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"Include These Lyrics" Story Challenge #1
I am so incredibly new so please excuse me if my ideas don't match the way the community does things here. I notice a lot of these challenges don't have feedback listed. But I really want both - a rating on my scene's personality and quality, AND seeing what results you great and varied writers come up with from the suggested material.
Challenge: Include two lines from the following song. The two quotes don't have to come from the same verse back-to-back, or appear joined together in the same paragraph within your writing. Please underline, bold, or differently color the lines you use. There is no limit or requirement to the size of your story or scene.
One of These Days - Foo Fighters
One of these days, the ground will drop out from beneath your feet
One of these days, your heart will stop and play its final beat
One of these days, the clocks will stop and time won't mean a thing
One of these days, their bombs will drop and silence everything
But it's alright, yeah it's alright, said it's alright
Easy for you to say
Your heart has never been broken
Your pride has never been stolen
Not yet, not yet, one of these days
I bet your heart'll be broken
I bet your pride'll be stolen
I'll bet, I'll bet, I'll bet, I'll bet
One of these days, one of these days
One of these days, your eyes will close and pain will disappear
One of these days, you will forget to hope and learn to fear
Youtube: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=_i0iBs-J5BU
I am so incredibly new so please excuse me if my ideas don't match the way the community does things here. I notice a lot of these challenges don't have feedback listed. But I really want both - a rating on my scene's personality and quality, AND seeing what results you great and varied writers come up with from the suggested material.
Challenge: Include two lines from the following song. The two quotes don't have to come from the same verse back-to-back, or appear joined together in the same paragraph within your writing. Please underline, bold, or differently color the lines you use. There is no limit or requirement to the size of your story or scene.
One of These Days - Foo Fighters
One of these days, the ground will drop out from beneath your feet
One of these days, your heart will stop and play its final beat
One of these days, the clocks will stop and time won't mean a thing
One of these days, their bombs will drop and silence everything
But it's alright, yeah it's alright, said it's alright
Easy for you to say
Your heart has never been broken
Your pride has never been stolen
Not yet, not yet, one of these days
I bet your heart'll be broken
I bet your pride'll be stolen
I'll bet, I'll bet, I'll bet, I'll bet
One of these days, one of these days
One of these days, your eyes will close and pain will disappear
One of these days, you will forget to hope and learn to fear
Youtube: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=_i0iBs-J5BU