Please Help

[Lyrical Machine]

Okay, so I've been working on this sketch for a bit and it's very rough. I'm making it a big deal because it's for someone important to me! Please give me any tips and DO NOT be scared of hurting my feelings and be scared to tell me if there is something wrong. Please help.

Zoom in on hand bc that's what I had most trouble with

 

[Flannel]

Honestly, it looks well done to me.

The male's pointer finger looks a bit weird although, I guess because you make the fingernail a bit awkward.

I like it.

 

[Smo]

The index finger, the joint near the nail, looks off to me. I'd try to make it a little bent to make it a little more natural? The nail looks a bit weird too.

Other than that, you know how much I like your art from what you showed me! This is beginning to look good too! :3

 

[Lyrical Machine]

Thank you, both. As it's well known, hands can be such a pain -.-

 

[Fijoli]

You might be over working some areas. Loosen up on how hard you press into the paper and be conscious of how much you are erasing in one area, it ruins the beautiful work you do.

It's difficult and I do the same thing a lot, I use kneaded erasers and barely touch an HB pencil to the paper when I first start out the drawing. If I can't erase an over worked area I darken it some how with ink pens.

Without those smudges and faded lines this would be perfect!

 

[Hitomi Forsyth]

Thank you, both. As it's well known, hands can be such a pain -.-

You're capable of doing hands though, that's amazing to me, I fail so hard at hands even though I practice endlessly I could never draw something this pretty though.

 

[Fijoli]

I just also noticed the necklace, if they are falling I would think the necklace would be loosely flapping up in her face or up near her ear somewhere.

Maybe I'm splitting hairs but details are details :|

It's still amazing work though.

 

[Minibit]

Looks good! The hair is off though; it seems to lie normally on the top of their heads and only the length is 'falling'. The length should lift more than shorter areas (like bangs or a layered hairdo) but ALL the hair should be lifted to some degree. Also the fold line along her nearest leg makes it look like her skirt is clinging to the leg. This would work if we were viewing from below, but from the side her skirt should be pulled upward; direct the fold lines accordingly

 

[Lyrical Machine]

The details are what matter the most in my opinion so thank you!