Story Time

Here's a touching story.
Once upon a time, you died, and I lived happily ever after.
The end.

 

YOU DIE I GET PAID

 

Ocha is right. Just like Doxa's inability to count, we can help you too.
Your grammar looks pretty solid. You can work on content development, though.
Maybe some imagery.
You should contact Ozzie.

 

. . .

1. Read story
2. Re-write it
3. ????
4. Profit

 

canon ending v

You see my swag
Now you wanna come and give me all this drag?
I think you better fight back
Because my hand is itchin' to give you a smack
What's your name again, Jack?
It's the end of the road, there ain't no turnin' back
Don't let the fly face fool ya
Matter 'fact, it's 'bout time that I school ya

Don't worry I'm not in a hurry
I don't even wanna get my fresh gear dirty
A little birdie chirped of your flurry
Now I must nip it, or better yet, bury
Your entity, look at me while I'm talkin'
I heard you was lurkinn', or was it even stalkin'
My program thinkin' you the man in the place
Now it's 'bout time you get a hand to the face

Look Pimpin'! I ain't playin'
In a minute you gonna be layin'
On the ground I ain't messin' around
My city! My rules! My money! My town! (x2)

 

Fixed.

 

Fixed-er.

 

Fine then.
You wanna hear something funny?
You're dead.