EXERCISE Detailed Physical Appearance

Discussion in 'DEVELOPING CHARACTERS & CULTURES' started by Diana, May 18, 2013.

  1. Whether we are writing a roleplay post or creating a bio, a character's appearance is really important. The basics like hair color, eye color, height etc are the starting boards for what we picture when we read what this character is doing. There are a LOT of little details that can go in to a character's physical appearance. When you express them in writing, you should always slip them in one at a time so that you aren't flooding the reader with useless stats - and are instead slowly building a picture and developing this mental image as they read.

    In this exercise, you are going to be detailing out the appearance of your character's BODY FEATURES.

    Pretend your character is standing there naked before you! Describe only what is their physical body. You can jot these down as a quick list for a biography, or write up a fancy description where you slip in the details without sounding like reading off a list of statistics.

    Here are some things to describe:

    - Hair Color
    - Hair Style/Length/Texture (widow's peak? bangs? soft? fine? thick?)
    - Eye Color
    - Shape/Look of Eyes (eyebrows, cat eyes? sleepy eyes? wide eyes?)
    - Shape of the Face/Head (cheekbones, etc)
    - Mouth
    - Nose
    - Chin
    - Ears (shape? piercings?)
    - Hands
    - Feet
    - Chest and Hips
    - Boobs and Penis
    - Height
    - Weight
    - Skin Color & Complexion
    - Race/Species
    - Skin Texture (Soft skin, rough skin, scaly, furry, dry, bumpy)
    - Fur/Scales/Other? Colors? Feel? Coarseness?
    - Body Shape/Build (Thin and lanky, round and fluffy, pudgy, muscular)
    - Posture
    - Distinguishing Features (that set them apart from others or might be unusual or special)
    - Tattoos, birthmarks, scars.
     
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  2. [Sorry for making it sound like statistics >.< Who knows, might write some fancy paragraphs later on.]

    Aimi Fujioka:

    - Hair Color
    Orange. A dull orange with brighter highlights in it. Ginger.
    - Hair Style/Length/Texture (widow's peak? bangs? soft? fine? thick?)
    Extremely wavy, ending at the middle of her back. Bangs stop above her eyes, also wavy. Extremely soft with lots of volume and bounciness.
    - Eye Color
    A light turquoise.
    - Shape/Look of Eyes (eyebrows, cat eyes? sleepy eyes? wide eyes?)
    Wide, expressive eyes placed under thin, perfectly arched, dull orange eyebrows.
    - Shape of the Face/Head (cheekbones, etc)
    Has a small head and a narrow, small face. Can't really see her cheekbones. Has freckles decorating her cheeks and nose.
    - Mouth
    Plump, pouty and soft-looking lips. Straight, white teeth and very sharp canines.
    - Nose
    Small nose that has a slightly pointed tip.
    - Chin
    Small, slightly rounded chin.
    - Ears (shape? piercings?)
    Pointy ears, resembling elf ears. Has one piercing in each earlobe.
    - Hands
    Dainty and delicate. Long, slender fingers that are strong, thanks to piano practice and her addiction to the Internet (lots of typing involved). Nails are always done, but not painted. Sometimes they're painted and other times they aren't.
    - Feet
    Long, narrow feet with long toes. Toe nails are also always done. Skin is smooth and soft for both feet and hands.
    - Chest and Hips
    Has wide hips that lead to a perfect, bubble butt. Smooth, blemish free chest, something she works hard to keep up.
    - Boobs and Penis
    Large breasted. C cup almost D.
    - Height
    5'3".
    - Weight
    132 lbs.
    - Skin Color & Complexion
    Sun-kissed skin with a light complexion
    - Race/Species
    Caucasian/Human
    - Skin Texture (Soft skin, rough skin, scaly, furry, dry, bumpy)
    Soft, smooth skin, save for the occasional pimple/acne breakout. Sensitive skin. Bruises easily.
    - Fur/Scales/Other? Colors? Feel? Coarseness?
    None.
    - Body Shape/Build (Thin and lanky, round and fluffy, pudgy, muscular)
    Slender, hourglass figure. Long torso, legs, and arms. Little to no muscle.
    - Posture
    Straight for the most part. Slouches when she's on her laptop.
    - Distinguishing Features (that set them apart from others or might be unusual or special)
    Her eyes changes different shades of turquoise, depending on her mood.
    - Tattoos, birthmarks, scars.
    Has a birthmark on the back of her ankle that's shaped like a crescent moon.
     
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  3. Merrik Tetra

    - Hair Color
    Merrik's hair is an ashy shade of dark brown, though in most light it appears black. There are slightly noticeable strands scattered about that bear a lighter tone, this he got from his mother who bore chocolate brown locks.
    - Hair Style/Length/Texture (widow's peak? bangs? soft? fine? thick?)
    His hair is worn short and all too often reaches a slightly shaggy length, but its norm stands at about 3 inches, laying about in whichever way it so chooses. Thick and full, much like his mother's, he won't be balding any time soon.
    - Eye Color
    Emeralds of the trees, or so some have said. Merrik's eyes take on an elven tone, just like his father's, a hint at his ancient ancestors. Flecks of lighter, almost lime green and gold dapple his irises, but one would have to get awfully close to notice this.
    - Shape/Look of Eyes (eyebrows, cat eyes? sleepy eyes? wide eyes?)
    Merrik's eyes are rounded ovals with a slightly narrow pull at the end, giving him a timeless appearance, though just slightly. Thick lashes match his thick head of hair and dark brows, ever furrowed, roof his emeralds.
    - Shape of the Face/Head (cheekbones, etc)
    A strong jawline and brow-line give Merrik a manly appearance, but his mother's cheekbones and chin offset them to provide him with a subtler look. His face is oval with a slightly pointed chin and a curved hairline.
    - Mouth
    Thin lips, pale pink and as prone as any man's to being chapped. Merrik certainly isn't known for plump luscious lips and he's not much of a prince charming with those to-die-for kissing lips.
    - Nose
    Merrik's nose is best described as what, in this world, is called Finnish. In Illos, it's much like any other North Sylvian's, medium-large, thin and a fairly defined point.
    - Chin
    His chin is fairly pointed, giving his face a longer look, and no. He doesn't suffer from the "butt chin" syndrome.
    - Ears (shape? piercings?)
    Merrik's ears are of average size, though more on the long side with hardly noticeable points, yet another indicator of his ancient heritage. He has a thick scar running from the top, centre of his right ear that extends all the way to the top outer edge, having been placed there by a run in with a branch while playing tag with Terria in the woods.
    - Hands
    Slender, for a man's hands, they are well worn and bear the calluses of a swordsman. They're covered in scars, despite his ability to heal them. He wears these as a reminder of his mistakes, to help him strive to grow stronger.
    - Feet
    Size 10 1/2, his first and second toes are close in length and longer than the others which descend evenly.
    - Chest and Hips
    Merrik bears a broad chest, but his slightly slender build is apparent. He will never be a bulky, behemoth of a man, for neither his mother nor father were built bulky. His tone is from working out and regular training. His hip bones are well defined when exposed, though in terms of curves, he has little to offer.
    - Boobs and Penis
    Merrik would be the last to discuss such a matter, but he is endowed as any slightly-above-average man would be. Thick, but nothing dangerous, and length standing at just over 6 inches. Circumcised, by his father's will and traditions, and
    - Height
    Merrik is 6"3'
    - Weight
    Merrik weighs around 175 lbs.
    - Skin Color & Complexion
    Pale, at best. Merrik tans very little, despite the amount of time he spends outside. This is likely an inherited trait from his ancestors. Though faint, Merrik has freckles, a light brown color he's told he inherited from his mother's side.
    - Race/Species
    Human. But his ancient ancestors were indeed elves and very slight physical indicators are still visible on him and his family to this day.
    - Skin Texture (Soft skin, rough skin, scaly, furry, dry, bumpy)
    His skin is healthy, to reflect his lifestyle. While he could stand to moisturise a little more often, he doesn't struggle with blemishes.
    - Fur/Scales/Other? Colors? Feel? Coarseness?
    N/A
    - Body Shape/Build (Thin and lanky, round and fluffy, pudgy, muscular)
    Merrik is slender by nature, tall, and muscular by inheritance slightly and by exercise largely.
    - Posture
    He has the posture of a swordsman and a rider (though any horseman would see his posture unsual, for dragon riding take a slightly different set of balance)
    - Distinguishing Features (that set them apart from others or might be unusual or special)
    N/A
    - Tattoos, birthmarks, scars.
    Obsidian Nova often wears a pendant made of his namesake, Obsidian. It has been magically moulded into the shape of the symbol of the dragonlords and has been passed down to each dragon bonded to the Tetras since the time of Cosmaur Sarpe. Merrik, has what can't really be considered a tattoo, but a rune like mana imprint, of the same symbol. He bears this on the centre of his upper back, so few have ever seen it.
     
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  4. ((I'm gonna use a cat character. BD For funsies.))

    - Hair Color-

    Gray and white.

    - Hair Style/Length/Texture (widow's peak? bangs? soft? fine? thick?)-

    Spiky on body; Straight on legs and face; Shaggy on cheeks,tail and belly.

    - Eye Color-

    greenish yellow.

    - Shape/Look of Eyes (eyebrows, cat eyes? sleepy eyes? wide eyes?)-

    Cat eyes. Wide and expressive; Think owls.

    - Shape of the Face/Head (cheekbones, etc)-

    Apple-shaped head with a sharp pointed muzzle.

    - Mouth-

    Small and fragile-looking; His jaw is fairly versitile, so he can open his mouth pretty wide.

    - Nose-

    Sharp, small nose. Pink.

    - Chin-

    smallish chin, with a dash of white like a bib.

    - Ears (shape? piercings?)-

    Sharp, pointed ears that swivel to the side when at rest. A big notch in the left ear.

    - Hands/Paws-

    Small and dainty, but very dextrous, and talented in various arts.

    - Feet-

    See above.

    - Chest and Hips-

    Chest is square and muscular. Hips are swively and easy to move. Somewhat feminine, with a masculine overtone.

    - Boobs and Penis-

    The basic thing. Pretty long, a little thicker than a pencil. Bad-looking spines, though.

    - Height-

    About up to a Human's knee when at full height.

    - Weight-

    25 Pounds

    - Skin Color & Complexion-

    A light grayish-pink, with splotches of white. Especially pink pads.

    - Race/Species-

    Bipedal Domestic Cat.
    American Shorthair, primarily ragdoll.

    - Skin Texture (Soft skin, rough skin, scaly, furry, dry, bumpy)-

    Soft, oily skin, particularly around the face and paws.

    - Fur/Scales/Other? Colors? Feel? Coarseness?-

    Soft, fine fur that is easily matted up.

    - Body Shape/Build (Thin and lanky, round and fluffy, pudgy, muscular)-

    A little pudgy with thin legs. He has lots of muscle underneath, though; Enough to move a heavy coffee table if he tried really hard.

    - Posture-

    Mostly straight, with a slight droop at the shoulders.

    - Distinguishing Features (that set them apart from others or might be unusual or special)-

    One curly whisker on his left cheek.

    - Tattoos, birthmarks, scars.-

    One scar on his side, one on his chest, notched ear.

    And that's Shamrock BD​
     
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  5. Harriet James

    - Hair Color
    Her hair is bubblegum pink. Like this text.
    - Hair Style/Length/Texture (widow's peak? bangs? soft? fine? thick?)
    Harriet has long bubblegum pink hair that goes down to her waist. It is most often worn in two low ponytails (pigtails) and is tied with purple bows. She has long bangs that rest on her eyelashes.
    - Eye Color
    Her eyes are magenta.

    - Shape/Look of Eyes (eyebrows, cat eyes? sleepy eyes? wide eyes?)
    She has slender, elegant eyebrows and wide eyes that are either frightened or trying their hardest not to cry.


    - Shape of the Face/Head (cheekbones, etc)
    She has an oval face and somewhat small head, but that's probably because she's small. She doesn't have very defined cheekbones. Instead she has chubby cheeks.


    - Mouth
    She has a smallish mouth and bright pink lips.
    - Nose
    A button nose


    - Chin
    A rounded chin to match her baby face.


    - Ears (shape? piercings?)
    Harriet has small round ears.


    - Hands
    Harriet's hands are pale and small and almost always shaking.


    - Feet
    She has tiny feet.


    - Chest and Hips
    Harriet has almost no curves to speak of. She's very thin and has no broadness to her shoulders or chest.


    - Boobs and Penis
    A-cup


    - Height
    5'2


    - Weight
    Her weight changes frequently but stays within the range of 90lbs to 98lbs


    - Skin Color & Complexion
    Harriet is always ghostly pale because of her constant sickness. The only color she ever really gets is from fevers, over exertion or blushing.


    - Race/Species
    She's a human.


    - Skin Texture (Soft skin, rough skin, scaly, furry, dry, bumpy)
    She has soft, smooth skin. It's dry.


    - Fur/Scales/Other? Colors? Feel? Coarseness?
    N/A


    - Body Shape/Build (Thin and lanky, round and fluffy, pudgy, muscular)
    Harriet is thin but she is lanky by no means.


    - Posture
    Because of how she was raised, Harriet has impeccable posture.


    - Distinguishing Features (that set them apart from others or might be unusual or special)
    Nothing I can think of.


    - Tattoos, birthmarks, scars
    She has mental scars but those aren't visible.
     
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  6. I think Gabrielle Hymon would be great for this.

    - Hair Color
    Short, straight, chestnut hair. Never curled. Never wavy. Just straight
    - Hair Style/Length/Texture (widow's peak? bangs? soft? fine? thick?)
    Widow's peak and fine.
    - Eye Color
    Light green, almost neon.
    - Shape/Look of Eyes (eyebrows, cat eyes? sleepy eyes? wide eyes?)
    Eyebrows are a little hairy, cat eyes, and when startled/threatened, wide eyes.
    - Shape of the Face/Head (cheekbones, etc)
    Ovalish, I guess.
    - Mouth
    A long, thing line.
    - Nose
    Perfectly round and long.
    - Chin
    Round.
    - Ears (shape? piercings?)
    Ovals, and no piercings. Ever.
    - Hands
    Pale and always trembling.
    - Feet
    Large, big toenails are cracked.
    - Chest and Hips
    Big chest, beautiful hips.
    - Boobs and Penis
    Average sized boobs, and she's a girl.
    - Height
    Tall for her age, 15.
    - Weight
    A little underweight. Oh, who am I kidding, she's underweight!
    - Skin Color & Complexion
    Pale, and most of the time you can see her bone.
    - Race/Species
    Human
    - Skin Texture (Soft skin, rough skin, scaly, furry, dry, bumpy)
    Soft
    - Fur/Scales/Other? Colors? Feel? Coarseness?
    None
    - Body Shape/Build (Thin and lanky, round and fluffy, pudgy, muscular)
    Muscular
    - Posture
    Still
    - Distinguishing Features (that set them apart from others or might be unusual or special)
    She can hypnotise people, hense the very light green eyes.
    - Tattoos, birthmarks, scars.
    A round dot just above and to the left of her nose, and a scar going across her right hand.
     
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  7. Lucas

    Hair Color- Medium Ash blonde with Medium Golden Brown highlights
    Hair Style/Length/Texture (widow's peak? bangs? soft? fine? thick?)- Medium length coming to a point at the nap of his neck, it's soft hair with bangs that are kept to the side
    Eye Color- Blue with a gold ring around his pupil
    Shape/Look of Eyes (eyebrows, cat eyes? sleepy eyes? wide eyes?)- Well kept eyebrows, about medium thickness. Happy eyes that usually have a sparkle in them.
    Shape of the Face/Head (cheekbones, etc)- Straight jawline with slightly higher cheek bones. A square-ish head shape.
    Mouth- Plump lips that are almost always in a smile.
    Nose- Slightly crooked nose from the several times it's been broken
    Chin- Round chin
    Ears (shape? piercings?)- Round ears. His left ear has three piercings, one in his lobe and two up the side.
    Hands- Small rough hands with long fingers
    Feet- size 10 mens shoes
    Chest and Hips- Small chest and Narrow hips
    Boobs and Penis- No boobs, his dick is on the shorter side but he is rather wide.
    Height- he's roughly 5'7" but he tells everyone he's 5'9"
    Weight- around 140 pounds more likely he's 145
    Skin Color & Complexion- Warm Rosy- a light pinkish tan complexion
    Race/Species- Human
    Skin Texture (Soft skin, rough skin, scaly, furry, dry, bumpy)- soft skin in most places, in others its a bit bumpy from scars.
    Fur/Scales/Other? Colors? Feel? Coarseness?- None
    Body Shape/Build (Thin and lanky, round and fluffy, pudgy, muscular)- Thin and Lanky, but he has some muscles just not very noticeable.
    Posture- He has good Posture
    Distinguishing Features (that set them apart from others or might be unusual or special)-
    Tattoos, birthmarks, scars.- He has several scars across his body, of different sizes, lengths, width, from neck down to his feet.
     
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  8. I'll be completing these for the two characters I use here the most :P

    @adabotcon Here's Marco for you :B

    - Hair Color: Seems black, but under very strong light it turns out it's just very dark brown.
    - Hair Style/Length/Texture: Shoulder length, no bangs, slightly wavy.
    - Eye Color: green.
    - Shape/Look of Eyes: full eyebrows, big expressive eyes.
    - Shape of the Face/Head: midway between oval shaped and square shaped, with a strong jaw.
    - Mouth: grew with slightly crooked teeth, but a certain someone didn't like that and moulded them until they were nice and straight. His mouth isn't either on the small nor the big side.
    - Nose: the bridge of the nose is a bit prominent, showing a bit of arabian heritage.
    - Chin: not prominent, not hidden either. Beard-free.
    - Ears: no piercings nor earrings of any sort.
    - Hands: big, strong hands with long fingers, calloused knuckles.
    - Feet: big and with a bit of hair, calloused on both sides.
    - Chest and Hips: because of musculature, the area of his chest is wider than his hips. Has a bit of body hair, but isn't specially hairy.
    - Boobs and Penis: no boobs xD Average sized penis leaning towards the bigger side of the spectrum, but looks smaller in comparison to how huge his body is.
    - Height: 1,98m
    - Weight: 120kg.
    - Skin Color & Complexion: tanned, olive skin.
    - Race/Species: vampire.
    - Skin Texture (Soft skin, rough skin, scaly, furry, dry, bumpy): most of his skin is soft, but he has several scars scattered over all of his body, and as mentioned before, he has calloused hands and feet because of 'exercise'.
    - Fur/Scales/Other? Colors? Feel? Coarseness?: a certain someone modified his tongue during experiments. Now he has a retractable, 50cm long tongue.
    - Body Shape/Build: big build, muscular after spending all of his life doing martial arts and dancing.
    - Posture: Stands up straight, good posture, head held high, due to, again, spending all of his life doing martial arts and dancing, and not spending that much time in front of TV or a computer.
    - Distinguishing Features: in his native country at least, unusually big.
    - Tattoos, birthmarks, scars: small scars here and there on his body. Many of them are healed with vampiric regeneration and soon replaced by other ones.
     
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  9. Keeping it simple for now. ^^
     
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  10. Elizabeth Heather Glakmen

    - Hair Color
    Dark red almost a scarlet color.
    - Hair Style/Length/Texture (widow's peak? bangs? soft? fine? thick?)
    Short spikey, cut with a piece of glass. Long wavy bangs hanging on one side of her face. Her hair is thick yet very soft.
    - Eye Color
    Bright orange like fire, seem to swirl and glow.
    - Shape/Look of Eyes (eyebrows, cat eyes? sleepy eyes? wide eyes?)
    Cat like eyes with pupils that go from large to tiny slits.
    - Shape of the Face/Head (cheekbones, etc)
    Circular face, high cheekbones and well defined collarbones.
    - Mouth
    Thin lips, pearl white teeth, a small almost invisible cut on the right side of her mouth.
    - Nose
    Her nose has a small point at the end.
    - Chin
    Her chin is well defined and slightly pointed.
    - Ears (shape? piercings?)
    Her ears are slightly pointed and a small hoop hangs on her right ear.
    - Hands
    She has fragile and skilled hands.
    - Feet
    She has smaller feet padded feet so she can land slightly.
    - Chest and Hips
    Her chest is slightly bulkier so she can flap her wings, her hips as thin but she can flick them very easily when she dances sexly.
    - Boobs and Penis
    Her boobs aren't very big but she makes up for it in personality.
    - Height
    She's pretty tall at 6'5''
    - Weight
    She's light weight with her bird bones so she can fly fast.
    - Skin Color & Complexion
    She is snow white(pun intended) .
    - Race/Species
    She is a fallen angel
    - Skin Texture (Soft skin, rough skin, scaly, furry, dry, bumpy)
    Her skin is smooth and soft almost completely blemish free.
    - Fur/Scales/Other? Colors? Feel? Coarseness?
    Her wings are covered in soft feathers made for flight and for coiling around her frame to stay warm, they are waterproof so if she needs to she can go underwater without messing them up.
    - Body Shape/Build (Thin and lanky, round and fluffy, pudgy, muscular)
    She thin fragile looking, most of her height is made up of her legs so maybe a bit lanky.
    - Posture
    She stands as tall as she can, sometimes she can try to make herself smaller when she's scared or sad.
    - Distinguishing Features (that set them apart from others or might be unusual or special)
    Her wings are larger and when spread double her body size, her wings drag when she walks. She has a long cut down from her shoulder to her right wing from crashing into a sharp rock helping her younger brother.
    - Tattoos, birthmarks, scars.
    She has a birthmark on the right side of her pelvis, it's resembles a freckle.
     
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  11. Deen of Ahvviyinn:
     
    - Hair Color
    Chestnut/bronze on his back/sides, pale honey on his underside from muzzled chin to inner thighs, shoulders/back under shroudruff cream with three canary-yellow chevron marks. Also has black "antler" slash marks on shoulders and hips. Mane has steel highlights with blue tips, as if "airbrushed."

    - Hair Style/Length/Texture (widow's peak? bangs? soft? fine? thick?)
    Mane is au naturale (unstyled), medium in length, thick and luxurious.

    - Eye Color
    Emerald green with a slight golden tint
     
    - Shape/Look of Eyes (eyebrows, cat eyes? sleepy eyes? wide eyes?)
    Ovoid and surprisingly expressive.
     
    - Shape of the Face/Head (cheekbones, etc)
    Tapered muzzle, somewhat flattened forehead with a dual-overlaid triangular "badge" between his eyes. Cheeks are rather flat, unless he does his "chipmunk" impersonation.
     
    - Mouth
    Contains a very nice, white, raccoonish set of sharp teeth and a long, slender tongue... and a retractable pair of thin, feelerish "milk" tongues on each side of his "regular" tongue.
     
    - Nose
    Soft, velvety and possessing four nostrils, out near the end of his muzzle. Each nostril pair has its own sinuses.
     
    - Chin
    Being a muzzled creature, not a very prominent feature.
     
    - Ears (shape? piercings?)
    Very large and expressive, resembling those of a kit fox, somewhat (not quite so large in proportion to his head).
     
    - Hands
    Five-fingered, strangely enough, scaled (from elbows to fingertips) and possessing very sharp triangular claws.
     
    - Feet
    Also clawed and scaled like his hands (from "ankles" to toes), only with four toes, set on the end of a very athletic pair of digitigrade legs. No dewclaws.
     
    - Chest and Hips
    Chest barrel-shaped and athletically muscled, hips also muscular yet narrow.
     
    - Boobs and Penis
    Penis is fully retractable, slender and somewhere between four to five inches, depending on his state of arousal. Has natural "tattoos" in black, rest of his "member" being a dark honey color. And what would be the "purpose" of having a penis if he didn't also have... well, a pair of other "endowments"... egg-shaped, about the size of medium Haas avocados, also fully retractable though still "held" tight to the body when "outside."
     
    - Height
    Less than six feet when standing on twos. Given he's just as likely to be on all fours, a precise measure is hard to determine.
     
    - Weight
    Around one-seventy-five... yes, he's a very long, lean, slender being, but his muscular structure is not only athletic, but denser than human. Not to mention, his tail adds to his weight.
     
    - Skin Color & Complexion
    Under fur, skin color pretty much matches his fur. Scales on fore and hind limbs are a green closely matched to his eye color, with some darker highlights.
     
    - Race/Species
    Nism.
     
    - Skin Texture (Soft skin, rough skin, scaly, furry, dry, bumpy)
    Furry... underneath fur, smooth for the most part, with some areas tending to deerskin in texture.
     
    - Fur/Scales/Other? Colors? Feel? Coarseness?
    Colors have already been mentioned. Fur feel? Like petting a mink. Though fur thickness depends on season, of course. Scales are like heavy leather, the kind used for saddles, or perhaps the covers of Encyclopedias. Tail is long, thicker at base and narrowing towards tip, with two-thirds of the underside (from "vent" towards tip) scaled like the underside of a snake, color matching the scales on his other limbs.
     
    - Body Shape/Build (Thin and lanky, round and fluffy, pudgy, muscular)
    Long, lean, slender, yet with muscle quite evident under fur when he moves. Think longer-limbed ferret.
     
    - Posture
    Anywhere from standing upright like a meerkat to down on all fours.
     
    - Distinguishing Features (that set them apart from others or might be unusual or special)
    Deen is just a "typical" male of his species. As a male of the Bloodline Ahvviyinn, however, his shroudruff (think "peacocks fan") has blood red feathers with blue tips.
     
    - Tattoos, birthmarks, scars
    All of his "tattoos" are natural, otherwise no birthmarks or scars.

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  12. Tammie Martin
    Hair Color:
    Her hair is a light sandy blonde color with some natural darker brown highlights.

    Hair Style/Length/Texture (widow's peak? bangs? soft? fine? thick?)
    Tammie's hair is really thick, fluffy, and curly. She keeps it short, it ends at her shoulders. She has bangs but keeps them parted in the middle.

    Eye Color
    Her eyes are kind of a mossy green color with a bit of a yellow tint to them, though this part is only visible in just the right lighting.

    Shape/Look of Eyes (eyebrows, cat eyes? sleepy eyes? wide eyes?)
    She has large, round, almost childlike eyes that sometimes make her seem younger than she really is. Her lashes are pretty long too. She keeps her brows plucked and shaped pretty well. She has really femme-y brows.

    Shape of the Face/Head (cheekbones, etc)
    She has a square shaped face with high cheekbones.

    Mouth
    Tammie's lips aren't too thin, but they aren't as full as she'd like them to be. Her girlfriend has really nice, full lips and she's pretty envious of her.

    Nose
    She has a ski slope nose.

    Chin
    Her chin is pretty round.

    Ears (shape? piercings?)
    Ovular ears with unattached earlobes. Her ears are pierced once, and she usually just tends to wear small studs in them, or hoops when she's out on the street.

    Hands
    She actually doesn't have horribly manly hands, yay, but her hands are big. She keeps her nails short, but they're always painted some sort of color. Maybe she's got some nail art going if she's in a good mood. Party.

    Feet
    She wears a size 10 in women's shoes. She keeps her toenails nice and they're almost always painted some color (most often red).

    Chest and Hips
    Her chest is described in the next question. Her hips are still slightly boyish, but her hormones are helping to redistribute her body fat and give her at least some hips.

    Boobs and Penis
    Her chest is still developing, as a result of the estrogen she takes, at the moment they're at a small B cup. Her penis, which she still has, and will until she has the money for surgery, is about an average five inches.

    Height
    Tammie's a bit shorter than her girlfriend, who's around 6'0, so I think I would place her somewhere near the 5'7 or 5'8 mark.

    Weight:
    I guess I'll put her at about 115lbs. She doesn't eat as much as she needs to since she and Marilyn are pretty poor.

    Skin Color & Complexion
    She has a fairly decent complexion, doesn't really break out a whole lot, but when she does it's usually on her forehead or her nose. She's actually quite tan, in contrast to a lot of my other characters being so pale.

    Race/Species
    Human

    Skin Texture (Soft skin, rough skin, scaly, furry, dry, bumpy)
    Tammie has really soft skin because she exfoliates like A LOT. Sometimes her legs are a bit bumpy or rough in places because she uses an epilator to get rid of the hair and sometimes it's nice and sometimes it leaves her legs a mess.

    Fur/Scales/Other? Colors? Feel? Coarseness?
    N/A

    Body Shape/Build (Thin and lanky, round and fluffy, pudgy, muscular)
    She's not fat, but she is a bit pudgy in some places (like her stomach), and isn't really too muscular. Her fighting skills are awful because she's not really strong. If you made Tammie fight an orange, the orange would win. Probably.

    Posture
    She doesn't normally stand tall because she's a generally timid person and usually wants to attract as little attention as possible. It's why her nickname from Marilyn is "Mouse."

    Distinguishing Features (that set them apart from others or might be unusual or special)
    She's a transgender woman, I think that's at least a little bit distinguishing.

    Tattoos, birthmarks, scars.
    No tattoos, but she does have a little mole birthmark on her cheek under her right eye. She has a few scars on her legs and back that she wound up with as a result of her sex work.
     
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  13. I've been practicing how to make descriptive paragraphs less descriptive and more flowery, it helps that the narrator is an actual character, and his impressions color the way he describes things.

    Here's a little bit from a story I have in the works, in this scene a soldier transfered from another sector lays eyes for the first time on one of his comrades which is like an urban legend amongst their ranks and to their enemies.​

    As she emerged from the murky river I was blinded by a vision of thick black curls like entangled snakes framing a rounded face that ended with a pointed chin. I was struck from that face by two large brown irises that swam in bloodshot yellow pools of a perfectly symmetrical oval shape. Beauty aside, the narrow bridge of her nose and flattened tip reminded me of an oil painting of a catholic virgin. Light brown lips where but a thin line, wet and inviting that promised not sweetness but a torrent of pure sulfuric acid, just staring at her tore my senses apart.

    The landscape uncovered by the water was the garden of eden, first the small mounds of flesh enticing me to become a cannibal followed by a slender waist and broad hips with the proportions of a hourglass counting to infinity. Toned, slender arms, thick, athletic thighs with chiseled muscles, hand drawn by the pencil of the gods. Hers was a body created in an unique mold, that was then destroyed and it's pieces separated, so there could be none like her.

    With the sky ablaze by a golden, luminous, flaming sun, her wet skin acquired a red hue, like dark ochre, like a dash of sun dried blood. Having already bled to death by a thousand cuts, scars adorned her body like pale gashes on her arms, legs and torso. Two venomous centipedes, the only scars that where sown, ran across her abdomen and her lower back respectively. Her shape was lean, light, so light she appeared to float out of the water, giving her the appearance of an immaculate demon, or a horrendous angel.

    To my eyes she was a woman for whom I would push the doomsday button, a woman that would make immortality worth while. A beast, an erotic machine, a feminine animal, I felt the urge to steal the phallus of a satyr and use it to explore her entrails and flood her with the seed of a god, hot enough to melt pearls.

    But she was Anita Mitra Riqart, born and raised in the jungles held by the RAFA, who had lived each of her years as a guerrilla and never known what it was to be a civilian. Who lived everyday for the revolutionary motto, "Forward Unto Victory" or to kill 'them' all before the death of the revolution, and her own.

    A woman I could never have.
     
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  14. It's definitely flowery, but if I can offer a criticism, try to avoid straying into purple prose. When everything is described like it's a religious experience, it runs a high risk of coming off pretentious and/or pompous, and distancing the reader :/
     
  15. Nova Slade Let's see if I can do this in paragraph form without leaving details out. The challenge has been accepted. I'm using Nova, a character from a story I am developing with the lovely Peregrine. (Characters: https://www.iwakuroleplay.com/threads/cast-and-crew-of-the-circus.119005/#post-2472859
    Nova's backstory: https://www.iwakuroleplay.com/threads/ta-da-short-writing-pieces.110769/) The scene I am about to describe is set a year before Nova gained her position in the circus as a backstage manager. At this time she was just part of the beast act, used to be paraded for the sake of the audience.


    Nova stood just off stage in the gloom, features concealed in shadow. She listened for her cue, ears perked up attentively. Soon approached a tall, bulky man with sleek, white bull like horns protruding from his head. He wore the attire suitable for his act, donning flexible black pants and a clean, grey coat with silver buttons. Behind him he pulled forth a large cage with thick iron bars, the small, quietly squeaking wheels underneath granting it the ability to be moved. "Are you ready?"the man asked in a gruff voice, green eyes holding a glimmer of question. Nova nodded, nerves on end and heart hammering within her chest. She usually felt this way before shows, the swell and clamor of the waiting crowd enough to excite her.

    With a carefully placed paw, she lifted herself up into the cage and allowed the bull horned man to shut it. Her canine like anatomy forced her to walk upon her toes, making it appear as if her legs bent differently than that of a human's, though in reality it was just a matter of how she carried herself since the actual bone structure was similar. Nova's flexible, feline like tail was swishing to and fro in an anxious way. The claws of her hind canine paws scratched lightly against the cold metal. To achieve a more animal appearance, she decided to deviate from her usual bipedal way of moving. Crouching down, she rested her clawed hands upon the floor of the cage. Since she was not built to maneuver herself on four legs due to her bone structure and lack of front paws, Nova was only able to move around in such a manner for short periods of time for the duration of the act.

    Now she was being wheeled out onto the stage within the confines of the metal bars, being pulled out by the beast "tamer." He brought her to the center of the stage where the spotlights shined brightly upon her figure. Nova heard the familiar sound of the crowd as they took in her beastly appearance. They hushed one another, sitting on the edge of their seats and stifling their cheers.

    To many, Nova appeared to be very alike to a hellhound. When standing, she could easily reach 5'8" with her lean muscles and upright posture. Her body was covered in wiry short, black fur with longer,silkier strands on her neck and the back of her head in an unkempt mane like fashion. Most noticeable was her head since it was far from human. Nova had a large canine skull that was stripped of fur, skin, and flesh. She only had milky white bone and minimal, deep red muscle. The skull gave her a long, narrow snout that ended in a deep indention where a wet, mushroom shaped nose should have been. She had a mouth full of sharp teeth, allowing a wolf like scissor bite and an overall aggressive appearance. There were also indentations where her eyes were, though instead of kindly looking dog eyes Nova had two orbs that were black as pitch as if the entirety of them was pupil. A narrow, pink tongue rested inside her mouth, contained and hidden away by her long teeth. Tall, eight inch long canine ears protruded from her head and end in sharp points. They were leathery, thin, and almost rabbit like with small metal studs running up each one. Growing out from the back of her narrow pelvis was a meter long, flexible tail. The tail ended in a plume of silky fur alike to that which grew around her head, neck, and chest area. Nova had a more masculine build since the supernatural cells that altered her appearance had both pushed out and flattened her chest.

    For the sake of the act, Nova had been stripped of clothing. Not that nudity was a problem since she was covered in fur and had lost most all of her feminine features. The only clue that she was female was that her muscles were much leaner to giver her a more appearance, lacking the excessive bulk that most found in a male beast creatures. Rising upwards, Nova reached her hands out towards the bars. She still had all five fingers like a human would, but they were covered in fur save for rough, dark skinned palms. Each finger ended in a dark one and half inch long claw that curved at the end. Nova held the bars and faced the stands to see the audience members. Many wore fearful, yet excited expressions. The faces of children peered down at her, utter wonderment and fear plastered onto their little, fleshy faces. Nova decided to play her part and clicked her teeth together in a menacing manner, a low growl emerging from her throat. Shifting her weight from paw to paw, she slammed her tail against the bars suddenly and was internally satisfied by the flinching and fearful murmuring that ensued.

    Nova turned suddenly and paced within the cage, the space being five feet long and the same wide with a height of about seven feet, allowing some movement. Here she stalked, tail dragging behind her and head turning back and forth as she continued to release a low growling sound. Suddenly a whip cracked just outside of the bars, Nova being used to it enough to avoid flinching like she had accidentally done the first few times she was in the act. Now she knew to instead face the trainer that had lashed out with the bull whip. They want a beast, so I better give them one. she thought to herself. Throwing her body against the front of the cage her long ears flattened against her head and her muscles bunched together, teeth clacking angrily. Snapping the air, Nova recovered from ramming into the cage wall, having jerked the whole thing forwards. Centering herself and planting the thick pads of her paws on the cool metal, Nova dropped her long fingered hands to her sides and threw her skeletal head forwards, opening her maw to release an almost deafening roar.
     
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  16. Alright, this seems like a good chance to flex.

    William is a fine looking young man standing roughly six feet tall. His hair was long, thick and shaggy, unkempt and the color of a raven's feathers without the sheen that accompanied them. It'd been some time since he had had a haircut, the ends of his hair were split and curling in on themselves. Parted simply in the middle, his black curtains drew back to reveal an oval shaped face with a rounded chin and to hide what ears he had left. He was clean shaven more or less, with just a slight hint of a stubble growing on his cheeks and along the line of his deceptively fragile chin. His eyebrows were thin and dark, almost pencil lines forming arches above the windows of his soul. His round, tired eyes were a very vibrant grey color, which is to say the looked dark blue at a distance only to reveal their true colors up close. They had bags beneath them, dark patches of skin which seemed to stretch and darken as they followed the ridge of his nose. A nose which was, by all accounts of reasoning, perfectly fit on his face - not too long or too wide, not stubbed or downtrodden and not beset with flared nostrils. His mouth was a hard, drawn line that was trying hard not to become a frown, the lips that made up this visage cracked and dried and still somewhat bleeding, a testament to how dry the rest of his skin was. A wide scar prevailed as the defining mark on his face along the left side of his chin, rising up to just beneath his bottom lip and trailing down along his neck, roughly six inches of gnarled flesh in all.

    The neck that connected to this face was thin but strong, tapering out to broad, strong shoulders. His skin was pale, save for the spots of sunburn along his forehead, nose, cheeks, shoulders, arms, back and legs - a mild tanning of the sun that left his skin tender to the touch and red, blessed with a constant warmth as a reminder that it'd been kissed by the sun. William's arms were long and thin, all skin and bones and muscles especially at the wrists. Looking at just his bicep and hand, it'd be reasonable to assume it belonged to someone malnourished. What muscles he did have were to be expected of someone his age though they were nothing to sing praises over. The wrists, incredibly thin though they were and looking as though they were not but bone and tendons, gave way to a pair of wide, dexterous hands. True to their wrists' lead, his hands were quite thin and bony with long fingers and round knuckles. His nails were dirty and unkempt, much like his hair and betrayed that it'd been some time since he last bathed properly or even had a chance to.

    His torso was what you might consider average for someone so thin - the muscles beneath pressing up against the dry and dirty skin to proclaim "Look! Look! There is no body fat to be found here!" and yet were only as developed as the muscles in his arms. William's ribs showed if only just and lead the eyes along a trail of his body that lead down to his hips which were particularly narrow. His nipples were dark in color and small, a few sparse hairs growing around them as well as on his chest. At the bottom of his belly button was even more hair, thin and wispy unlike the thick veils upon his head. The further down this happy trail went the thicker and more numerous they became.

    His hips, like his wrists and hands, were particularly bony and stuck out as a point of notice for the eyes although, like his ribs, they were only just so. The genitals that hung between his legs were covered in a rather thin bush of pubic hair as black as the hair on his head. His parent's had decided not to circumcise him as an infant and so his foreskin remained whole. Appearing somewhat small at first glance, William would always gladly tell (and demonstrate if need be) whoever pointed out the size of his flaccid penis that he was a grower, not a shower, meaning that his full size wouldn't be revealed until arousal had set in one way or another. A very average pair of testicles hung beneath that. His legs, very much unlike his arms and torso, were thick and well developed - easily the most muscular part of his body. Years of walking, running and being generally active on his feet had left him with well developed calves and thighs although his knees were not spared the bony fate that the rest of his extremities seemed to share. His legs were of course covered in thin, wispy black hairs that grew sparser and sparser the further up his legs one traveled. These legs went up to a very modest and compact posterior, also well developed like his legs from physical exercise. His feet were proportionate with his hands and, like their upper counter parts, were connected to the rest of his body with a pair of thin, bony ankles. His toes were long yet thick, good at curling in over themselves and creating a nice strong grip.

    Aside from the scar, the only other distinguishing markings upon William's body were the black markings all along his arms, legs and back. Purely black in color with no variations in shade, one might first mistake them for a set of tribal tattoos that looked like flames dancing over one another in a mad rush of traffic. In truth they were more akin to burns, the skin on which they inhabit feeling much like the scar on his chin rather than the rest of his skin. They sufficed as identifying markers though and William had long since grown accustomed to referring to them as tattoos and telling others as such - it was simpler that way. All in all, William was a very handsome young man if not a bit on the skinny side. He was dirty and unkempt but not repulsively so, he was tired and in need of a good night's rest but not falling over himself. He had a very old air about him, as if he had been standing there for many years and would continue to do so for many more, and when he did move he would return back to that spot to stand again. He had an old soul, and it showed all over in how he held himself, the look in his exhausted eyes and the slight slouch he stood with. If nothing else though, I'm sure it could be agreed that he could use a shower to clean off the dirty and sand that cakes his skin - he'd surely look much better after a good wash after all.
     
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  17. Saw this while re-familiarizing myself with the website's new appearance (Long-ish story), decided to give it a shot.

    Character in question: Nikki Swanson
    Theme: Darker & Edgier Superhuman Mercenaries

    - Hair Color
    In context, none
    - Hair Style/Length/Texture (widow's peak? bangs? soft? fine? thick?)
    See above
    - Eye Color
    Green
    - Shape/Look of Eyes (eyebrows, cat eyes? sleepy eyes? wide eyes?)
    Cat-like.
    - Shape of the Face/Head (cheekbones, etc)
    Head of a cat, like (for lack of a better reference) a Bengal
    - Mouth
    Thin lips, capable of human expressions of emotion
    - Nose
    Black, triangular nose
    - Chin
    Non-cleft, small, short
    - Ears (shape? piercings?)
    Large cat-like (triangular) ears
    - Hands
    Claws, thin pads for palms, short fur
    - Feet
    Plantigrade, claws, thicker pads, short fur
    - Chest and Hips
    Vague hourglass shape, still has internal organs, built for flexibility
    - Boobs and Penis
    Last time she checked, she still has two (2) X-chromosomes. On the small side of a B-cup.
    - Height
    6'0'', Six feet tall
    - Weight
    145 lb, One-hundred-fourty-five pounds
    - Skin Color & Complexion
    Does fur count? If so, she has brown fur
    - Race/Species
    Superhuman, Werebeast (sub-species), Werecat (sub-sub-species), Umbrakinetic (Power species)
    - Skin Texture (Soft skin, rough skin, scaly, furry, dry, bumpy)
    Short, soft fur
    - Fur/Scales/Other? Colors? Feel? Coarseness?
    See above
    - Body Shape/Build (Thin and lanky, round and fluffy, pudgy, muscular)
    Small muscles, acrobatic, lean, flexible
    - Posture
    Stands tall, looks straight ahead. Only exceptions are during combat and acrobatics (It takes a lot of work to maintain her form)
    - Distinguishing Features (that set them apart from others or might be unusual or special)
    Uh... Only umbrakinetic with eyes that glow when using her powers? A bit short for her species?
    - Tattoos, birthmarks, scars.
    None, yet

    Some sample paragraph splices where these descriptions might make sense (Cuss words have been censored for good taste):

    Side Characters: Vikki Lynn, Random Civilians, "co-workers" (Superhuman mercenaries)

    Nikki checked her appearance in the mirror to make sure that she looked decent for the date she and her girlfriend had set up. Her brown fur was still smooth, no knots due to being short, and she had remembered to use conditioner during her earlier shower (a real pain), so her fur was still soft. Deeming it good enough, she left in the hopes that no supervillain had plans that would conflict hers.

    Vikki had her stand up straight, then held her hand at the top of her ears, then her other hand at the top of Nikki's ears. The white werecat chuckled, "You're shorter than me." Nikki blushed in embarrassment, "Don't remind me, I'm only six feet tall." Vikki, in a bout of playfulness, wrapped her arms around Nikki's back and legs and lifted her up bridal-style, "You're lighter too!" Nikki growled in irritation, "Hey, 145 pounds is ideal for free-running..." Nikki paused for a moment, "...I think."

    "How is it that f---ing hard to tell that I'm a woman?" Nikki mumbled aloud, staring at herself in the mirror. Vikki, elsewhere in the room, called out to her, "You're a tomboy. You've got small breasts, and you're not one of those pencil-waist sex-objectified superheroes with giant bossoms." Nikki pulled her shirt off to better look at her chest, "I look at me and see a female. The fact that I have breasts at all should give those a--wipes a perfectly good idea of what sex I am." Vikki's voice called back, "Maybe you're a hermaphrodite." Nikki figured this had to be ridiculous, but still checked between her legs to make sure, "Nope, still female." A male voice behind her made her jump, "Media slander. That's exactly it. Now put your shirt back on, Nick says we got training in five."

    "You ever wonder why we can talk?" Nikki's green, cat-like eyes stared at the empty teacup before her as she responded to Vikki's inquiry, "No." There was a long, awkward silence before Nikki finally asked, "Why?" Vikki responded, "Well, think about it. We've got all the physical traits of cats, and we speak like people. Now why is that?" Nikki turned to Vikki, "No idea. Generally, I don't think about it because it gives me a headache."
     
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  18. Hans Brooks
    - Hair Color
    Black
    - Hair Style/Length/Texture (widow's peak? bangs? soft? fine? thick?)
    His hair is long, goes all the way down passed his shoulders. However, he keeps his hair in a bun, not due to tradition of where he comes from just because a ponytail isn't his style and he certainly doesn't want his hair being in his face. He's got smooth straight, thick hair, very healthy for being a pirate surrounded by sea water.
    - Eye Color
    Brown with incredible depth
    - Shape/Look of Eyes (eyebrows, cat eyes? sleepy eyes? wide eyes?)
    He's Chinese, so his eyes aren't round like a Westerner's. He's got wonderfully shaped eyebrows, risen at an arch above his deep brown eyes.
    - Shape of the Face/Head (cheekbones, etc)
    He's got a thinner face with cheekbones defined well but not in such a way it makes his face look bony. He's got a slight squarish look to his chin but it's rounded a bit.
    - Mouth
    He's got thinnish lips, but there's a little more thickness to them, probably from his mother's side of the family.
    - Nose
    He's got a long nose but kind of thick at the end. His nose is slightly pointed yet rounded.
    - Chin
    (Already covered this)
    - Ears (shape? piercings?)
    (Covered this already)
    - Hands
    He's got very strong looking hands (and arms). They aren't outrageously large nor small, but powerful.
    - Feet
    His feet are narrow and small, with scars stretching across each joint near the inner part of the big toe.
    - Chest and Hips
    He's got a broad chest and very muscular (not over kill but enough to show that he's gotten a lot of experience with heavy lifting). He's got scars across his chest from duels and fights, one blotch like scar on his right pectoral from being shot.

    He's got narrow hips but they aren't bony. He's a small guy but muscularly built.

    - Boobs and Penis
    He's biologically male so he doesn't have breasts. His penis is normal in size for an adult male, but his girth is slightly bigger than the normal man's.
    - Height
    He stands about five foot two, still quite intimidating though.
    - Weight
    He weighs about one hundred and sixty
    - Skin Color & Complexion
    He's got tannish skin and a clean complexion
    - Race/Species
    He's Chinese and quite human.
    - Skin Texture (Soft skin, rough skin, scaly, furry, dry, bumpy)
    He's got rough skin for the most part.
    - Fur/Scales/Other? Colors? Feel? Coarseness?
    N/A
    - Body Shape/Build (Thin and lanky, round and fluffy, pudgy, muscular)
    He's muscular but not outrageously. He's lean and as fit as a whistle (he's got a mesomorph body type)
    - Posture
    Stands tall, always looks proud. Never slouches.
    - Distinguishing Features (that set them apart from others or might be unusual or special)
    He's got a fantastic beard. Whether that sticks out or not is the real question but his beard reaches all around his mouth in a kind of shadow with thicker hair on the upper lips and a nice patch on his chin.
    - Tattoos, birthmarks, scars.
    He's got multiple scars across his chest from previous fights, but one that really sticks out is the one on his left pectoral from a gunshot. It's a blotch but he thinks if you look really closely it looks like a ship almost.