Five-Point Speed-Writing: Week 5

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I'm open to a wide range of genres. Obscenely wide. It's harder for me to list all I do like than all I don't like.

My favorite settings are fantasy combined with something else, multiverse, post-apoc, historical (mixed with something else), and futuristic. I'm not limited to those, but it's a good start.

My favorite genres include mystery, adventure, action, drama, tragedy (must be mixed with something else and kept balanced), romance (again must be mixed, and more.

I'm happy to include elements of slice-of-life and romance, but doing them on their own doesn't hold my interest indefinitely.

Five-Point Speed-Writing Exercise
Inspired by the lovely Ravenfrost.

Write or draft a story using the below story elements without pausing and trying to not take over 20 minutes (you can rewrite or edit afterwards, if you want).


Who:
Who is involved? They don't have to be a main character.
  • A haunted barista.

What:
Include the below so that they're instrumental to the story.
  • Pain and pen.

When:
When does the story take place?
  • November at midnight.

Where:
Where is this happening?
  • A park.

How:
How does it end? Include this in the ending/resolution.
  • A ball.
 
It was only moderately cold for a November night in Wyoming, but Katie was already shivering.

Her nerves had twanged painfully when she heard the door of the "Happy Habits" coffee shop jingle open. Katie darted a quick glance to see if it was HIM, the self-centered maniac that was making her life a living hell—and froze.

Her current customer, an elderly rangy gentleman in a cowboy hat with ample gray nose hair and pouty lips, made a dissatisfied noise at having her attention diverted and rose up from his seat.

"Excuuuse me, did you get that? Skim milk!" he repeated in an unnecessarily loud voice.

Her co-workers cast curious looks at her and Katie tried to paste on a professional smile.

"Sure thing. Got it. Coming right up."

The cowboy eyed her suspiciously, but grudgingly dropped back down on his counter seat with a sour expression on his face.

Katie's hands shook slightly as she tried to go about her tasks, but she was unable to ignore the fact that her nemesis, with a wide grin, had just plunked himself down at the counter in her area and was pretending to look over the worn one-page menu. Damn him!

Carstairs was playing with her, driving her crazy, penning her in, completely haunting her every footstep. There was no place she was safe from him. She didn't know how much longer she could live with the pain he was causing her before she totally flipped out and did something stupid.

Katie tucked a wayward bright red curl behind her ear before setting down Mr. Nose Hair's espresso onto the worn countertop in front of him, ignoring him as he examined it as critically as though it was the first cup he had ever seen.

Her mood was rapidly changing from terrified to belligerent. Probably because that was her only defense against becoming completely hysterical.

She whirled and looked directly at Carstairs.

"Sir? Are you ready to order?" She attempted to fake being subservient, but sounded more like she was challenging him to a gladiatorial duel.

Carstairs smirked and leaned back slightly, taking a long slow simmering look at her under his long-lashed brown eyes. "Ah. My favorite barista."

In a voice too low for her co-workers to hear, she retorted, "Don't make it so fancy, Carstairs. I'm not a barista or anything else. I pour a lousy cup of coffee. I give orders to the fry cook. So. Whaddayawant?"

Katie stood glaring, pad and pen in hand. A slender young woman with circles under her despairing eyes, hair dyed bright red, minimal make-up, and stubborn chin in what would have been a pretty face if it hadn't looked so exhausted.

Carstairs ignored the stubborn chin and focused on the defenseless set of her thin shoulders.

It was exciting. She hadn't cracked yet and still showed defiance. Although she had to know she was completely in his power since she wasn't a stupid girl, by any means. Simply a desperate one. He'd played her well, but now was the time for his reward. He didn't want to wait any longer. Tonight he'd break her and thereby savor that sweetest of sensations. The sense of power that accompanied decimating another human being's sense of worth was the biggest rush he had ever known.

He casually swept an elegant hand through his glossy dark hair, quite conscious that all the other women in the coffee shop were eyeing him appreciatively.

"Katie, the order I'm giving you isn't going to go to the fry cook," he purred, sotto voice. "Meet me in the park tonight at midnight. The usual place. I'll be waiting. And if you're not there on time, I'll go to the police with everything I know."

He watched her blanch and leaned forward for emphasis. "I'm not kidding, Katie, so don't fuck me about. This is serious. Nod if you understand."

Katie clenched her teeth and gave him a brief nod. Damn right it was serious. She had to think of a way to end this tonight, one way or the other.

The cowboy three seats away gave them both a weird look, but Carstairs, the richest man in town, simply winked at the old badger, knowingly, "The course of true love never did run smooth," he murmured.

"Just the usual -- whole wheat toast and cup of your most excellent coffee, Katie, dear," he said in a loud jovial tone.

It was several hours later when Katie, boiling mad but feeling frozen to the bone, walked to their meeting place (by the statue of Carstairs' ancestor being heroic – or merely rich) in the deserted city park. Carstairs was there, a smug expression on his face, waiting in his obscenely expensive sports car. He swung open the passenger door and motioned for her to get inside. She moved into the warmth of it.

There was no use arguing with him or pleading with him, she had learned that.

Yes, she had committed a crime when she was desperate for survival two years ago--she had stolen money while working for one of his companies and it was just her bad luck that he had walked in on her and had caught her red-handed, inexperienced and fumbling as she had been. And he had laughed. Laughed at her! Told her it was all on the security camera, but that he would keep it their little secret. Keep the money, he said, you can pay me back somehow.

But she didn't know it would be like this. That he would stalk her, feeling free to show up at her home or workplace any time of the day or night, making bizarre demands of her, and still threatened her with exposure constantly.

So far, since he hadn't asked for sex, she had unhappily given into his caprices. By his edict, she had to break up with her boyfriend, then ... couldn't date anyone, couldn't leave town to visit her mother, was forbidden to wear high-necked sweaters, he'd demanded she get out of bed and cook for him at 3 in the morning and in short, completely jerked her around, constantly, some demands simply weird, others completely intrusive. And she couldn't take any more.

"Where to, tonight?" Katie asked bitterly, as she fastened her seat belt, her hands clumsy in her thick wool gloves.

"I fancied a drive to the golf course for us," Carstairs offered smoothly, as though he was giving her a big treat, and put the car into drive.

Intent on each other for different reasons, neither noticed the rusty little pickup truck that swung behind them as they exited the park's main drive, shadowing them from a distance.

The struggle began after they reached the deserted, but still lit golf course, and Carstairs removed a small heap of golfing equipment out of the trunk.

"Caddy for me, Katie," Carstairs instructed, an insolent expression on his face.

"You ARE insane," Katie spit out. "It's freezing, the middle of night, and I don't play golf. I don't even know what a caddy does!"

Carstairs had his own agenda mapped out. A little farther, out of sight, and there was a small outbuilding, ready and waiting—but she didn't need to know that yet.

"You're such a baby, Katie," he remonstrated casually, "suck it up, okay? All you have to do is handle my clubs and wipe the balls between holes. I promise we'll be done before you know it. And wish me luck in getting a hole in one."

Katie's mind wandered as he babbled. She thought about the gun in her purse. She wasn't comfortable with shooting him. She'd only fired a gun at the practice range. But now--they would be near a huge pond. Hmmm. She envisioned hitting him over the head with his own club and leaving him face down in the pond. A warm happy feeling came over her.

Murder, yes, she was contemplating murder! It was horrible. But didn't he deserve to die? She was probably going to go to hell for it, but for now she was already living through hell. She was ready to sell her soul if that's what it took.

She'd wait for her opportunity and grab it if it came.

Carstairs' instructions to Katie were just for the fun of it--to throw her off track and confuse her. He watched in amusement as she awkwardly slung a bag with clubs over her shoulder and trailed after him. However, as the cold wind bit through his warm jacket, he changed plans and simply made a beeline for the small building where a warm bed would be waiting--along with a few simple accessories.

He was going to give Katie her second starring appearance on film. Leaving the cash out where she couldn't help but be tempted by it had been too easy. This time she'd really earn her leading role. What he did with her afterwards would depend on how well she amused him.

Caught up in their plans, they were oblivious to the fact that another golfer was on the course. A lanky old man in a cowboy hat.

As they came across the outbuilding, Carstairs sent Katie ahead with a key to open the door. "Forgot my damn putter! There's a few extra that the golf club keeps in there."

Carstairs owned the golf club. "He should know," thought Katie, as she bent over fiddling with the unfamiliar lock. The pond was just a few yards away. She had just had to last until then.

Carstairs loomed up behind Katie, with a facial expression too viciously predatory to be called a smile. His hands were outstretched, ready to shove her roughly to the floor the moment she opened the door.

Suddenly, Katie heard a loud crack and the sound of a body falling behind her. Gasping, she turned around and saw James Carstairs, III, lying inert on the ground, blood pouring out of his head. A golf ball lay nearby.

Thank God! Was all she could think. She couldn't organize her thoughts enough to try to determine where the ball had come from. No, her next thought was "God helps those who help themselves." She hadn't fired a shot or struck him down. But she would make damn sure it ended here.

Somewhere an old man nodded in satisfaction. His granddaughter was safe now, in a boarding school near New York City. But it was about time that mad dog was put down. What good was a championship cup for, anyways, eh?
 
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Fantastic! Oh, I enjoyed that a lot! xD I love the grumpy man in the cowboy hat.
 
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Daniel flipped the sign to closed as he hung up his apron and pocketed his favorite ink gel pen in the pocket of his button up shirt. No one was taking his pen anymore. He used to leave them, but they always disappeared, so now he brought one with him and kept in on his person at all times. He finished all the paperwork and restocked everything for the morning shift, wiped the tables and ran the vacuum before he grabbed the bank bag and headed out for the night.

He slipped the bag into the night deposit slot and pocketed his keys as he crossed the street to take the shortcut through the park. He pulled his jacket zipper up higher as a blast of cold November air sent a shiver through him. Might be time to dig the gloves out of the closet box, he thought as he shoved his hands deep into his pockets.

There was a loud noise right by his ear and he stumbled and as he turned to see who or what it was he fell over a bench and smacked his head off a trash bin. "Ow..." he said as he reached back to feel his head and his fingers came away with warm sticky blood on them. "Oh great...a cut on a park trash can...I'm going to die for sure now."

"You always were going to die you know...nothing has changed."

He stood up but swayed a bit as he grabbed hold of the bench, "Who's there? Who said that?"

"I did."

"Who? I don't see anyone?"

"Hmm...don't believe in ghosts huh?"

"Of course not, no one does."

"Oh you'd be surprised," the voice came and an eerie sort of chuckle followed.

"You expect me to believe that I'm talking to a ghost?"

"No, but if you DID believe you would be able to see me. Pity really, I'm quite stunning...or so i was told while I lived."

Daniel shrugged, "Just as well then...I'd rather not spend my life lusting after a dead woman. I have enough problems."

"You do? Like what?"

He started to stumble along the path in the direction of his apartment again, "dead end job, long hours, no life, no family, nothing in the bank...shall I go on?" His hand kept going to the bump on his head which always resulted in a wince.

"That might hurt less if you stopped touching it."

"Maybe, but if it doesn't stop bleeding I'll have to go to the ER...I can't afford that. Why did you jump out at me anyway?"

"I sir, do not jump. I just said hello. I cannot be held responsible for your overreaction."

"Of course not."

"Just so, I have noticed you walk through my park every day. I thought it time I introduce myself."

"And just who were you?"

"Haha...cheeky pun. I am Lady Amanda Everly Duchess of Amandor."

"How did you end up in Riverside Park of all places?"

"Tis a tragic tale truly, but I was murdered by my husband on our honeymoon. The scoundrel claimed I was attacked and that he fended them off but that I was struck down in cold blood. That was true but he had done it. My blood is beneath your very feet at the moment. He did the deed in this spot. This path was not here then, but this is the spot."

He turned and looked around. "The best view..." he pointed out at the river.

"Precisely. While he directed my attention to the view he stabbed me and I fell at his feet."

"I'm sorry...that's horrible."

"Not as horrible as dying on your wedding night."

"Dying at all his horrible, being murdered by someone you trust is worse." He frowned, "My name is Daniel Rosenburger by the way."

"Daniel I knew from the thing you sometimes wear with your name written upon it." She noted, "It is my pleasure to meet you. Thank you for talking with me. it does get lonely here."

"Why don't you leave?"

"I wish I could. My blood in this ground binds me here somehow."

"Oh...that's a pity."

"Oh do take care Daniel....look out.."

He stopped and looked down. A soccer ball was right in the path where he was about to walk. "Thank you Milady," he said with a smile and a bow as he kicked the ball into the grass.

"My pleasure Daniel. It would pain me to see you injured twice in one night."

He looked up and he saw her then and she was in truth stunning. "Wow...you are beautiful."

She smiled demurely, "So I have been told. Good night Daniel. I do hope I shall see you again."

Daniel waved as he left the park, "You will." And that was the beginning of what Daniel knew would be his private torturous love affair with a beautiful but dead duchess.