Ok, here it goes
Name: Matthew Riker
Age: 17
Race: Half human automaton (cyborg)
Class: Artificer
Title: Student
Sect Study: Dominus-White
Appearance: Matthew has messy dark brown hair. He stands at 5'7. Being half an automaton, he still looks quite human. He has pale grey eyes. He is very thin, because he doesn't have the same eating needs as a normal human. The automaton part of him gives him robot legs and arms. Because the legs would make him stand out too much, it was made to blend into his skin.
Normally, he causally wears a blue t-shirt and jeans. He wears a different colored shirt for every day of the week. Depending on the temperature, he may wear a sweatshirt if it is too cold.
Personality: Matthew is a 'happy go lucky' kind of person. He doesn't take things too seriously unless he believes that it will effect his life. He is not a bookworm, and prefers learning by doing. On the other hand, he can have a large amount of perseverance. If he believes in something completely, he will work towards that goal, no matter how long it takes.
Sometimes, if he gets into fights with other kids (which doesn't happen too often), he would prefer to ignore and run away. He isn't cowardly, but he prefers not to engage and just wait it out.
Weapon(s): A simple pair of "wolverine" claws that spring from his hands. He also has a small automaton wolf that he can summon with a special whistle that he made.
Abilities/Magic: Being an artificer, he has an ability to enchant his claws. He can enchant his claws to set flame on contact, or freeze on contact. Being only on white, he can only enchant the claws for five minutes.
History: Matthew was just any ordinary kid. He are breakfast, went to school, and came back home. Then there was the accident. He and his parents were in the car, when a truck crashed into them. The truck came with such force that he and his parents barely lived. They were sent to the hospital for treatment. The doctors knew that they needed surgery. After the accident, Matthew had to live with a pair of mechanical arms and legs.
When he finally went back to school 8 months later, people noticed how he walked funny and how his hands acted weird. They noticed that in PE, he could ran faster and longer then anyone. They all thought that there was something wrong with him, or something happened in the 8 months of his absence. Matthew insisted that he was perfectly fine, so that he would start getting made fun of.
Matthew's parents paid a high price for the surgery. After the surgery, the whole family could barely afford 2 meals a day. After the accident, Matthew promised that he would always try his hardest in school, so that he couldn't be giving his parents a hard time. Trying his hardest every year, he finally was able to get into Eureka Academy.
ok, not a gm, but here's my personal issues with the CS
first of all, you shoudl really tell us which planet he comes from. I woudl suggest you go with eritai, and try to describe some of the geography (even knowing which continent he is on will help us) since your character seems to come from a very modern setting and so far corinith has been described as anything from a medieval fantasy setting to (at the very most) a steampunk setting (on my own character's home island), eritai still has been mostly left alone so it would be great for peopel looking for more modern and/or futuristic settings.
secondly, where the hell does this technology come from exactly? I'm saying this because you never mention his parents being incredibly rich, and yet somehow they could afford to have their child have all 4 of his limbs replaced by highly advanced cybernetics. And what exactly happened to THEM? you said that all of them barely survived the crash, so you'd assume that they ALL would need cybernetic implants/prosthetics (i'll also mention that it's practically impossible to have a car-crash in which all four of your limbs would be so incredibly damaged that you'd need to amputate them, but that you;d be so lucky as to have your torso survive completely undamaged so that you don;y just die from being crushed on impact). But then you talk as if somehow those robotic arms and legs are something that is very weird, very uncommon in his society, and that he has to keep them hidden because other people would somehow freak out at seeing that he was now part-robot. If that was the case then this would mean that the robotics technologies in his society were not much more advanced than in real life, which means that unless his parents were billionaires there is no way in hell they could have afforded to pay for even one or two of his limbs, let alone all four (on top of the medical bills they woudl already be paying just to have the doctors save their lives). So unless you make the robotics technologies more advanced, and thus something that would be available to more normal people, makingit something that would cost a whole lot less than you are describing, your story doesn;t make any sense.
I'll also mention that you completely failed to actually describe the limbs themselves in your weapons section. If the robot limbs give him any advantages over his peers (you said they allowed him to run faster and for longerin his history for one) then they count as weapons and you have to explain how they work. for example, are they highly advanced future tech cybernetics that are deigned to 'grow' with him? Or does he have to get them replaced every year as his body continues to grow but they stay the same size. Do they give him super strength? Do they work based of electronic circuitry? magic? internal combustion engines? how durable are they? Why the hell did the doctors give him wolverine claws tobegin with? what possible reason would they have to put lethal weapons literally built into the hands of a normal civvilian teenager? oh, you shoudl also mention that, contrary to popular belief wolverine claws can only be a maximum of about 2 inches long (or the entire length between your wrist and your knuckles. if they are any longer then every time you retract them they are going all teh way back into your fore-arms, which would make it impossible for you to bend your wrists in any way).
and then there's you talking about him being an artificer. First of all, what is this?
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1. A skilled worker; a craftsperson.
2. One that contrives, devises, or constructs something:
so an in real life artificer is basically the same thing as my character's 'tinkerer' but for some reason you are describing artificers as something that can enchant normal objects with magic? so what, are they ust tinkerers who can also enchant the things they construct? or are they just enchanters with a different name? you shoudl include a class description to make it perfectly known what exactly your character's skills are.
then there's also teh fact that you never mention him being an artificer anywhere in his history section. Where did he learn to become one? why did he learn to become one? when did he discover his magical abilities to enchant items? is teh fact that he's an 'artificer' something that he has to hide too? how does magic and advanced cybertechnologies work hand-in-hand in his society?
the character isn't 'bad' but it;s clear that you just threw a lot of traits onto him without thinking too hard about how they shoudl actually fit together sensibly. I would advise that you take a second to look back at yoru character and think to yourself "ok, in real life, how teh hell could a character like this make sense?" (this is, of course, also assuming that 'real-life' allowed you to use magic and advanced cybernetics in yoru explanation) and come back when you have fleshed out the CS to make more sense