Rate A Poem/Lyrics/etc. Game

Discussion in 'THREAD ARCHIVES' started by Dawn Bringer Invictus, Sep 17, 2010.

  1. Basically, one person puts up the poem/lyrics/etc., the other rates it out of a 100, then that person puts up his, another person rates and puts another up and the cycle repeats.

    Let's start, shall we?

    <center>Stillbirth Machine by Order From Chaos off Stillbirth Machine (1993)


    </center> I am an alien from another world
    Sent to communicate a message
    Of wisdom I speak but no one hears me
    Deaf ears, dull eyes leave me behind

    Encased inside blooded flesh
    I communicate my message of truth
    But you are senseless
    To what should never have been forgotten
    The walls are built higher and stronger
    Word by word, the walls of ignorance
    And the worm procreates in my belly

    Begat of spite and hate
    I must pay the wage of sin
    Delusions of grandeur
    Until my birth starts again

    Contractions warm this beating heart
    Umbilically chained to the machine
    Re-emergence of a second coming
    Deliverance into the barren world
    Infanticidal process of regurgitation
    And the chrisom's tears cannot dry

    Realization hits like a hammer
    As societal stillbirth machine rolls on
    Rusty gears feeding itself confusion
    I choke and gasp on this poisoned world
    And see myself and other human wreckage
    If I had just one wish it would be
    To crawl back into the womb

    Hope is the lie that gropes towards doom
    Blind leading blind
    What we were, we are, and forever will be
    Thy will be done

    Ignorant worms
    White blind and deaf
    And forever doomed
    Groping futility in the sunlight
    And machinations of the truth

    Breaths of pollutants spout from the lips
    Protective measures gas mask welds with flesh
    Adaptation mutation self preservation

    The curse of wisdom
    I see with my eyes plucked out
    I hear with my ears crushed
    Plead for freedom
    Taste the salt (tears for humanity)
    Tears plow furrows down my cheeks
    What have I done
    Now I know that ignorance is bliss

    When I did crawl from the blighted womb
    Childlike spawn of diseased ovum
    Warmth of pain is gone
    My message is clear
    We are like them - you and I are one
    Stunted embryonic forms
    No wisdom unintelligible products of the
    Stillbirth machine

    Why did I ever think I was not
    We are like them
    And I grope blindly in the light
    You and I are one
    Truth sears flesh withers (can't read this bit)
    I was wrong
    I am nothingness I am dust
    Begone
     
  2. 92/100 metal songs are so epic! Heavy imagery, seriously.

    Small Town Witch by Sneaker Pimps

    "See black, see bloom-
    Died on an impulse over you.
    Caught like a corpse crawling 'round the dream and loving you...
    And she hangs on youth,
    Crushing in her feet to fit the shoes.
    Stepping it out with her size 12 mouth and cursing you!

    Small town witch come to mess me up
    Small town witch come to mess me up
    Small town witch come to mess me up again...

    And she whored and she graced
    Bitching at the bottle,
    Saving face.
    Blowing it out as the jury's doubt is laid to waste...
    See black, see bloom!
    Choked up on a heartburn,
    Bleeding through...
    How does it feel when the ones who feed are biting you?

    Small town witch come to mess me up
    Small town witch come to mess me up
    Small town witch come to mess me up again."
     
  3. 60/100 - I dunno, it just doesn't feel like...much?...to me I guess :S

    Circle of the Tyrants by Celtic Frost off To Mega Therion (1985).

    After the battle is over
    And the sands drunken the blood
    All what there remains
    Is the bitterness of delusion

    The immortality of the gods
    Sits at their side
    As they leave the walls behind
    To reach the jewels gleam

    The days have come
    When the steel will rule
    And upon his head
    A crown of gold

    Your hand wields the might
    The tyrant's the precursor
    You carry the will
    As the morning is near

    I sing the ballads
    Of victory and defeat
    I hear the tales
    Of frozen mystery

    The new kingdoms rise
    By the circle of the tyrants
    In the land of darkness
    The warrior, that was me
    Grotesque glory
    None will (ever) see them fall
    And hunts and war
    Are like everlasting shadows

    Where the winds cannot reach
    The tyrant's might was born
    And often I look back
    With tears in my eyes
    Grotesque glory
    None will (ever) see them fall
    And hunts and wars
    Are like everlasting shadows
     
  4. 83/100

    I like Celtic frost.


    CRYSTALLION - Vanishing Glory.
    =====================

    Christian greed brings them death
    My caravan's lost, I see
    A rush of blood to my head - it's deafening me
    Can't let them go, it's my duty, they died for me
    It's Raynald's will, I don't know is this meant to be
    There is no way out for me - it's killing me
    My army shall rise, Christian downfall we'll see

    They have reigned the Holy Land
    Jerusalem in Christian hand
    Shameful fields of Montgisard
    Will the Sultan rise again
    There's no doubt we will regain
    Our old glory, we shall rise

    After all - hear me scream, hear me scream
    Battles taking their toll, open the gates

    [Sultan Saladin's forces]
    Now the war is at hand, we will regain our land
    Our people and our Muslim faith we'll defend - To battle we ride
    It's their final crusade
    Our feud will be brought to an end here and now

    [Sultan Saladin]
    20000 Eastern men
    Will bring back Jerusalem
    No Knights Templar will remain
    Under Saladin the Great
    Muslim states retaliate
    Guy of Lusignan will fall

    One more time - hear me scream, hear me scream
    Battles taking their toll, open the gates

    [Sultan Saladin's forces]
    Now the war is at hand, we will regain our land
    Our people and our Muslim faith we'll defend - To battle we ride
    It's their final crusade
    Our feud will be brought to an end here and now

    It's our destiny to fight
    Christian hordes won't see the night
    In the end, will we be right?
    It's not us who want this war
    One more battle, then no more
    We will rule just like before

    After all - hear me scream, hear me scream
    Battles taking their toll, open the gates

    [Sultan Saladin's forces]
    Now the war is at hand, we will regain our land
    Our people and our Muslim faith we'll defend - To battle we ride
    It's their final crusade
    Our feud will be brought to an end here and now
     
  5. 80/100 - Makes me think of "The Script for my Requiem" by Blind Guardian.


    Unquestionable Presence by Atheist:


    The fog rolls in thin here tonight
    And all that is warm
    Grows ice cold
    All that are strong
    Fill with fright
    My ship has returned here tonight

    Get away
    Don''t you touch my precious ship
    Be thankful that you witnessed it at all

    [Chorus]

    ''Cause you can never understand
    My life in space
    Our visits here
    Have gone untraced for years
    So easy to create
    A shell like you
    I must leave now and return

    Our presence is unquestionable
    We cannot be seen for this long
    Now look at what you''ve done
    Created such a stir
    If only you had kept to yourself
    You might have known for sure
    Proof of life in outer space

    Our mission is completed
    Our voyage is ahead
    Our data is collected
    To manking it''s fed
    And deeper and deeper we fall

    [Chorus]
     
  6. 82/100 I think it would be more evocative with the music behind it but it stands well on it's own.

    Empathy With The Devil, by Tear Garden

    My flavor is the stuff of locusts
    Hot chilli fire brand spitting volcano teeth
    Bleeding skies, sulfer mines
    The foul breath of Satan's favorite gutter worm
    You feel me when I'm close
    An ice wind of steel
    Stillettos hammered into your spine
    Quicksiler nausea spinning
    Spewing forth and everything's a mess
    Every posession you've ever had wrecked
    Laying at your feet
    Telegrams that tell you God is dead
    Piled high on the TV
    The incessant TV...
    A cheesecake nun advertising 20 brands of sea cow lemon shit in 60 different languages
    A gargoyle hand jives for the hard of hearing
    Subliminals
    Criminals
    Phony businessmen in thick rimmed glasses
    Bad comedians
    Laughing bags apeing the hallelujah chorus
    The forgotten version
    Out of key
    Slightly
    Just enough to annoy you

    My flavor is cheap perfume on a rotting man-ray
    Maggots
    Dead maggots

    My flavor is a wound reopening by surprise
    Green fishes eyes flowing out
    Wriggling things
    Gelatinous
    Still alive and screaming
    Out of key
    Slightly
    Just enough to annoy you

    My flavor is a plunging elevator
    A millisecond before it hits the cellar
    A cellar with mutated rats
    Old- very old- lost teeth
    Abortions
    Garbage
    So pungent it hums
    Out of key
    Slightly
    Just enough to annoy you

    My flavor is your flavor
    Deep within you
    Hidden

    Waiting to get out....
     
  7. 75/100 - "Hot chilli fire brand spitting volcano teeth" YUSS

    "The Sword's Lament" by Cauldron Born:

    Mine is the card of suffering
    Mine is the card of misery
    All of this was foretold
    Before these depictions ever hung in Thoth's gallery
    I have many names for many heroes
    As I see pass another century, this means nothing to me

    I Caladcholy, Excalibur, Socht's sword Glorm Glas,
    Beater and Biter
    I Mournblade, Stormbringer, Cruadin
    I am the sword with which Siegfried slew the dragon

    Those strong enough to brandish me will only know in their lives misery
    I drink deep of souls while all those around them die,
    This foretold before man could shape steel into a
    triumph of will
    Or the pyramids caressed the sky

    I Caladcholy, Excalibur, Socht's sword,
    Glorm Glas,
    Beater and Biter
    I Mournblade, Stormbringer, Cruadin
    I am the sword with which Siegfried slew the dragon

    I may lie Aeons in the bottom of a lake or dwell in a
    netherworld cave in Ameeron

    I Caladcholy, Excalibur, I will drink your soul from the depleted chalice that is nothing more than the shell of a man where once stood a mythical champion
     
  8. 95/100 F****** EPIC

    "The Sentinel" By Judas Priest

    Along deserted avenues
    Steam begins to rise
    The figures primed and ready
    Prepared for quick surprise
    He's watchin' for a sign
    His life is on the line

    Sworn to avenge
    Condemn to hell
    Tempt not the blade
    All fear the Sentinel

    Dogs whine in the alleys
    Smoke is on the wind
    From deep inside its empty shell
    A cathedral bell begins
    Sending out its toll
    A storm begins to grow

    Sworn to avenge
    Condemn to hell
    Tempt not the blade
    All fear the Sentinel

    Amidst the upturned burned-out cars
    The challengers await
    And in their fists clutch iron bars
    With which to seal his fate
    Across his chest is scabbards rest
    The rows of throwing knives
    Whose razor points in challenged tests
    Have finished many lives

    Now facing one another
    The stand-off eats at time
    Then all at once a silence falls
    As the bell ceases its chime
    Upon this sign the challengers
    With shrieks and cries rush forth
    The knives fly out like bullets
    Upon their deadly course
    Screams of pain and agony
    Rent the silent air
    Amidst the dying bodies
    Blood runs everywhere
    The figure stands expressionless
    Impassive and alone
    Unmoved by this victory
    And the seeds of death he's sown

    Sworn to avenge
    Condemn to hell
    Tempt not the blade
    All fear the Sentinel
     
  9. 95/100 - *grabs a picture of Rob Halford and runs to the nearest washroom*


    ...

    Just kidding.


    "Iter Impius" by Pain of Salvation:

    Mr. Money:
    I woke up today
    Expecting to find all that I sought
    And climb the mountains of the life I bought
    Finally I'm at the top of every hierarchy
    Unfortunately there is no one left
    But me

    I woke up today
    To a world that's ground to dust, dirt and stone
    I'm the king upon this withering throne
    I ruled every forest, every mountain, every sea
    Now there're but ruins left to rule for me
    And... you see, it beckons me;
    Life turned its back on us
    How could you just agree?
    ...how? I just don't see...

    I woke up today
    To a world devoid of forests and trees
    Drained of every ocean, every sea
    Just like a useless brick upon the shore
    The morning after the storm
    That swept the bridge away
    Relentless tide
    No anger
    Just this relentless time
    That calls us all on
    But...

    I'm never crossing that line
    Leaving this world behind
    I will stay on my own
    On this bloodstained throne
    I rule the ruins and wrecks
    And the dust, dirt and stone
    I rule rage rod and rattling of bones

    I am on my own
    I am all alone
    Everything is gone
    Stuck forever here
    Already cold

    I'm never crossing that line
    Leaving this world behind
    I will stay on my own
    On this bloodstained throne...

    I'm never crossing that line
    Leaving this world behind
    I will stay on my own
    On this bloodstained throne
    I rule the ruins and wrecks
    And the dirt and the dust and the stone
    I'm the ruler of rage rod and rust
    And the rattling of bones
    Ruler of ruin
    I rule the ruins (ad lib)
     
  10. 83/100 I liked it, but some didn't appeal to me. oo;
    ------
    The Happy Song - Voltaire
    ~

    Spoken: A Buddhist on the subway tells me that
    What you want is rarely, if ever, what you need.
    And of course, I argue the point like a completely self-righteous idiot.

    Sung: I was looking for perfection
    And it found me, right between the eyes
    All this time we spent in bliss,
    You know, like all things, it has to fade away
    The devil says beware
    Cus when you ask, you might get what you want
    The devil, he may care
    When you ask, you might get what you want

    Spoken: So now I spend most of my time waiting for things to happen,
    Letting the wind take me where it will.

    Sung: Only when it's done do you lose the veil
    You get so blind you never see the light coming down the tracks
    It keeps me hanging from a thread
    Devil drives the train,
    Devil pass me by

    This is the happy song I wrote for you
    You know, this is the happy song I never wrote for you

    And after all this time,
    And after all the lies
    Never dreamed you would seem to me little more than an earthly waste of time
    After all these precious opportunities that I had to set things right
    Dissolve like regret in heaven, they do
    And she said

    Anata no namae o yuki ni kaku
    Keredomo nani mo iwanai.
    [Japanese translation: You write your name in the snow
    Yet say nothing.]

    This is the happy song I wrote for you
    This is the happy song I never wrote for you

    After all this time, and after all the lies
    Never dreamed you would seem to me little more than an earthly waste of time
    After all these precious opportunities that I had to set things right
    Dissolve like regret in heaven,
    Zen Buddhist heaven.
     
  11. 60/100 - Feels like it could be more; it has some good ideas but it doesn't really take them the whole way.


    "Testimony" by Pestilence:

    ["Seeking life-answers by using dark powers"]

    The gates to my subconscious, open wide
    Hear and remember, the incantations I recite
    Reveal the power, no longer known by man
    Possess, before the ancients rule the earth once again

    Beneath the seas and skies of the human mind
    The abyss yawns wide before me
    Uncertain what truth of lies I will find
    Appear and share my wisdom, for I know thee

    Descend into the foul places of death
    I fear for my flesh, for I have seen my epitaph
    The price I pay on this lonely journey
    Is softened and I hope the gods will have mercy

    From a time before a time a cold voice has spoken
    From a land beyond the stars I evoke thee
    In exchange for wisdom, what evil have I woken
    What terrible faith shall consume me?

    I've seen the future
    I've seen the past
    I've seen the sight of whom causeth horror
    I've seen my place of rest

    I've travelled on spheres, I've seen things
    Beyond imagination
    The things I have learned are the most pure revelation
    Obliterated are the lines of my life
    My blood cries out as I make my last sacrifice

    I cannot see, I cannot move, 'cause sight is failing me
    Knowing that the beasts of the spaces claim my blood
    My blood turns black but frightened I cannot be
    The bargain is sealed, the price to pay is to rot

    Testimony of the ancients​
     
  12. 90/100. Never heard that song, but thats some good, dark stuff right there.

    "Keeper Of The Seven Keys" By Helloween

    [Music + lyrics: M. Weikath]

    Make the people
    hold each other's hands
    and fill their hearts with truth
    you made up your mind
    so do as divined

    Put on your armour
    ragged after fights
    hold up your sword
    you're leaving the light
    make yourself ready
    for the lords of the dark
    they'll watch your way
    so be cautious, quiet and hark

    You hear them whispering
    in the crowns of the trees
    you're whirling 'round
    but your eyes don't agree
    will 'o' the wisps
    misguiding your path
    you can't throw a curse
    without takin' their wrath

    [Bridge:]
    Watch out for the seas of hatred and sin
    or all us people forget what we've been
    our only hope's your victory
    kill that satan who won't let us be--kill!

    [Chorus:]
    You're the keeper of the seven keys
    that lock up the seven seas
    and the seer of visions sais before he went blind
    hide them from demons and rescue mankind
    or the world we're all in will soon be sold
    to the thone of the evil payed with Lucifer's gold

    You can feel cold sweat
    running down your neck
    and the dwarfs of falseness
    throw mud at your back

    Guided by spells
    of the old seer's hand
    you're suffering pain
    only steel can stand

    [Bridge:]
    Stay well on your way and follow the sign
    fulfull your own promise and do what's divined
    the seven seas are far away
    placed in the valley of dust heat and sway

    [Chorus:]
    You're the keeper of the seven keys
    that lock up the seven seas
    and the seer of visions said before he went blind
    hide them from demons and rescue mankind
    or the world we're all in will soon be sold
    to the throne of the evil payed with Lucifer's gold

    Throw the first key into the sea of hate
    [Solo: Mike/Kai]
    throw the second key into the sea of fear
    throw the third key into the sea of senselessness
    and make the people hold each other's hands
    the fourth key belongs into the sea of greed
    and the fifth into the sea of ignorance
    Disease, disease, disease my friend
    for this whole world's in devil's hand
    Disease, disease, disease my friend
    throw the key or you may die

    [Solo: Kai/Mike/Kai/Mike]

    On a mound at the shore of the last sea
    he is sitting, fixing your sight
    with his high iron voice causing sickness
    he is playing you out with delight
    man who do you just think you are?
    a silly bum with seven stars
    don't throw the key or you will see
    dimensions cruel as they can be
    don't let him suck off your power
    throw the key. . .!

    [Solo: both/Kai/Mike/Kai/Mike]

    An earthquake, squirting fire, bursting ground
    Satan's screaming, and earth swallowing him away!

    [Chorus:]
    You're the keeper of the seven keys
    you locked up the seven seas
    and the seer of visions can now rest in peace
    there ain't no more demons and no more disease
    and, mankind, live up, you're free again
    yes the tyrant is dead, he is gone, overthrown
    you have given our souls back to light
     
  13. 86/100


    King Rat by Modest Mouse

    Well! [x4]

    We spun like birds on fire right down towards the residence and I
    I took all that I desired, even crooks have to pay the rent.
    We swam like rats on fire right, right down the reservoir
    We took all that we could carry but we tried to carry more.

    And you know you know you know it all went wrong.
    And you know you know you know it was all wrong.

    We choked on straight tap water well I'm gonna have to try the real thing
    I took your laugh by the collar and it knew not to swing.
    Anytime I tried an honest job well the till had a hole and ha-ha
    We laughed about payin' rent 'cause the county jails they're free.

    And you know you know you know it all went wrong.
    And you know you know you know it was all wrong.

    Deep Water, Deep Water
    Senseless Denial
    I went down like a rag doll as you would, child
    Deep Water, Deep Water
    Senseless Denial
    I went down like a rag doll as you would, child

    Oh, lucky lucky lucky lucky me again.
    I said it looks like I've got to use my feet again
    Well I just spent my last one-hundred dollars
    God I'll pay my bill again

    Oh, I don't care
    Oh, how I just don't care.

    Deep Water, Deep Water
    Senseless Denial
    I went down like a rag doll shooken and shy
    Deep Water, Deep Water
    Senseless Denial
    I went down like a rag doll rat of a child

    Well King rat has me on his list again
    I can never be on the fence again
    I found out it's all loud
    Open like an organ and it
    talk, talk, talk, talk again
    he promised me that when I cheated him
    But I could open my eye well...
    lucky, lucky, lucky, lucky, lucky,
    lucky, lucky, lucky, lucky, lucky me again.

    Deep Water, Deep Water
    This Senseless Denial
    I got fed like a fish, full of open smiles
    Blue Water, Deep Water
    Oh Senseless Denial
    I got fed like a fish on the cardboard smiles

    Well Well...
    What do you have to say for yourself?
    I said, well well
    Well?
    I said well, well, well, well!

    Lucky, lucky, lucky, lucky me again.
    I hardly knew I should use my feet again
    What do you have to say for yourself?
    What do you have to say for yourself?
     
  14. 54/100 - :/ *shrugging here*

    <center>Soon Ripe, Soon Rotten by Creepmime:



    </center> He that lives in hope, dances to all ill tune
    for wantonness knows no law
    and corporations have neither bodies to be punished
    nor souls to be damned
    the road to oblivion is paved with good intentions
    and work incentives

    In the world of the blind
    the one eyed man makes corporations
    corporations leaving sickness
    which can't be cured which must be endured

    One funeral brings many in civilised society
    a society soon ripe, soon rotten

    A guilty conscience needs no accuser
    but silence is mistaken for consent and to err is human
    drive out nature with a pitchfork and she'll neither come back
    nor breathe for us again
    the road of oblivion is paved with good intentions
    and momentary lapses of reason
     
  15. 70/100 - Didn't appeal to me too much.


    World at Large-Modest Mouse

    Ice-age heat wave, can't complain.
    If the world's at large, why should I remain?
    Walked away to another plan.
    Gonna find another place, maybe one I can stand.
    I move on to another day,
    to a whole new town with a whole new way.
    Went to the porch to have a thought.
    Got to the door and again, I couldn't stop.
    You don't know where and you don't know when.
    But you still got your words and you got your friends.
    Walk along to another day.
    Work a little harder, work another way.

    Well uh-uh baby I ain't got no plan.
    We'll float on maybe would you understand?
    Gonna float on maybe would you understand?
    Well float on maybe would you understand?

    The days get shorter and the nights get cold.
    I like the autumn but this place is getting old.
    I pack up my belongings and I head for the coast.
    It might not be a lot but I feel like I'm making the most.
    The days get longer and the nights smell green.
    I guess it's not surprising but it's spring and I should leave.

    I like songs about drifters - books about the same.
    They both seem to make me feel a little less insane.
    Walked on off to another spot.
    I still haven't gotten anywhere that I want.
    Did I want love? Did I need to know?
    Why does it always feel like I'm caught in an undertow?

    The moths beat themselves to death against the lights.
    Adding their breeze to the summer nights.
    Outside, water like air was great.
    I didn't know what I had that day.
    Walk a little farther to another plan.
    You said that you did, but you didn't understand.

    I know that starting over is not what life's about.
    But my thoughts were so loud I couldn't hear my mouth.
    My thoughts were so loud I couldn't hear my mouth.
    My thoughts were so loud.
     
  16. 55/100 - :S

    <center>The Unknown Knows by Voivod


    </center> On this train
    Will it always rain?
    Try to analyze
    This led venture
    Songless sky, digital bug-eye
    Octogonal seams so much clearer
    Indiscrete, status incomplete
    To provide me with
    Something better

    Things come and go
    This world is droll
    All that I know
    The Unknown knows

    Talk to me you flying shadows
    Wandering into the ozone stew
    Keep your myths from the embryos
    Who would misconstrue
    Anything new
    An outright official fiasco
    Can you shiled me
    From the drastic truth

    Times come and go
    How dull the flow
    All that I hope
    The Unknown knows

    Have some sign come to me
    That I am in their league
    Back down to reality
    Look about, response is wanting
    Events are carefully on display
    Common sense, a gift, is given
    But mystic mistakes are never made
    Suspecting premature daydreams

    I surrender to ritual grey
    I come and go
    Endless approach
    I must be close
    The Unknown knows

    Why all this commotion now?
    Stop...wait
    I wish I knew the one who knows
    Yesterday will come
    With tomorrow's sun
    And merry-go-round
    Stuck on muddy ground
    Nineteen yelping fools
    Half-wits spouting drool
    Half of which have some
    The others have none
    I knew all along