You know you might want to have your story criticed. Also we have many tutorials to help you with your writing.
Ocha is right. Just like Doxa's inability to count, we can help you too. Your grammar looks pretty solid. You can work on content development, though. Maybe some imagery. You should contact Ozzie.
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canon ending v You see my swag Now you wanna come and give me all this drag? I think you better fight back Because my hand is itchin' to give you a smack What's your name again, Jack? It's the end of the road, there ain't no turnin' back Don't let the fly face fool ya Matter 'fact, it's 'bout time that I school ya Don't worry I'm not in a hurry I don't even wanna get my fresh gear dirty A little birdie chirped of your flurry Now I must nip it, or better yet, bury Your entity, look at me while I'm talkin' I heard you was lurkinn', or was it even stalkin' My program thinkin' you the man in the place Now it's 'bout time you get a hand to the face Look Pimpin'! I ain't playin' In a minute you gonna be layin' On the ground I ain't messin' around My city! My rules! My money! My town! (x2)