Roleplay Review & Criticism

Wolk

Don't bother
Original poster
Posting Speed
1-3 posts per day, One post per day, 1-3 posts per week
Online Availability
1800 - 2200 CET/CEST at weekdays
Writing Levels
Intermediate
Preferred Character Gender
Male, Female, Primarily Prefer Male
Genres
Fantasy, Medieval
Hey,

I'd greatly appreciate review and constructive criticism of my roleplay posts in this roleplay. Obviously there isn't much to go on, but it is ongoing and further posts will likely follow. Naturally, I ask because I want to get better and haven't roleplayed in a long time - and when I did, there wasn't much help from others. Of course I already looked around in the forums and continue to do so, but I feel as if specifics on what I need to improve would support my efforts :)

Cheers
 

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That one harlot
Posting Speed
1-3 posts per week, One post per week
Writing Levels
Adaptable
Preferred Character Gender
No Preferences
Genres
Fantasy, medieval.
Okay, I read a good portion of it and I like where you're going with it.

My critique is that I don't really know much about the characters you're writing or the setting. You should practice writing different kinds of descriptions of your characters as well as the settings. Get comfortable with describing their feelings and gestures or what they're wearing and what not. Practice some more, use Iwaku's writing exercises and get more opinions through those exercises but overall, it wasn't a bad start. :)
 
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Wolk

Don't bother
Original poster
Posting Speed
1-3 posts per day, One post per day, 1-3 posts per week
Online Availability
1800 - 2200 CET/CEST at weekdays
Writing Levels
Intermediate
Preferred Character Gender
Male, Female, Primarily Prefer Male
Genres
Fantasy, Medieval
I was mostly writing for my roleplay partner who has the character sheets, so I didn't think about describing the characters - good point. Thanks!
 
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