Here's mine for the first chapter of my novel 'Purpose'. Okay so, feel free to give feedback. But not on sentence stucture or anything, as I have improved since then. But I want feedback on the story. And if you just say 'it's super' I'll thumbs down your post. Because - that'd be a lie. Share your opinions please! https://docs.google.com/document/d/1BZnJMSLt21to4feMQB7uUarc-L1le1ojJ_TlZaVAd_E/edit I am especially wanting to add more realism to the crash / demon attack. Any ideas will be given a sticker! WARNING THIS STORY HAS AN ASSHOLE IN IT. HE'S RACIST AND SEXIST. I CANNOT BE HELD IF YOU WISH TO KICK HIS ASS. JOIN THE CLUB.