CRITIQUE WANTED Shred my writing

Icystorm

Love yourself to death
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Posting Speed
  1. 1-3 posts per week
  2. One post per week
  3. Slow As Molasses
Writing Levels
  1. Intermediate
  2. Adept
Preferred Character Gender
  1. Primarily Prefer Male
Genres
A little bit of everything so long as I can fit one of my existing characters into the RP
I have a couple pages written and it would mean a lot to me if someone could look it over. People are free to give any sort of feedback they like as I don't have anyone in real life that I will let look at my writing and also take the time to point stuff out to me. The only thing is I will most likely be using it for a book so I would appreciate it if I could PM you the links to the writing.

Thank you for any help and feel free to either post here and have me PM you or PM me first. Either way works.