Nation: Lightning
Birthplace: Akinian Empire
Organization: Lightning Country Military, Red Sword Clan, Hon Clan
Clan/Bloodline: Hon Clan
Rank: Jounin Commander
Chakra Nature: Fire

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Appearance:

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An imposing physical figure, his hair is a brownish black, naturally laying to one side, and his piercing brown eyes are set upon a face that holds the worries of a lifetime of leadership. A line of black facial hair lines his jaw, and a scar adorns his face, just to the right of his nose, extending to the corner of his eye. He stands at six feet with a finely crafted tunic adorning his athletic and toned frame. The tunic is stitched with gold and silver, an image of two dragons engaged in fierce combat sown into the fabric. A dark ivory dragon broach at his neck holds in place a crimson cape. At his waist is fastened a black leather belt, the buckle the same image of the dragon as his broach. An ebony colored sheathe hangs on his left hip, a sword held inside. His trousers are of the same black cloth that his tunic is, and they lead down to a pair of black sharkskin riding boots fastened at the sides by silver buckles.



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Personality: Gedric is a man who is straightforward, with his enemies and with his allies. He is steadfast in friendship and will not easily forget a grudge. He can be bull headed at times, and once he sets his eyes on a course of action he is not easily disuaded from it.

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History:
Gedric is a veteran commander and a merchant. Born and raised in Hon lands, Gedric grew up to be a warrior. As a young man, he fought as a soldier in the Great War. He participated in many bloody battles in the midst of the war under the banner of the Hons. After the war was over however, Gedric found himself restless. The call to battle ached in him, growing with every passing day. So it was that he signed up with a band of mercenaries. A green lot of men who had not been able to fight in the great war, wanting to set out for glory. Initially They left together as equals, but as they fought together in various locations, they grew to respect Gedric's sense of tact and strategy. Gedric had watched the officers during the great war, learned from them, and improved upon their strategy. Before long, he was the leader of the mercenary band. They came to call themselves the Red Swords.

After years spent fighting in various countries as warriors, including the conflict between the Frost and Lightning Country as mercenaries in the Lightning Army, Gedric found himself wanting a more peaceful lifestyle. He decided on starting a mercenary guild, and that he did. He founded it in the Lightning Country. Through this he met Takeru Destrushia, and the pair became friends. It was with this meeting that Gedric abandoned the mercenary life almost entirely, save for managing the guild which brought him profit and allowed him to employ his former comrades and invest in different businesses. In its stead he entered the life of politics, joining Takeru and becoming embroiled in the politics of the land. Soon he found himself offered a position, quite a powerful one at that. He found himself as a Jounin Commander. With the new position has come great involvement and knowledge of matters that are beginning to envelop the Lightning, a country on the precipice of war.


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Weapons/Items
Name of Weapon or Item: Misery

Description: A masterfully crafted hand and a half sword sporting silver inlay along blade and the black sharkskin wrapped hilt. A crimson ruby shaped like a blazing fire adorns the pommel. Runes are etched into the blade that gleam dully in the light, words of some long dead language. Ancient history seems to be written in to the blade, and the edge of the sword is the same color as the gem embedded in the pommel. The crossguard is shaped to look like two dragon heads coming off from the sword and roaring. This blade never leaves Gedric's side. The blade earned its name after the countless lives it has taken, soldier and civilian alike.


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Skills/Abilities
Good reflexes
Excellent Swordsmanship

Traits
Experience in combat with Shinobi
Experience leading troops
 
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Accepted by me as well. You can post the sheet into the character thread.
 
S.O.S: This looked fun, so I decided to make a character but I need help figuring out her history :S

She’s going to be from the Lightning country, and I was thinking of maybe having her be apart of a nomadic clan (Sato, I think?) but I’m not sure exactly what that would entail.
 
S.O.S: This looked fun, so I decided to make a character but I need help figuring out her history :S

She’s going to be from the Lightning country, and I was thinking of maybe having her be apart of a nomadic clan (Sato, I think?) but I’m not sure exactly what that would entail.
Hello Somebody-Actually!
I am glad it looks like fun, that means I didn't mess up up my 'job'!

Anyways, welcome and let me start with that I am glad that you are deciding to make a character. There is indeed quite some information to progress and then to put into a sheet. To then offer it to the GM team, who will jump on it as some ravenous mangy creatures that I haven't fed for weeks.
But if you want some help, feel free to pm me or any of the members of the GM team. We mainly use our discord server for OOC interaction, chatting and even some gaming. Let me know if you want my help through a PM!

Hope to hear something from you soon!
 
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Name: Dea Cho (pronounced DEE-UH)
Nickname: N/A
Gender: Female
Age and date of birth:14; November 14, 462
Age Appearance:Looks her age
Sexuality: Unexplored

Grandparents:
Sigfrid Cho [Maternal Grandfather: Alive]
Inge Cho [Maternal Grandmother: Alive]
Arne Cho [Paternal Grandfather: Alive]
Anna Cho [Paternal Grandmother: Deceased]

Parents:
Arne Cho [Father]
Frída Cho [Mother]

Siblings:
Magni Cho [Brother: Nine years older]

Length and build: 157 cm (5”2), slightly-built
Weight: 117lbs

Favorite weather and season: Rainy; Autumn

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Nation: The Akinian Empire
Birthplace: Sea of Vanguri
Organization:
Cho Clan
Vanguri (Cynefrith)

Clan/Bloodline:Cho Clan, Vanguri

Rank: Genin

Chakra Nature: Earth release [She doesn’t know it]

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Appearance:
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As pictured above Dea has tanned skinned, dark brown hair, and matching dark brown eyes. After a snip some years ago, her hair tries but ultimately fails to reach her shoulders. When dressing casually, she typically wears plainly adorned tunics or dresses.



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Personality:
Because she was raised by loving family, and an equally familial community she, herself is also caring and friendly. Her early years were spent roaming around the Jarldom of Birgir, without many cares. Even when something comparable to a crisis did arise her parents were of the worry sort, to an almost concerning degree at times, thus she could help but develop a similar, if less intense, carefreeness.

She has, however, become more reserved due to the latest developments. Being brought far north from the place and region she used to call home, to people that she doesn't know. Into a large urban area, is a scary transaction. Not even being able to speak the Taika language, at the start, made it all the more confusing for her.

Dea is very conscientious and diligent. That is, partly, because she was raised that way. But also because she wants to make sure that she doesn't disappoint her parents, who’re now too far away to catch her when she falls. What’s more she would like to not cause trouble to the family that graciously fostered and treated her well these past few years.

Now with being part of the military and growing into it, she hopes that she can do her part to keep her people and family safe from harm.

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History:
Dea was born in the southern parts of the current Akenian Empire, fourteen years ago. She would be born to two loving parents, that were part of a Vanguri clan. The Vanguri are a semi-nomadic people that live within the Cho jarldom of Birgir. The early years of Dea’s life weren’t that much different from an average Vanguri. She was taught about her people’s history, that of the Cho clan itself and about some of the country. As she would grow up, Dea would be taught other practical matters of the Vanguri. Such as, learning how to take care of and ride horses.

Then, when Dea reached the age of eleven, there was an accident. While taking care of some horses, the animals got spooked. A ‘spark’ of chakra seemed to be the cause. This incident gave a scare to both Dea and her family. Despite the initial dread, it became clear that Dea would require mentoring in how to control her newly surfaced talent, lest even more dangerous accidents occur. Though there were capable ways to help her, the best solution seemed to be for her to sign up in the military. For it would be the cheapest and most efficient route. At the same time, this would mean that Dea would be seperated from the people she called family and friends.

Inevitably, Dea traveled towards Konohagakure, where she would enlist into the Imperial military. This journey was undertaken with her father and some of her kinsmen. While not a dangerous one, it would slowly dawn onto the child that she would soon be separated from everybody she loved.

Once at Konohagakure, her father arranged a place for Dea to stay at the Cho compound. He arranged a deal with a family, an older and seemingly childless couple, to basically become a foster family for Dea. It was stressful for the young girl, but she would soon after become distracted with going to the Shinobi Academy. Progress was slow for her, due to the new surroundings, culture, and people that were just completely new for Dea. But with her upbeat but respectful personality, Dea managed to overcome some of those obstacles. Even starting to excel in the basics taught at the Academy. Her foster family was very helpful at this time, accepting her fully into their family and helping her to understand how urban life worked. The community within the Cho compound would also provide an environment for Dea to flourish in. From the enigmatic Cho Guard to the friendly neighbours, Dea would slowly but surely not feel as much of a stranger.

Contact with her family and Vanguri kin was sparse, though. The large distance and semi-nomadic lifestyle made it hard to have contact on a regular basis. Despite that, Dea would,l continue to strive to succeed in graduating and learning how to become more adept with her chakra. Dea graduated from the Academy at the age of fourteen. Shortly afterwards, Dea would become assigned to a team. One that would go by the number 4.

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Weapons/Items
Name of Weapon or Item: General Shinobi Gear

Description: Kunai, shuriken, tags and some smoke bombs. The general equipment of a shinobi operating in the field.


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Skills/Abilities
-Capable handler and rider of horses
-Knows and speaks Chonobi fluently
-Decent knowledge of Taika, speaks with heavy Chonobi accent
- Possesses good stamina for a genin
-Novice Silent Killing
-Decent chakra control

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Special Traits
-Average chakra reserves
-She’s loyal to both her clan, and those who've earned her trust.
-She has trouble learning new ninjutsu

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Jutsu
 
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Name: Dea Cho (pronounced DEE-UH)
Nickname: N/A
Gender: Female
Age and date of birth:14; November 14, 462
Age Appearance:Looks her age
Sexuality: Unexplored

Grandparents:
Sigfrid Cho [Maternal Grandfather: Alive]
Inge Cho [Maternal Grandmother: Alive]
Arne Cho [Paternal Grandfather: Alive]
Anna Cho [Paternal Grandmother: Deceased]

Parents:
Arne Cho [Father]
Frída Cho [Mother]

Siblings:
Magni Cho [Brother: Nine years older]

Length and build: 157 cm (5”2), slightly-built
Weight: 117lbs

Favorite weather and season: Rainy; Autumn

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Nation: The Akinian Empire
Birthplace: Sea of Vanguri
Organization:
Cho Clan
Vanguri (Cynefrith)

Clan/Bloodline:Cho Clan, Vanguri

Rank: Genin

Chakra Nature: Earth release [She doesn’t know it]

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Appearance:
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As pictured above Dea has tanned skinned, dark brown hair, and matching dark brown eyes. After a snip some years ago, her hair tries but ultimately fails to reach her shoulders. When dressing casually, she typically wears plainly adorned tunics or dresses.



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Personality:
Because she was raised by loving family, and an equally familial community she, herself is also caring and friendly. Her early years were spent roaming around the Jarldom of Birgir, without many cares. Even when something comparable to a crisis did arise her parents were of the worry sort, to an almost concerning degree at times, thus she could help but develop a similar, if less intense, carefreeness.

She has, however, become more reserved due to the latest developments. Being brought far north from the place and region she used to call home, to people that she doesn't know. Into a large urban area, is a scary transaction. Not even being able to speak the Taika language, at the start, made it all the more confusing for her.

Dea is very conscientious and diligent. That is, partly, because she was raised that way. But also because she wants to make sure that she doesn't disappoint her parents, who’re now too far away to catch her when she falls. What’s more she would like to not cause trouble to the family that graciously fostered and treated her well these past few years.

Now with being part of the military and growing into it, she hopes that she can do her part to keep her people and family safe from harm.

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History:
Dea was born in the southern parts of the current Akenian Empire, fourteen years ago. She would be born to two loving parents, that were part of a Vanguri clan. The Vanguri are a semi-nomadic people that live within the Cho jarldom of Birgir. The early years of Dea’s life weren’t that much different from an average Vanguri. She was taught about her people’s history, that of the Cho clan itself and about some of the country. As she would grow up, Dea would be taught other practical matters of the Vanguri. Such as, learning how to take care of and ride horses.

Then, when Dea reached the age of eleven, there was an accident. While taking care of some horses, the animals got spooked. A ‘spark’ of chakra seemed to be the cause. This incident gave a scare to both Dea and her family. Despite the initial dread, it became clear that Dea would require mentoring in how to control her newly surfaced talent, lest even more dangerous accidents occur. Though there were capable ways to help her, the best solution seemed to be for her to sign up in the military. For it would be the cheapest and most efficient route. At the same time, this would mean that Dea would be seperated from the people she called family and friends.

Inevitably, Dea traveled towards Konohagakure, where she would enlist into the Imperial military. This journey was undertaken with her father and some of her kinsmen. While not a dangerous one, it would slowly dawn onto the child that she would soon be separated from everybody she loved.

Once at Konohagakure, her father arranged a place for Dea to stay at the Cho compound. He arranged a deal with a family, an older and seemingly childless couple, to basically become a foster family for Dea. It was stressful for the young girl, but she would soon after become distracted with going to the Shinobi Academy. Progress was slow for her, due to the new surroundings, culture, and people that were just completely new for Dea. But with her upbeat but respectful personality, Dea managed to overcome some of those obstacles. Even starting to excel in the basics taught at the Academy. Her foster family was very helpful at this time, accepting her fully into their family and helping her to understand how urban life worked. The community within the Cho compound would also provide an environment for Dea to flourish in. From the enigmatic Cho Guard to the friendly neighbours, Dea would slowly but surely not feel as much of a stranger.

Contact with her family and Vanguri kin was sparse, though. The large distance and semi-nomadic lifestyle made it hard to have contact on a regular basis. Despite that, Dea would,l continue to strive to succeed in graduating and learning how to become more adept with her chakra. Dea graduated from the Academy at the age of fourteen. Shortly afterwards, Dea would become assigned to a team. One that would go by the number 4.

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Weapons/Items
Name of Weapon or Item: General Shinobi Gear

Description: Kunai, shuriken, tags and some smoke bombs. The general equipment of a shinobi operating in the field.


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Skills/Abilities
-Capable handler and rider of horses
-Knows and speaks Chonobi fluently
-Decent knowledge of Taika, speaks with heavy Chonobi accent
- Possesses good stamina for a genin
-Novice Silent Killing
-Decent chakra control

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Special Traits
-Average chakra reserves
-She’s loyal to both her clan, and those who've earned her trust.
-She has trouble learning new ninjutsu

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Jutsu

Looks good Somebody. Look forward to seeing her in action, accepted by me.

One more GM review and she'll be accepted!
 
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Name: Dea Cho (pronounced DEE-UH)
Nickname: N/A
Gender: Female
Age and date of birth:14; November 14, 462
Age Appearance:Looks her age
Sexuality: Unexplored

Grandparents:
Sigfrid Cho [Maternal Grandfather: Alive]
Inge Cho [Maternal Grandmother: Alive]
Arne Cho [Paternal Grandfather: Alive]
Anna Cho [Paternal Grandmother: Deceased]

Parents:
Arne Cho [Father]
Frída Cho [Mother]

Siblings:
Magni Cho [Brother: Nine years older]

Length and build: 157 cm (5”2), slightly-built
Weight: 117lbs

Favorite weather and season: Rainy; Autumn

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Nation: The Akinian Empire
Birthplace: Sea of Vanguri
Organization:
Cho Clan
Vanguri (Cynefrith)

Clan/Bloodline:Cho Clan, Vanguri

Rank: Genin

Chakra Nature: Earth release [She doesn’t know it]

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Appearance:
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As pictured above Dea has tanned skinned, dark brown hair, and matching dark brown eyes. After a snip some years ago, her hair tries but ultimately fails to reach her shoulders. When dressing casually, she typically wears plainly adorned tunics or dresses.



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Personality:
Because she was raised by loving family, and an equally familial community she, herself is also caring and friendly. Her early years were spent roaming around the Jarldom of Birgir, without many cares. Even when something comparable to a crisis did arise her parents were of the worry sort, to an almost concerning degree at times, thus she could help but develop a similar, if less intense, carefreeness.

She has, however, become more reserved due to the latest developments. Being brought far north from the place and region she used to call home, to people that she doesn't know. Into a large urban area, is a scary transaction. Not even being able to speak the Taika language, at the start, made it all the more confusing for her.

Dea is very conscientious and diligent. That is, partly, because she was raised that way. But also because she wants to make sure that she doesn't disappoint her parents, who’re now too far away to catch her when she falls. What’s more she would like to not cause trouble to the family that graciously fostered and treated her well these past few years.

Now with being part of the military and growing into it, she hopes that she can do her part to keep her people and family safe from harm.

DN3p4.png


History:
Dea was born in the southern parts of the current Akenian Empire, fourteen years ago. She would be born to two loving parents, that were part of a Vanguri clan. The Vanguri are a semi-nomadic people that live within the Cho jarldom of Birgir. The early years of Dea’s life weren’t that much different from an average Vanguri. She was taught about her people’s history, that of the Cho clan itself and about some of the country. As she would grow up, Dea would be taught other practical matters of the Vanguri. Such as, learning how to take care of and ride horses.

Then, when Dea reached the age of eleven, there was an accident. While taking care of some horses, the animals got spooked. A ‘spark’ of chakra seemed to be the cause. This incident gave a scare to both Dea and her family. Despite the initial dread, it became clear that Dea would require mentoring in how to control her newly surfaced talent, lest even more dangerous accidents occur. Though there were capable ways to help her, the best solution seemed to be for her to sign up in the military. For it would be the cheapest and most efficient route. At the same time, this would mean that Dea would be seperated from the people she called family and friends.

Inevitably, Dea traveled towards Konohagakure, where she would enlist into the Imperial military. This journey was undertaken with her father and some of her kinsmen. While not a dangerous one, it would slowly dawn onto the child that she would soon be separated from everybody she loved.

Once at Konohagakure, her father arranged a place for Dea to stay at the Cho compound. He arranged a deal with a family, an older and seemingly childless couple, to basically become a foster family for Dea. It was stressful for the young girl, but she would soon after become distracted with going to the Shinobi Academy. Progress was slow for her, due to the new surroundings, culture, and people that were just completely new for Dea. But with her upbeat but respectful personality, Dea managed to overcome some of those obstacles. Even starting to excel in the basics taught at the Academy. Her foster family was very helpful at this time, accepting her fully into their family and helping her to understand how urban life worked. The community within the Cho compound would also provide an environment for Dea to flourish in. From the enigmatic Cho Guard to the friendly neighbours, Dea would slowly but surely not feel as much of a stranger.

Contact with her family and Vanguri kin was sparse, though. The large distance and semi-nomadic lifestyle made it hard to have contact on a regular basis. Despite that, Dea would,l continue to strive to succeed in graduating and learning how to become more adept with her chakra. Dea graduated from the Academy at the age of fourteen. Shortly afterwards, Dea would become assigned to a team. One that would go by the number 4.

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Weapons/Items
Name of Weapon or Item: General Shinobi Gear

Description: Kunai, shuriken, tags and some smoke bombs. The general equipment of a shinobi operating in the field.


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Skills/Abilities
-Capable handler and rider of horses
-Knows and speaks Chonobi fluently
-Decent knowledge of Taika, speaks with heavy Chonobi accent
- Possesses good stamina for a genin
-Novice Silent Killing
-Decent chakra control

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Special Traits
-Average chakra reserves
-She’s loyal to both her clan, and those who've earned her trust.
-She has trouble learning new ninjutsu

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Jutsu
Second acceptance right here! Go and post her into the accepted character thread. Right here! Click that link and slam dunk that CS right there!
 
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"I am a loyal servant of the realm."

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Name: Orun Hyuzu
Gender: Male
Age and date of birth: 27, born in February.
Age Appearance: 24
Sexuality: Straight

Grandparents: Deceased
Parents: Deceased
Siblings: None

Length and build: 5'11, Athletic build
Weight: 200 lbs

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Nation: Akinian Empire
Birthplace: Hyuzu Clan Compound
Organization: Hyuzu Clan, Imperial Akenian Military

Clan/Bloodline: Hyuzu Clan

Rank: Specialized Jounin

Chakra Nature:
-Fire (Affinity)
-Water(Secondary, Trained Chakra nature)


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Appearance:
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Personality: A dedicated, loyal, and hard working shinobi, Orun has forged many friendships in his lifetime. Prone to both making friends and drinking when the occasion arises, Orun is headstrong, and his determination is a force to be reckoned with, having driven him to the rank of Jounin. To his friends, he is loyal to the core, to his enemies, he is an unrelenting hunter. Once given a task, he will not quit until it is completed.

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History:
A warrior, and shinobi of the Hyuzu clan, Orun has spent much of his life living in or near Konagakure. As a child, he grew up with two loving parents, who held him dearly. He was surrounded by loving and supporting family. When he ten years old, Orun chose to enter the academy. He graduated several years later. When he was thirteen, Orun underwent the trial of the dragon, gaining through it a bond with his dragon Tireo. The pair would initially rub each other the wrong way, as each vied for dominance in their relationship. However, when at fifteen his parents and grandparents were taken by disease, the pair became fast friends, Tireo comforting the teenager over the loss of those who were closest to him. Orun seemed to take the loss badly, despite the comfort that Tireo offered, and he took a leave of absence. He left for two years, flying around the countryside and trying to find new direction before he returned.

When he did return, even to his closest friends it was evident that Orun had changed. The usually cheery young man seemed to be hiding his true feelings behind a cheery facade. He was less open and more distant to the friends he returned to. This was reflected when, instead of living at the home that his family had inhabited inside the Hyuzu clan compound, he chose to instead live outside of it. Something else seemed to drive Hyuzu now, he was hard working to a point, brutally efficient, and good at what he did. It was during this time that he forged his sword, Fireheart, opting to make it black like the scales of his dragon. Additionally, he forged a matching set of armor to go with it, though this was stored away. The blade would serve him through countless battles.

So the changed Orun continued to serve in the shinobi corp, living in town away from the other Hyuzu, as if to escape the memories of those there. He adapted well, his work remained unaffected, and indeed even improved in most, if not all places. A new ambition burned in his heart. He wanted to become a renowned ninja, becoming a jounin and leading a squad of his own. This new drive pushed him to become a chuunin. Working together with Tireo, Orun passed the chuunin exams with flying colors.

Orun would spend quite a long time as a chuunin, learning all he could, as well as mastering his second chakra nature. It would be during this long interval that he would study and learn many jutsu, a preparation that would ensure a promotion to jounin. When he did get a promotion to jounin, rather then stay with his squad, he was assigned to team 8, to learn from the current sensei of the team, studying under them. A dedicated and hard-worker, Orun plans to forge his own path with this new squad he was assigned to.



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Weapons/Items
Name of Weapon or Item: Fireheart

Description: A hand and a half sword with a cross guard in the likeness of a large branching flame. The hilt is a likeness of Orun's dragon, Tireo, and the sword blade is colored the same shining ebony that the scales of his dragon reflect.


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Skills/Abilities
-High reflexes, speed, stamina, and durability.
-Good taijutsu and swordsmanship
-Average Chakra control

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Special Traits
-High Chakra Levels
-A black swirling flame symbol appears on his right palm when he summons Tireo

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Summons
Name: Tireo
Species: Dragon
Age: 32
Image:
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Size: Large (The size of a horse)
Unique Traits:Can fly, breathe fire, and communicate telepathically and through voice. Can carry one passenger only while flying.
Jutsu: None
History: Tireo is a black dragon who was contracted with Orun during the trial of the Dragon. Originally, the pair struggled with each other for dominance, and eventually, despite the nature of their relationship, the pair have become friends. Tireo is at Orun's side whenever he can afford to be, and being intelligent as he is, that is often enough. The dragon has grown up alongside Orun in many ways. He has seen him through many things, including the Chuunin exams, countless missions alongside his previous squad, and the various tribulations that saw him promoted to Jounin. This has forged a bond that cannot be broken between the pair.
 
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Did somebody order a hot-baked mixtape? Oh, a review. I can do that too.


Do note. Seeing it is a specialised jounin, I am going to be stricter as that is required with higher ranked characters.

Organization: Hyuzu Clan
I would add 'Imperial Akenian military'.

-Fire
-Water
Which one of them is his affinity?

(At least two decent paragraphs), is being required for any character sheet. I reckon with his age that he has been through some stuff. So rack it up, Conny.

Size: Large (The size of an elephant)
Somewhat too large in my opinion. Not because it is a dragon but because of the various abilities it posses. Giving it a larger size is making it hard for me to see any balancing done to it.

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I certainly want to see more information if he is a Hyuzu which has a dragon. Even while I am one that considers the usage of a dragon to not be that amazing as some consider them, I want to see more work being put into the character before it is accepted. Try to branch out his history. Past experiences.
 
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@Aliceee All issues have been addressed.
 
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"I am a loyal servant of the realm."

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Name: Orun Hyuzu
Gender: Male
Age and date of birth: 27, born in February.
Age Appearance: 24
Sexuality: Straight

Grandparents: Deceased
Parents: Deceased
Siblings: None

Length and build: 5'11, Athletic build
Weight: 200 lbs

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Nation: Akinian Empire
Birthplace: Hyuzu Clan Compound
Organization: Hyuzu Clan, Imperial Akenian Military

Clan/Bloodline: Hyuzu Clan

Rank: Specialized Jounin

Chakra Nature:
-Fire (Affinity)
-Water(Secondary, Trained Chakra nature)


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Appearance:
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Personality: A dedicated, loyal, and hard working shinobi, Orun has forged many friendships in his lifetime. Prone to both making friends and drinking when the occasion arises, Orun is headstrong, and his determination is a force to be reckoned with, having driven him to the rank of Jounin. To his friends, he is loyal to the core, to his enemies, he is an unrelenting hunter. Once given a task, he will not quit until it is completed.

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History:
A warrior, and shinobi of the Hyuzu clan, Orun has spent much of his life living in or near Konagakure. As a child, he grew up with two loving parents, who held him dearly. He was surrounded by loving and supporting family. When he ten years old, Orun chose to enter the academy. He graduated several years later. When he was thirteen, Orun underwent the trial of the dragon, gaining through it a bond with his dragon Tireo. The pair would initially rub each other the wrong way, as each vied for dominance in their relationship. However, when at fifteen his parents and grandparents were taken by disease, the pair became fast friends, Tireo comforting the teenager over the loss of those who were closest to him. Orun seemed to take the loss badly, despite the comfort that Tireo offered, and he took a leave of absence. He left for two years, flying around the countryside and trying to find new direction before he returned.

When he did return, even to his closest friends it was evident that Orun had changed. The usually cheery young man seemed to be hiding his true feelings behind a cheery facade. He was less open and more distant to the friends he returned to. This was reflected when, instead of living at the home that his family had inhabited inside the Hyuzu clan compound, he chose to instead live outside of it. Something else seemed to drive Hyuzu now, he was hard working to a point, brutally efficient, and good at what he did. It was during this time that he forged his sword, Fireheart, opting to make it black like the scales of his dragon. Additionally, he forged a matching set of armor to go with it, though this was stored away. The blade would serve him through countless battles.

So the changed Orun continued to serve in the shinobi corp, living in town away from the other Hyuzu, as if to escape the memories of those there. He adapted well, his work remained unaffected, and indeed even improved in most, if not all places. A new ambition burned in his heart. He wanted to become a renowned ninja, becoming a jounin and leading a squad of his own. This new drive pushed him to become a chuunin. Working together with Tireo, Orun passed the chuunin exams with flying colors.

Orun would spend quite a long time as a chuunin, learning all he could, as well as mastering his second chakra nature. It would be during this long interval that he would study and learn many jutsu, a preparation that would ensure a promotion to jounin. When he did get a promotion to jounin, rather then stay with his squad, he was assigned to team 8, to learn from the current sensei of the team, studying under them. A dedicated and hard-worker, Orun plans to forge his own path with this new squad he was assigned to.



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Weapons/Items
Name of Weapon or Item: Fireheart

Description: A hand and a half sword with a cross guard in the likeness of a large branching flame. The hilt is a likeness of Orun's dragon, Tireo, and the sword blade is colored the same shining ebony that the scales of his dragon reflect.


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Skills/Abilities
-High reflexes, speed, stamina, and durability.
-Good taijutsu and swordsmanship
-Average Chakra control

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Special Traits
-High Chakra Levels
-A black swirling flame symbol appears on his right palm when he summons Tireo

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Summons
Name: Tireo
Species: Dragon
Age: 32
Image:
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Size: Large (The size of a horse)
Unique Traits:Can fly, breathe fire, and communicate telepathically and through voice. Can carry one passenger only while flying.
Jutsu: None
History: Tireo is a black dragon who was contracted with Orun during the trial of the Dragon. Originally, the pair struggled with each other for dominance, and eventually, despite the nature of their relationship, the pair have become friends. Tireo is at Orun's side whenever he can afford to be, and being intelligent as he is, that is often enough. The dragon has grown up alongside Orun in many ways. He has seen him through many things, including the Chuunin exams, countless missions alongside his previous squad, and the various tribulations that saw him promoted to Jounin. This has forged a bond that cannot be broken between the pair.
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"Wrong wrong, all wrong. Try again, this time without being an idiot."

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Name: Corin Mei
Nickname: Doc Mei
Gender: Male
Age and date of birth: 41 - November 28th, 436
Age Appearance: Forties
Sexuality: Straight

Grandparents:
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Parents:
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Siblings:
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Length and build: 180cm, In good shape
Weight: 79kg

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Nation: Empire of Akino
Birthplace: The Aegean Republic - Lygos
Organization:
Third Imperial Division - 11th Brigade "The Hell's Raiders"

Clan/Bloodline:
None

Rank:
Chief Medical Officer - Captain(?)

Chakra Nature:
Wind

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Appearance:
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Personality:
A sharp mind and a sharper tongue, Corin can be described as a bit of a womanizer, a bit of a bastard, and a damn good doctor; of which he is fully aware of all three descriptions of himself. He doesn't tend to gloat but he isn't afraid to put people in their place when it comes to his chosen field and anything that could possibly increase his work flow. Otherwise, Corin is a rather interesting man to engage in a conversation on just about anything due to his rather extensive schooling and love of increasing his knowledge on anything that he can manage to get a text on.

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History:
Born and raised in the Aegean Republic on the floating island of Lygos in the city of the same name, Corin grew up to a lower class family that slaved themselves away in the industrial behemoth of a city they called home. Corin attended lower schooling and learned of his affinity for wind chakra sometime during his final year of basic education. His parents, not wanting a Shinobi in their family decided to withhold him from attending any of the many Shinobi academies he could have attended and opted to continue to pay for him to attend schooling even though it would mean more money out of their own already strained pockets. Corin didn't waste the opportunity provided to him by his parents and managed to place considerably high for all the years of his school life.

With much hard work the young man would be accepted to a university on a medical program in Panna. Being taught by what are arguably some of the greatest minds in the world Corin's want to continue to learn only grew. He would graduate his program and begin working in one of the many public hospitals of Panna, building his experience and credibility to one day hopefully open a practice of his own back on Lygos but with the outbreak of the Great War Corin would find himself in a precarious position. Remain neutral with the rest of his country, or do what he had sworn to do upon becoming a doctor and do as much good as he could.

Leaving Panna aboard a ship he would travel to the Fire Country where he would travel around with a caravan of volunteer doctors and medical assistants from other parts of the world as they trailed a Fire Country host. It would be in the tents of this caravan with the sounds of battle in the near distance that Corin would finally feel he was making a difference, that he had found his true calling as a medical practitioner. After the war ended Corin would remain in the service of the Fire Country, earning citizenship through his own service. Currently he serves as the Chief Medical Officer of the 11th Brigade of the Third Imperial Division, although how he ended up in a majority Cho unit is a tale worth listening to if you get the man drunk enough.

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Weapons/Items
Name of Weapon or Item:
Assorted Medical Equipment

Description:
Not necessarily something that is constantly carried on his person, Corin has a wide variety of surgical tools and equipment that could be considered his but truly belong to the 11th Brigade. He does have a small bag that is specifically set aside for him to use that contains what are in his opinion the best of this equipment.

Appearance:
Assorted equipment. Scalpels, tongs, scissors, even the tents that are used as aide stations.

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Name of Weapon or Item:
None

Description:

Appearance:


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Skills/Abilities
Highly Skilled Surgeon
Great Chakra Control
Average Strength
Good Reflexes
Speaks fluent Franc and Aegean
Speaks Taika, Chonobi, Yakimara and Rén with an obvious Franc accent

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Special Traits
Extensive Medical Knowledge
Highly Educated
-Medicine
-Biology
-Botany
-Herbalism
-History
-Geography
-Literature
-Theater

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Kekkei Genkai

Name of Kekkei Genkai: None
Clan :
Description:

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Jutsu


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Name of Technique: N/A
Type of Jutsu:
Rank:
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Summons
Name: Corin's Children
Species: Hirudiniformes (Leeches)
Age: N/A
Size: Small but numerous
Unique Traits:
Blue Iridescence at night
Parasitic - Blood Suckers
Jutsu: None
History:
Coming across them during a quick excursion into the Blackroot Vale for a rather hard to find herb, Corin would take a few of the curious leeches with him to study further once back at his camp. Upon a bit more poking and prodding he would find out that the leeches are honestly just normal leeches, other than the fact that they seem to glow a blue hue in darkness when disturbed they are about as normal as they come. Instead of tossing them away to die or perhaps run rampant where they were staying Corin would keep them alive, feeding them raw meats and freshly killed small game while he tried to figure out what to do with his little pets. Upon reading a rather controversial medical paper on the use of leeches for the restoration of blood flow, clearing of debris and pathogens, and even restoration of recently reattached limbs Corin would get his idea. Thus," Corin's Children" as the 11th have named them, were born.
 
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"I don't want to hurt you, but I will if I must."


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Name: Saito, Shiori

Nickname: None

Gender: Female

Age and date of birth: December 22nd, 460

Age Appearance: Late Teens/Mid Twenties

Sexuality: Straight


Grandparents:

Never met her grandparents. The ones from her father's side perished during The Great War and those from her Mother's side shunned Osami after she got married with Kojiro.



Parents:

Saito, Kojiro - Father (45)

Saito, Osami - Mother (41)


Siblings:

Saito, Yosuke - Brother (12)

Saito ,Kura - Sister (22)


Length and build: 5'8

Weight: 132

Favorite weather and season: Rain and Fall


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Nation: Republic of Water Country

Birthplace: Kosa

Organization:

None


Clan/Bloodline: Her Mother's Recessive Trait


Rank: Genin


Chakra Nature: Water


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Appearance:

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Shiori has pallid skin, void of most color. Whenever she spends too much time under the sun her skin takes on a red texture, and begins to rash up in the form of a pretty bad sunburn. Her hair is just as void of color as her skin tone. Her eyes are heterochromatic, adding to her prominent features. But her most distinct feature is the strange markings on her left cheek. She was born with three lines that lead from the side of her face down to upper half of her neck and it's still unexplained by doctors how they even got there.

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Personality:

Shiori is always happy and known by her family as a free spirit. She's never seen at home as she's often running around town with all her friends (who sadly aren't chakra users) or checking out the sights from the highest buildings in Kiri. But this behavior and childish attitude lead to negative grades for most of her time in the academy. She was known as somewhat of the class clown, and got along with just about anyone. Luckily for her, her taijutsu, high levels of chakra, and awareness in the battlefield would help her get through the academy with ease. But Shiori still has a long way to go, as she struggles controlling her abnormal levels of chakra.


Despite her kindness, Shiori can truly be the coldest towards her enemies. Those that prove to be disloyal towards her, or towards the things she stands for receive a different side of Shiori. One that her parents have only witnessed a number of times when she was a toddler and would end up getting angry towards other kids. She would become vicious (and surprisingly strong for her age). This form of aggression, harshness, and anger still haunts her but much less than when she was a child as it takes a lot to get on her bad side.


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History:

Shiori, Daughter of Kojiro and Osami, was born and raised in Kosa. A small little city she knew as home for most of her young life. Her father was a former Ninja of Konoha, and he met Osami when he first visited Kirigakure many years ago during an escort mission. Kojiro said it was love at first sight but Shiori sensed the humor behind the statement through the annoyed look her mother would always give him. From that moment on they would exchange love letters, that Osami's parents would eventually find out about. They grew outraged and ordered her to abandon these petty love letters at once. Osami, being the daughter of a high class family of Kiri, reluctantly decided to abstain from speaking to Kojiro ever again. Having the daughter of a wealthy family of Kirigakure, speaking to some lowsome soldier of Konoha? Might as well deem it as treason and execute her in front of the townsfolk.


It went according to plan for Osami's family, as they found no more love letters for a good five months that followed. The boy from Konoha must've gotten the hint when there was no reply and decided to move on. Or at least that's what they thought happened before he would suddenly appear at their front door. They were met with shock and anger, downright ordering him away from their home before they had him arrested. But before he was able to leave, Osami would burst past them, bags huddled over her shoulders to meet Kojiro with a loving caress. They ordered Osami back into the house, but she refused, and they cursed her name stating that she may never return. The day she would return, her child would bear the curse of their hatred for Konoha. This curse, a secret to even Osami, was a recessive kekkei genkai that very few of their clan would ever be blessed to receive. But to those who can not control the power, will forever be cursed.


So Osami left her home in Kirigakure, and returned with Kojiro back to Konoha. She loved it there. It was quite the different atmosphere. Everything was so beautiful and lively, there was an abundance of trees, thick woods, a lot of wildlife. The people there weren't as menacing as in Kiri either. Everything was perfect. Even Kojiro's parents accepted Osami for who she was. There, they had their first daughter. Saito, Kura was born in 454, in Konohagakure. Not as a citizen though, as her mother was a foreigner. Osami abandoned her last name, that she refuses to ever utter, and took on the Saito name three years before the Great War began.


When the Great War erupted, Kojiro lost both of his parent who were venturing out of town and although it hurt Kojiro immensely he knew he would have to get as far away from Konoha as possible. It was never clear to Osami as to why Kojiro forced them to pack their things and leave, and she had her own theories as to why, one of them being he was a part of something sinister that would be seen as treason. The reports say his parents died due to the hands of an enemy, but Kojiro refused to believe that and he felt as though they were in danger. So together, a pregnant Osami, a six year old Kura (who was scared and unaware in all of her innocence of what was going on) and Kojiro escaped back to Kosa. It took a lot of effort, they had to pay a lot of people and lost most of their funds in order to be snuck past the border into hostile territory. Kojiro had a huge target on his back, and worried about his families safety every day as he paid these people to take him from one place to the next, never knowing if they'll turn him in or not. But they would eventually reach asylum and stay with a trusted old friend of Osami that would keep them refuge until the war was over and they could stand on their own two feet.


There they had their second Daughter, Shiori and Osami's heart dropped. She would stay up at night, crying stating over and over how her daughter is forced to carry the curse of her family. Kojiro believed in no such thing, and assured her that her family was made up of lunatics, and the markings must be normal. Little did he know how correct he would be. The Markings were normal for Osami's bloodline. A rare kekkei genkai, that holds tremendous powers and yet could be harmful to ones being unless they know how to control it.


They were safe there for a few years until they felt the Fire Countries forces inching ever closer to their borders. It was a scary sight as Kojiro attempted to prepare his family for the very worse. But before anything could happen the war had ended. Things were safe for them. Or as safe as could be. There were moments where Kojiro would have to physically hide from the victorious troops of Konohagakure, to assure they don't find him and execute him for treason. But for the most part, no one knew of Kojiro's background, and through some acquaintances he was able to obtain fake citizenships for himself, Kura and Shiori. Things were looking up. Of course though, Kosa itself still needed time to mend its wounds. When Shiori was four, her younger brother was born and not long after they were able to find a small place to stay that kept them hidden and away from the public eye.


Life in Kosa was exciting for little Shiori. When she first started in the school for younger children, she had trouble controlling her anger towards the boys that would often tease her by taking her books from her. That's how her teachers discovered her to be a chakra user. She was also pretty strong for her age as it would take about two grown teachers just to stop this seven year old girl from physically harming a boy over a book.


After this the teachers would suggest to her parents that they put her in an Academy, as she would be fit for that. So they began setting out her application many years ahead of time. She was accepted into many different Academies from different villages in the Water Country, including the one in Kirigakure the most prestigious one of them all. Shiori was excited to go and often teased her siblings, even Kura who she often looked up to, about how she would get to fight against some of the best young talents in all the land. Kura didn't care, but six year old Yosuke grew jealous. Osami on the other hand was unsure if they should send her out that far. She didn't want her daughter to be there all alone, and neither did Kojiro who was still scared of the day that the Empire would discover his treacherous acts. He didn't want to put his family at risk, but he wanted his children to have a future. One that didn't involve doing dirty work, like Kojiro did and suffered for.


When Shiori was twelve, they were ordered by the academy in Kirigakure (the school they ended up responding to on Shiori's acceptance) to give her a physical examination in preparation. When they were there the doctor tested her and when the results came back he confirmed that he was unable to find anything concerning the markings on her left cheek, but he did state that she had a high level of chakra for her age and she seemed relatively fit to be put into an academy.


Her family was thrilled, as was she. She went out to Kirigakure, staying with a family friend (someone Osami grew up with named Luna that knew about their runaway situation) as she completed her time in the academy within four years. She came back to Kosa to visit her family within a little debriefing period, she had some free time to see them before having to go back to meet her sensei and teammates as a new Genin of Kirigakure and the Republic. Her family, who hasn't seen her in four years was only able to send messages back and forth. Since then, Kura went back to Konohagakure in order to pursuit her own dreams and goals of seeing her original birthplace. She wants to run some type of business there. Twelve year old Yosuke was also put into an Academy, but was only accepted to the one in Kosa as his potential is minimal compared to that of his sister's. Her parents warn her to be careful, since they last saw her she's grown into a woman and her body has developed tremendously, they wouldn't want her to get taken advantage of. But she constantly reminds them now that she isn't a little girl anymore, she's a Shinobi now.


Finally, she bid them farewell as she sailed back to Kirigakure, to begin her duties as a Genin. What awaits her and what exactly stands behind this immense power she potentially possesses exactly? Only time will tell.


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Weapons/Items

Name of Weapon or Item: Kunai


Description: A common tool used by most Shinobi. She has a number of different types. Two normal ones, two with explosive seals tied to them, and one with a poison tip.


Appearance:

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Name of Weapon or Item: Makibishi Spikes


Description: Are small, sharp objects that are mainly used to inhibit someone from walking in a certain direction or area, since they would injure the ninja's feet if they tried to walk over them.


Appearance:

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Skills/Abilities

- High Strength

-Good Taijutsu

- Bad Chakra Control

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Special Traits

- High Chakra Levels

- Rare Kekkei Genkai


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Kekkei Genkai


Name of Kekkei Genkai: The Cursed Mark (Real Name: Sanmiittai)

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Clan : Unknown Currently (Osami's Bloodline)

Description: Still unknown by Shiori as she holds no control over it. As of now it only activates whenever her life is put at risk through intense or even gruesome means. For example, Sanmiittai will only activate if an enemy is performing some form of mutilation or even a gruesome act upon her body. If she's losing a battle through normal circumstances the kekkei genkai will never come to in order to save the host. But once she's put through excruciating pain, that would bring any person into a primal state of survival, it would kick into it's animalistic form.

Her chakra levels rise rapidly and the flood gates holding the chakra back bursts open. The white around her hues turn black as her eye changes color, glowing bright white. It's rumored that this eye can help her see chakra levels around her enemy, but she can never explain it because by the time she passes out and wakes up (if she wakes up that is) she remembers nothing. The problem with this kekkei genkai is that it drains energy from her being at such a rapid rate that within minutes she will succumb to the energy levels.


When the Kekkei Genkai is in use, Shiori has no kind of cognitive function. It's as if her primal instincts take over and she does anything to defend her own well being. Since it's only activated if she were to suffer from grevious wounds (when not mastered), she will attack anyone nearby that her body deems a threat. Whether it be friend or foe, she attacks with the intent to kill.


Her chakra levels spike, her strength increases, she becomes faster and even develops a congenital insensitivity to pain. The only downfall with this is she bleeds far more rapidly than if she were out of this form. Cuts will draw far more blood due to the amount of blood flowing through her body and healing her after this form would take much longer than usual (A small cut would take about ten minutes just to close up). After she is knocked unconscious, depending on the amount of damage she self inflicted or suffered from the enemy, that'll determine how long she'll remain unconscious. If in critical condition she can remain unconscious for days, but if the damages weren't too bad she would remain unconscious for only a couple of hours.



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"I don't want to hurt you, but I will if I must."

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Name: Saito ,Shiori
Nickname:
Gender: Female
Age and date of birth: Sixteen - December 22nd, 460
Age Appearance: Late Teens/Early Twenties
Sexuality: Straight

Grandparents:
Never met her grandparents. The ones from her father's side perished during The Great War and those from her Mother's side shunned Osami after she got married with Kojiro, then died years later.
Parents:
Saito, Kojiro - Father (45)
Saito, Osami - Mother (41)

Siblings
:
Saito, Yosuke - Brother (12)
Saito ,Shiro - Sister (22)

Length and build: 5'8
Weight: 132
Favorite weather and season: Snow or Rain/Fall and Winter

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Nation: Republic of The Water Country

Birthplace: Kosa

Organization: N/A


Clan/Bloodline: None

Rank: Genin

Chakra Nature: Water

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Appearance:
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Shiori has pallid skin, void of most color. Whenever she spends too much time under the sun her skin takes on a red texture, and begins to rash up in the form of a pretty bad sunburn. Her hair is just as void of color as her skin tone. Her eyes are heterochromatic, adding to her prominent features. But her most distinct feature is the strange markings on her left cheek. She was born with three lines that lead from the side of her face down to upper half of her neck and it's still unexplained by doctors how they even got there.



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Personality: Shiori is always happy and known by her family as a free spirit. She's never seen at home as she's often running around town with all her friends (who sadly aren't chakra users) or checking out the sights from the highest buildings in Kiri. But this behavior and childish attitude lead to negative grades for most of her time in the academy. She was known as somewhat of the class clown, and got along with just about anyone. Luckily for her, her taijutsu, high levels of chakra, and awareness in the battlefield would help her get through the academy with ease. But Shiori still has a long way to go, as she struggles controlling her abnormal levels of chakra.

Despite her kindness, Shirori can truly be the coldest towards her enemies. Those that prove to be disloyal towards her, or towards the things she stands for receive a different side of Shiori. One that her parents have only witnessed a number of times when she was a toddler and would end up getting angry towards other kids. She would become vicious (and surprisingly strong for her age). This form of aggression, harshness, and anger still haunts her but much less than when she was a child as it takes a lot to get on her bad side.

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History:
Shiori, Daughter of Kojiro and Osami, was born and raised in Kosa. A small little city she knew as home for most of her young life. Her father was a former Ninja of Konoha, and he met Osami when he first visited Kirigakure many years ago during an escort mission. Kojiro said it was love at first sight but Shiori sensed the humor behind the statement through the annoyed look her mother would always give him. From that moment on they would exchange love letters, that Osami's parents would eventually find out about. They grew outraged and ordered her to abandon these petty love letters at once. Osami, being the daughter of a high class family of Kiri, reluctantly decided to abstain from speaking to Kojiro ever again. Having the daughter of a wealthy family of Kirigakure, speaking to some lowsome soldier of Konoha? Might as well deem it as treason and execute her in front of the townsfolk.

It went according to plan for Osami's family, as they found no more love letters for a good five months that followed. The boy from Konoha must've gotten the hint when there was no reply and decided to move on. Or at least that's what they thought happened before he would suddenly appear at their front door. They were met with shock and anger, downright ordering him away from their home before they had him arrested. But before he was able to leave, Osami would burst past them, bags huddled over her shoulders to meet Kojiro with a loving caress. They ordered Osami back into the house, but she refused, and they cursed her name stating that she may never return. The day she would return, her child would bear the curse of their hatred for Konoha.

So Osami left her home in Kirigakure, and returned with Kojiro back to Konoha. She loved it there. It was quite the different atmosphere. Everything was so beautiful and lively, there was an abundance of trees, thick woods, a lot of wildlife. The people there weren't as menacing as in Kiri either. Everything was perfect. Even Kojiro's parents accepted Osami for who she was. There, they had their first daughter. Saito, Shiro was born in 454, in Konohagakure. Not as a citizen though, as her mother was a foreigner. Osami abandoned her last name, that she refuses to ever utter, and took on the Saito name three years before the Great War began.

When the Great War erupted, Kojiro lost both of his parent who were venturing out of town and although it hurt Kojiro immensely he knew he would have to get as far away from Konoha as possible. It was never clear to Osami as to why Kojiro forced them to pack their things and leave, and she had her own theories as to why, one of them being he was a part of something sinister that would be seen as treason. The reports say his parents died due to the hands of an enemy, but Kojiro refused to believe that and he felt as though they were in danger. So together, a pregnant Osami, a six year old Shiro (who was scared and unaware in all of her innocence of what was going on) and Kojiro escaped back to Kosa.

There they had their second Daughter, Shori and Osami's heart dropped. She would stay up at night, crying stating over and over how her daughter is forced to carry the curse of her family. Kojiro believed in no such thing, and assured her that her family was made up of lunatics, and the markings must be normal. Little did they know just how wrong they were.

They were safe there for a few years until they felt the Fire Countries forces inching ever closer to their borders. It was a scary sight as Kojiro attempted to prepare his family for the very worse. But before anything could happen the war had ended. Things were safe for them. No one knew of Kojiro's background, and through some acquaintances he was able to obtain fake citizenships for himself, Shiro and Shiori. Things were looking up. Of course though, Kosa itself still needed time to mend their wounds. When Shiori was four, her younger brother was born.

Life in Kosa was exciting for little Shiori. When she first started in the school for younger children, she had trouble controlling her anger towards the boys that would often tease her by taking her books from her. That's how her teachers discovered her to be a chakra user. She was also pretty strong for her age as it would take about two grown teachers just to stop this seven year old girl from physically harming a boy over a book.

After this the teachers would suggest to her parents that they put her in an Academy, as she would be fit for that. So they began setting out her application many years ahead of time. She was accepted into many different Academies from different villages in the Water Country, including the one in Kirigakure the most prestigious one of them all. Shiori was excited to go and often teased her siblings, even Shiro who she often looked up, about how she would get to fight against some of the best young talents in all the land. Shiro didn't care, but six year old Yosuke grew jealous. Osami on the other hand was unsure if they should send her out that far. She didn't want her daughter to be there all alone, and neither did Kojiro but Kosa grew on both of them and eventually became home.

Two years later, when Shiro was twelve, they were ordered by the academy in Kirigakure (the school they ended up responding to on Shiro's acceptance) to give her a physical examination in preparation. When they were there the doctor tested her and when the results came back he confirmed that he was unable to find anything concerning the markings on her left cheek, but he did state that she had a high level of chakra for her age and she seemed relatively fit to be put into an academy.

Her family was thrilled, as was she. She went out to Kirigakure, staying with a family friend (someone Osami grew up with named Luna) as she completed her time in the academy within four years. She came back to Kosa to visit her family within a little debriefing period, she had some free time to see them before having to go back to meet her sensei and teammates as a new Genin of Kirigakure and the Republic. Her family, who hasn't seen her in four years was only able to send messages back and forth. Since then, Shiro went back to Konohagakure in order to pursuit her own dreams and goals of seeing her original birthplace. She wants to run some type of business there. Twelve year old Yosuke was also put into an Academy, but was only accepted to the one in Kosa as his potential is minimal compared to that of his sister's. Her parents warn her to be careful, since they last saw her she's grown into a woman and her body has developed tremendously, they wouldn't want her to get taken advantage of. But she constantly reminds them now that she isn't a little girl anymore, she's a Ninja now.

Finally, she bid them farewell as she sailed back to Kirigakure, to begin her duties as a Genin. What awaits her and what exactly stands behind this immense power she potentially possesses exactly? Only time will tell.



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Weapons/Items
Name of Weapon or Item: Kunai

Description: A common tool used by most Shinobi. She has a number of different types. Two normal ones, two with explosive seals tied to them, and one with a poison tip.

Appearance:
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Skills/Abilities
-Lack of Chakra Control
- Fast and Nimble
- Good Reflexes
- Advanced in Taijutsu

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Special Traits
-High Chakra Levels
-Becomes Stronger as life is at risk
-Cursed Mark

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Kekkei Genkai
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Name of Kekkei Genkai: The Cursed Mark
Clan : Unknown (Osami Refuses to Utter her family name)
Description: Still unknown by Shiori as she holds no control over it. As of now it only activates whenever her life is put at risk. Her chakra levels rise rapidly and the flood gates holding the chakra back bursts open. The white around her hues turn black as her eye changes color, glowing bright white. It's rumored that this eye can help her see chakra levels around her enemy, but she can never explain it because by the time she passes out and wakes up she remembers nothing. The problem with this kekkei genkai is that it drains energy from her being at such a rapid rate that within minutes she will succumb to the energy levels.

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Jutsu
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Water Style: Raging Waves

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Water Style: Water Clone Jutsu

(She can only currently perform these two Jutsus with her lack of Chakra Control)

Hello @Ultra Paradox! I'm Frost, one of the GMs around these parts and I've got a review for you. Though before I get to the review I'll let it be known that I fixed the coding issues from your original CS in the quote of it above this, so when you get a chance you can quote it and copy out the fixed code. If you have an issue with that let me know and I can PM it to you.

I apologize for the length but let's get onto the review!
First off a few simple fixes, namely Shiori's place of birth. In the opening to her History it is stated:
Shiori, Daughter of Kojiro and Osami, was born and raised in Kosa.
Only to later on state:
Shiori went back to Konohagakure in order to pursuit her dreams and goals of seeing her original birthplace.
So my question is, was she born in Konohagakure or Kosa? Just a simple continuity error it seems, maybe changed your mind part way through the history and forgot to change one or the other so no big issue as long as you fix it.
Another simple one is located in the Skills and Abilities sections:
Advanced in Taijutsu
There is a limit of two "Good" abilities for a Genin level character. So an easy fix, just move "Advanced" on down to "Good" to meet the limit. As well I'd like to have you add in a Strength value for Shiori, given her history of needing two teachers to hold her back as a toddler I'd like to see what you consider her strength to be now.
Moving onto ones that may require a bit more of a change from you here:

The exodus from Konohagakure to the Water Country following the outbreak of the Great War and the death of Kojiro's parents.

Now normally I wouldn't have much an issue with a tragic backstory or characters moving from one nation to another, there is nothing wrong with that. The tragic backstory is even a common theme for a lot of characters. Where there is issue is in the fact that it was the Great War.

The Fire and Water Countries were fighting one another on a scale never before seen, and that would mean some rather tight restrictions and screenings for any entering either country. It could have been very well assumed that the Water Country would know of the Shinobi in service of their enemy, and as such would know of Kojiro, meaning that seeking asylum in the Water Country would have proved extremely difficult as the Water would likely have gone out of their way to apprehend and interrogate Kojiro for any useful information before he'd probably have been executed as a possible spy. You don't just let a foreign operative enter your country even if they're "deserting". Perhaps have them have lived in secrecy at first? Taking on fake identities and such and this could be put up to Kojiro knowing how to pull that off and it'd be alright on my end.
Kojiro's Desertion from the Fire Country:

Another point for Kojiro would be that his desertion would make him a Missing Nin. Meaning the Fire Nation either during (although unlikely) or following their victory in the Great War would likely have begun to search out any deserter Shinobi and either apprehend them or eliminate them to get rid of any loose ends that could compromise them. You could maybe tie however this was avoided into how they managed to get into the Water Country and stay away from the Water Country Shinobi to kill two birds with one stone.
Now for the most interesting part of the review, Shiori's Curse Mark.

Now a Curse Mark by the cannon definition tends to be a high level Seal-type technique. So whoever places the mark on the affected must be a Shinobi and a skilled one at that. So unless Shiori's grandma was a Shinobi on the side and snuck into the room while her mom was sleeping to somehow place a Curse Mark on a fetus I doubt it is in actuality a curse mark. But nonetheless the history sets it up to be believed to be a Curse Mark by at least Shiori's mother so there's no issue keeping it referred to as such.

There is however quite an issue present here. It's rather vague in its function. I understand that Shiori herself doesn't know very much about it, but as GMs it's our job to make sure someone doesn't slip past with an overly powerful technique, ability, or in this case what I can assume is actually a Kekkei Genkai. I'd like to see you better lay out the abilities of it rather than keeping it vague. IC it's alright if it's still unknown what it truly is or does, but here we need to be sure of what we're accepting.

Things I'd love to see are:
  • Does she still think critically when this activates? As in can she distinguish friend from foe or a trap from an easy opening?
  • Is healing affected by this mode?
  • How long does her unconsciousness last?
  • I assume her strength and other abilities past her chakra levels and vision are increased? If so how, and what are the consequences of this increase after it has worn off? Not including the immediate effects of passing out and memory loss of the event.
And one final question for this:
Becomes Stronger as life is at risk
Is this a direct result of the Curse Mark? It appears so but I'd like your word to be sure.

If you have any questions about how to change things or any of what I said don't hesitate to ask me here or in a PM. I'm more than willing to help you tweak Shiori as needed so we can get her into the story. I look forward to an updated Shiori![/hr][/hr][/hr][/hr][/hr]
 
@Ultra Paradox with the edits we've gone over complete I'll give it my seal of approval! Once Shiori is approved by a second GM you'll be able to post her in the character thread and we'll get you added to the Discord if you have it. So just hold out a bit longer!

I'm looking forward to seeing her in action :D