Cupid's Illusions

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Sweet~Taboo

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So i usually hate to share my poems, but i got inspired and figured id give it a try. Basic poem format. I will take any opinions, i aint scurred! =}



[FONT=Verdana, Arial, Helvetica, sans-serif]Stuck with duds from cupid[/FONT]
[FONT=Verdana, Arial, Helvetica, sans-serif]Trapped in distractions [/FONT]
[FONT=Verdana, Arial, Helvetica, sans-serif]Enlightened to feel stupid[/FONT]
[FONT=Verdana, Arial, Helvetica, sans-serif]Hypnotized by false actions[/FONT]
[FONT=Verdana, Arial, Helvetica, sans-serif]An illusion to the heart[/FONT]
[FONT=Verdana, Arial, Helvetica, sans-serif]And to the mind an ease[/FONT]
[FONT=Verdana, Arial, Helvetica, sans-serif]Love is a poisoned dart[/FONT]
[FONT=Verdana, Arial, Helvetica, sans-serif]Brought by an emotional tease[/FONT]
[FONT=Verdana, Arial, Helvetica, sans-serif]A heart perpetually split[/FONT]
[FONT=Verdana, Arial, Helvetica, sans-serif]The inside hollowed out [/FONT]
[FONT=Verdana, Arial, Helvetica, sans-serif]Small pieces left to transmit[/FONT]
[FONT=Verdana, Arial, Helvetica, sans-serif]It's bittersweet route[/FONT]
[FONT=Verdana, Arial, Helvetica, sans-serif]The numerous attempts failed [/FONT]
[FONT=Verdana, Arial, Helvetica, sans-serif]To heal its despair[/FONT]
[FONT=Verdana, Arial, Helvetica, sans-serif]Came more tears inhaled[/FONT]
[FONT=Verdana, Arial, Helvetica, sans-serif]And one more deep tear [/FONT]
[FONT=Verdana, Arial, Helvetica, sans-serif]Crooked smiles to the public[/FONT]
[FONT=Verdana, Arial, Helvetica, sans-serif]Broken frowns in my head[/FONT]
[FONT=Verdana, Arial, Helvetica, sans-serif]A body completely sick[/FONT]
[FONT=Verdana, Arial, Helvetica, sans-serif]And a heart damn near dead[/FONT]
[FONT=Verdana, Arial, Helvetica, sans-serif]Condensed to only lust[/FONT]
[FONT=Verdana, Arial, Helvetica, sans-serif]And acts to see it through[/FONT]
[FONT=Verdana, Arial, Helvetica, sans-serif]Convinced of lying trust[/FONT]
[FONT=Verdana, Arial, Helvetica, sans-serif]Until the final adieu[/FONT]
[FONT=Verdana, Arial, Helvetica, sans-serif]Another moment neglected[/FONT]
[FONT=Verdana, Arial, Helvetica, sans-serif]Another cry for concern[/FONT]
[FONT=Verdana, Arial, Helvetica, sans-serif]One heart deeply infected[/FONT]
[FONT=Verdana, Arial, Helvetica, sans-serif]With another's cryptic burn[/FONT]​
 

Hydronine

The Murrstress
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Writing Levels
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Preferred Character Gender
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Genres
Scifi, Fantasy, Modern, Magical, Horror, Noir, apocalyptic, Grimdark, yaoi, yuri, anything really.
Oooooo! I love it!

I like these lines the most

[FONT=Verdana, Arial, Helvetica, sans-serif]A body completely sick[/FONT]
[FONT=Verdana, Arial, Helvetica, sans-serif]And a heart damn near dead[/FONT]
 
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Sweet~Taboo

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Yay! Im so glad you like it! its so emo-broken hearted-lovehate and old, but one of my favorites! So THAAANKS!
 

Jack Shade

Anti-Hero
Genres
Magical, Fantasy, Supernatural, Sci Fi, Steam Punk, Noir, HORROR, and I'm willing to try Romance.
The imagery is quite vivid...I applaud your work.

but

I DEMAND MORE!
 
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Sweet~Taboo

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Original poster
Thank youuu! I will put more up eventually!
 
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Acquariana

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Some stuff for you~ :3. Firstly, I noticed that you had an a-b-a-b rhyme scheme going on. You don't necessarily have to make it rhyme. I sort of noticed that the lack of punctuation and the lack of stanzas made it seem sort of post-modern in style. The description was rather vivid as Jack Shade already mentioned. Keep postin'; I want to read more!
 
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Sweet~Taboo

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Thanks for the advice. I seem to be the type to do A-B-A-B, or A-A-B-B and such. I feel more comfortable writing that way. I seem to forget punctuations too! Ill definately post more, but they all seem to be in the same sense as this one. But I always apreciate advice, and help! So thanks again