Cupid's Illusions

Discussion in 'THREAD ARCHIVES' started by Sweet~Taboo, Apr 8, 2010.

  1. "She won't. Lady Kunari's angels are watching Alena 24/7. Of course they're not too happy to be taking orders from a wolf but everyone is trap in their own little world right now." Nora sigh heavily.
     
  2. Oooooo! I love it!

    I like these lines the most

    A body completely sick
    And a heart damn near dead
     
  3. Yay! Im so glad you like it! its so emo-broken hearted-lovehate and old, but one of my favorites! So THAAANKS!
     
  4. The imagery is quite vivid...I applaud your work.

    but

    I DEMAND MORE!
     
  5. Thank youuu! I will put more up eventually!
     
  6. Some stuff for you~ :3. Firstly, I noticed that you had an a-b-a-b rhyme scheme going on. You don't necessarily have to make it rhyme. I sort of noticed that the lack of punctuation and the lack of stanzas made it seem sort of post-modern in style. The description was rather vivid as Jack Shade already mentioned. Keep postin'; I want to read more!
     
  7. Thanks for the advice. I seem to be the type to do A-B-A-B, or A-A-B-B and such. I feel more comfortable writing that way. I seem to forget punctuations too! Ill definately post more, but they all seem to be in the same sense as this one. But I always apreciate advice, and help! So thanks again