I'm Just The Sky

Discussion in 'THREAD ARCHIVES' started by Tuxedo Mask, Jan 27, 2010.

  1. "Connecting to nature through the wind"
     
  2. I'm copying Asmupuu's critique style
    /snickergiggle/

    :) Your stanzas are short, but your feelings are strong.
    The poem may not be as emotional or powerful, but I can distinctly see that you've thought it out well and made some nice connections/metaphors to the romance.
    I especially like "If the sun becomes the moon's bride, brushed aside." & the "masquerade...checkmate"
    A well crafted poem
    :D You're a great poet :D