A Little Excerpt...

Discussion in 'THREAD ARCHIVES' started by soullesshuman, Nov 15, 2010.

  1. So... This is a little excerpt from my current NaNoWriMo work, it's untitled. It's about these two people in one body, Thaselres and Thaseldes, Thaselres is very protective and moody, Thaseldes is very stupid and clueless. Please ignore typos/grammar mistakes, as I'm looking for concrits of the overall scene. This is where Thaselres, a guy who is not unwilling to 'tell it like it is' and basically has trust issues with just about everyone, sits down and finally has a serious man-to-man talk with the King. Of course, things go a little awry...

    It's not very good, I admit... But I was convinced to post SOME of my works here, so... please be gentle.